“Who just leaves this much money behind?” Ruby asked.

Jess looked uneasy. “Someone who probably needs it.”

“What if it’s from something bad? Like, stolen money?” Ruby said.

Jess hesitated. “Or maybe it’s someone’s rent money, or for groceries.”

They sat quietly for a moment, thinking. Finally, Jess stood up. “We should take it to the police. If no one claims it, then maybe we can keep it.”

Ruby groaned but agreed, following her friend.

Across the street, a man in a trench coat watched them, relief crossing his face as they walked away.

=> Comment: Compelling story! Natural dialogue that reveals character personalities and emotions.

Improving points:

- The ending is strong but abrupt. More lines about the man’s reaction or intention might add more satisfying closure.