https://padlet.com/26svanterpool/zeo3xr3e14yh Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2019-12-05 16:40:26 UTC 2019-12-10 16:55:42 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.net/icons/png/1f43c.png 26mlatham https://padlet.com/26svanterpool/zeo3xr3e14yh/wish/420859975 I am really proud you followed my advice! That includes rearranging the date of the election and the remaking of the election process! The teachers trait was shown in the story much more than before. I wish however that you made a bigger bond with Olivia and Skylar when they first met at lunch, and giving London a reason to be mean. Other than that great story! You fixed almost everything!

]]> 2019-12-06 16:49:06 UTC https://padlet.com/26svanterpool/zeo3xr3e14yh/wish/420859975 26jmccummings https://padlet.com/26svanterpool/zeo3xr3e14yh/wish/422208906 Hey buddy!  I love the description in this piece I can just picture what Skylar looks like on this podium.  I think this is the best descriptive writing I’ve ever seen.  Because it’s a big part for the readers to picture the moment which I can totally see.  In addition I love the topic of your story It’s like an everyday life in high school.  People making a big deal about being president and the loser who are always trying to cause some trouble.  In a way this kinda reminds me of  “Stuck In The Middle.”  Because their family is always getting in to drama at school. In conclusion I suggest when ever she has a thought to not say “I thought” all the time at the end and change it up a bit.  Because it kinda starts to get boring.  But overall I love this piece and I can’t wait to read another one of your pieces!

]]> 2019-12-10 15:23:32 UTC https://padlet.com/26svanterpool/zeo3xr3e14yh/wish/422208906 26vvirga https://padlet.com/26svanterpool/zeo3xr3e14yh/wish/422266990 Your story was very descriptive, especially when you describe her dream in the beginning. I also love London’s character traits. One thing that you could work on is not stating things twice. For example, “She hopped on the chestnut brown podium and started my speech “Hello my name is London Burlington! She stomped onto the stage, hopped on the podium and started her speech. “Hello everyone I‘m London Burlington”]]> 2019-12-10 16:42:47 UTC https://padlet.com/26svanterpool/zeo3xr3e14yh/wish/422266990 26tribaudo https://padlet.com/26svanterpool/zeo3xr3e14yh/wish/422267013 I really like how the dream about being class president in the beginning becomes real by the end. It helps the story feels well-rounded. I also like how you describe Skylar's frustration about the paper air planes hitting her on the head and how she reacts when she finds out that it was London the whole time. It makes me feel like it's really happening and not just written on paper.  Although your story is amazing,  I don't feel like it should have ended that way. There should have been a scene to show that Skylar changed. ]]> 2019-12-10 16:42:50 UTC https://padlet.com/26svanterpool/zeo3xr3e14yh/wish/422267013