Carter's Personal Narrative by Kevin Van Dyke

Brooke Baarda

2014-04-22 14:03:27 UTC

My favorite part of your story is when you thought to yourself what am I doing? Also when you were thinking about all of the bad things that could happen to you! Great story it was fun to read.

payton van wyk

2014-04-24 13:45:33 UTC

my favorite part is when you said that you piled in the car and you did a good jod

Trinity Sommar

2014-04-24 13:46:25 UTC

my favorite part of the story was at the begining of the story when you said have you ever done something so dumb you just want to redoo it your story was awesome i loved it!

Hadley

2014-04-24 13:50:09 UTC

My favorite part of your story was when you thought to yourself what am I doing! That was funny! I also liked that you told a lot of your inner thoughts. One more of my favorite parts was when you described the whole water park and what you felt and smelled when you walked in I felt like I was there myself. Good job cater cant wait to read more of you stories!

Denali Conover

2014-04-24 13:51:44 UTC

My favorite parts in your story was when you said, what the heck am I doing. I like the words you used. The first time I went on the high dive I was scared to! I also like the words said in the story, like the alligator skinned ladder. I agree with you about when you step on the cement it is blazing hot. Good job on your story!

Mason Jansen

2014-04-25 13:48:40 UTC

My favorite part of your story is when you were on top of the diving board and saying all the bad things that could happened. Why would you of all the bad things? You slip and fall on the concrete, the diving board breaks, there is a random shark in the water. Good job and funny story.

2014-04-25 13:50:29 UTC

Elizabeth Squires

2014-04-25 13:55:00 UTC

I had a lot of favorite parts in your story, but my favorite 3 are when you said the steps looked looked like alligator skin. One of the other favorite parts I had was when you said What the heck am I doing! I liked how you included your inner thoughts. My last favorite part was when you said the high dive looked deadly so you went on the regular one. I really liked your story!

Jaden Brand

2014-04-25 14:02:34 UTC

I had a lot of favorite parts in your story and I can see why you wouldn't want to jump I've felt that way before as well. My favorite parts were when you were procrastinating if you wanted to jump or not. I also liked how you came up with all those excuses like what if there was a random shark in the water! I thought you did a good job using inner thoughts. I look forward to more of your writing, good job.