Group 4 💖 by Dinh Hoang Lan Anh

Choppy & stringy sentences

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Choppy sentences

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➤ Too short

➤ Too many simple sentences
➤ Sentences that are difficult to read
➤ Sentences that lack variety in structure

Stringy sentences

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➤ Too many clauses
➤ Connected with “Connectors”
➤ As much as speaking
➤ Continue without ending

Example

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Incorrect: The lack of rainfall has caused a severe water shortage, so people have to conserve water every day, and they also have to think of new ways to reuse water, but the situation is improving.

➤ Correct: The lack of rainfall has caused a severe water shortage. Although the situation is improving, people have to conserve water every day, and think of new ways to reuse water

How to fix

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➤ Interrupt sentences
➤ Rewrite sentences

How to fix

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➤ Add transition words
➤ Combine short sentences
➤ Use different sentences structures

Example

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The Japanese consume a lot of rice. The Japanese eat more fish than red meat.

➤ The Japanese consume a lot of rice, and they eat more fish than red meat.

If one sentence depends on the other, make a complex sentence using who, which, when, although, if, because, as soon as, etc

Exercise

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1. He enrolled in an intermediate calculus class, but he found it too easy, so he dropped it,and he signed up for the advanced class. …………………………………………………………………………………………………………………….……………………….

2. First-born children in a family often have more responsibility than their younger siblings,and they feel pressure to set a good example, so they often become superachievers.

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Exercise

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1-My son spilled the pickle jar at dinner. I had to wash the kitchen floor.
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2-Sidney likes loud music. His parents can't stand it. He wears earphones
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