OE Intros - 6th by MeShaun Vaughn https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/yx4txnc0gwd8 Made with charm en-us 2017-03-27 15:21:32 UTC 2025-03-22 03:47:22 UTC hello@padlet.com Karissa S. - 5 https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/yx4txnc0gwd8/wish/162889622 In Yank Martel's novel , Life of Pi, Pi Patel, a teen ago is fascinated by religion, unfortunately, gets stranded in the middle of an ocean with a group of animals who all represent some aspect or person of life. Pi's pivtol moment in his psychological and moral development was when he understood that he is an animal who wants to survive. The moment shaped Pi's habits and methods for survival to help him stay alive amongst the creatures, especially a tiger named Richard Parker.

"a teen ago?" Your context reads too abruptly. How does he come to be on the ship? When does this moment occur? ]]> 2017-03-27 16:56:01 UTC https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/yx4txnc0gwd8/wish/162889622 Bailey B, Corrected - 6 https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/yx4txnc0gwd8/wish/162889623 In The Life of Pi, Yann Martel illustrates a ship sinking serving to symbolize the failing nature of a teenage boy named Pi's way of life as he consistently submits to fear. Alone in the ocean with a tiger named a Richard Parker, Pi again fears the brutality and unique nature of the tiger. Allowing this fear to puncture his inner self, Pi comes to the realization of the necessity  to coexist with Richard Parker. Pi ultimately faces his ultimate trepidation of the violent creature, translating to a mutually successful relationship on which uncovers the prosperity one can achieve as they surpass the fear holding them back. 

Strengthen context, including why Pi is present on a sinking ship...]]> 2017-03-27 16:56:01 UTC https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/yx4txnc0gwd8/wish/162889623 Emily Studdard - 5 https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/yx4txnc0gwd8/wish/162889708 Isolated on a lifeboat after his family is involved in an accident with only a tiger, Richard Parker, Pi, in Yann Martel's Life of Pi, stuggles to stay alive day to day with the limited amount of resources on the lifeboat and a natural predator to man. As Pi settles into a routine on the life boat, he develops a plan for living with fear, manifested in the form of Richard Parker, illustrating the development of Pi's maturity throughout the book as he learns how to handle fear. 

Strengthen context ]]> 2017-03-27 16:56:11 UTC https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/yx4txnc0gwd8/wish/162889708 Avery 💕🤖🇱🇷😈😏🙈⚡️👀🤾🏿‍♂️ - 5 https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/yx4txnc0gwd8/wish/162889815 Culture is known to be the foundation of life many people in this world. In Ochua Ochubu's novel Things Fall Apart, culture is used to display the harsh reality that comes with it. The main protagonist Okwonko is a man broken by the many collisions of his culture caused by others and himself. The brute traditional values of his Igbo village suddenly lead to the suicide of Okwonko as he is faced with many customs that are difficult to accept and the oppressive culture of the missionaries in Nigeria who convert many in his village, including his own son.

First sentence is missing a word. What are the origins of the "collisions"-- you need to address imperialistic aims Achebe addresses in the novel. Edit for conventions "lead" . Close 6]]> 2017-03-27 16:56:25 UTC https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/yx4txnc0gwd8/wish/162889815 Katey Willey - 7 https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/yx4txnc0gwd8/wish/162890019 In Yann Martel's Life of Pi, a teenage boy, Pi Patel, is forced to become an independent man when the boat his family is on, sinks, and he is stranded on a lifeboat, with a tiger, hyena, zebra, and orangutan. Pi discovers that he has to grow up when, like the oragutan, Orange Juice, he looks around at the vast sea, and realizes that his family is probably dead, and he is now alone on the world. This realization causes a spark in Pi to survive, even though his family is most likely dead. Pi's fighting spirit, shown after this realization, portrays that determination and perseverance are qualities that are necessary for human survival in difficult situations.]]> 2017-03-27 16:56:56 UTC https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/yx4txnc0gwd8/wish/162890019 Jadon😍😍 - 4 https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/yx4txnc0gwd8/wish/162890062 People change as time carrys on; life being dragged by the powerful force that is time. Although change is gradual, there are pivotal moments that signal change has come or is on its way. In Yann Martel's Life of Pi, Pi's realization that he must devise a plan, not to kill fear, but to coexist with it and use it as motivation to stay alive. This moment outlives how fear was not a factor that hurt him, but helped him. 

Edit for conventions. You have to describe the moment, and you fell short of doing that. Fear of what? Helped him, how?

]]> 2017-03-27 16:57:04 UTC https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/yx4txnc0gwd8/wish/162890062 Ellie - Incomplete https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/yx4txnc0gwd8/wish/162890065 In The Life of Pi, author Yann Martel develops protagonist, Pi, through his pivotal, worldly experiences. When Pi Patel's family disappears after their ship sinks, he is left stranded withseveral wild companions that motivate him to thrive and overcome his obstacle of fear and isolation. Pi's conflict drives him to accept his coexistence with fear, allowing him to perceiver in his survival on the Pacific Ocean. Pi's commitment to survival after his family dies, exempliphies the importance of overcoming obstacles to reach ones full potential. ]]> 2017-03-27 16:57:04 UTC https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/yx4txnc0gwd8/wish/162890065 Amori allen - 7 https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/yx4txnc0gwd8/wish/162890076 The violent subjugation of traditional African values is very prominent expressed in Chinua Achebe's Things Fall Apart. This subjugation is chiefly expressed in a variety of feelings ranging from resentment to depression along with actions undertaken by the protagonist okonkwo. Okonkwo's dilemma begins with his exile from his home village as he is forced to leave after murdering his adopted son. He then finds himself back at the home village of his mother. This setback would have have normally blown over in a couple of years if not for the conflicting social values between the more patriarchal and warlike nature of okonkwo opposed to the open minded and evangelistic mindset of the villagers in the new tribe as they come in to contact with the everspreading  Christianity of the western world.

Edit for conventions!]]> 2017-03-27 16:57:05 UTC https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/yx4txnc0gwd8/wish/162890076 Emily Petraglia - 8 https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/yx4txnc0gwd8/wish/162890093 The torn mistress, Catherine, obtaining passionate love for both Edgar and the landlord, Mr. Heathcliff, dies early on in Emily Bronte's Wuthering Heights, but continues to live in demanding spirit. Bronte's manipulation of time within the deaths of Catherine and Heathcliff, along with the birth of his child, reveal the undermined attachments of pain and depression that associate with love. Therefore, Bronte juxtaposes social norms by presenting love not as a form of happiness or fulfillment-- but a form of suffering. ]]> 2017-03-27 16:57:08 UTC https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/yx4txnc0gwd8/wish/162890093 Jessica - Incomplete https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/yx4txnc0gwd8/wish/162890131 Okwonko as a child faced the cultural collision of negative chi brought about through his lazy father's debt. In an effort to redeem himself and escape the pressure of becoming like his father, Okwonko works toward leading in the traditions of ]]> 2017-03-27 16:57:14 UTC https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/yx4txnc0gwd8/wish/162890131 Caroline 🤷🏾‍♀️ Corrected - 5 https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/yx4txnc0gwd8/wish/162890154 Okonkwo, the leading character, must learn how to cope with cultural collision within his tribe in Things Fall Apart by Chinua Achebe. Missionaries invade his peaceful society and try to persuade his family and friends to join Christianity, completely disregarding that their society already has a cherished religion. Okonkwo, feeling scared and threatened by this new found religion, doesn't quite know how to handle the cards he has been giving, so he resorts to violence because that's the only way he knows how to in order to keep what is sentimental to him, his religion. Violent African values are shown through the novel in order to portray social issues throughout society.

So what is the meaning of the work as a whole?]]> 2017-03-27 16:57:18 UTC https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/yx4txnc0gwd8/wish/162890154 Daniel R - 7 https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/yx4txnc0gwd8/wish/162890176 Taking characters out of their comfort zone often produces interesting responses from them. In Charles Dickens' Great Expectations Pip, a blacksmith's apprentice from a small village is taken to the house of a wealthy woman named Miss Havisham who lives there with her adopted daughter Estella. Pip who is still fairly young at the time goes through the entire day at this house meekly and somewhat fearfully. He is made fun of by Estella for his rough hands, his common boots, and his "common" way of playing cards. The encounter illustrates class differences and inequalities that are present throughout the entirety of the novel.]]> 2017-03-27 16:57:22 UTC https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/yx4txnc0gwd8/wish/162890176 Christopher Paul Wempner - 5 https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/yx4txnc0gwd8/wish/162890315      In the bilduagsroman titled The Life of Pi by Yann Martell the main character Picine Patel experiences a horific moment of self development when he realizes that he is alone in the world. The ship carying him and his family to Canada sinks leaving him as the sole survivor with no rescue effort forseen. This reveals Pi'sself reliance and independent role in the world.

Check spelling]]> 2017-03-27 16:57:48 UTC https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/yx4txnc0gwd8/wish/162890315 Inayah 😎 - 6 https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/yx4txnc0gwd8/wish/162890959  Weakness in many African villages is a kind of atrocity. Villages purely exist to absorb power and ultimately come out on top as number one. In Chinua Achebe's, Things Fall Apart, the village of Ibo is famously known to hold great power. Okonkwo, being one of Ibo's primary leaders has defined his son, Nwoye, as being weak. This being so, Okonkwo goes out of his way to diffuse his skills and leader state of mind onto his son, Nwoye. However, Nwoye, being his own embodiement of a leader, creates a cultural collision in his disregard of Okonkwo's teachings and branches apart to develop his own self being, differing greatly from his father.]]> 2017-03-27 16:59:28 UTC https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/yx4txnc0gwd8/wish/162890959 Cassie Lundberg - 4 https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/yx4txnc0gwd8/wish/162891265 As one comes face to face with fear, most tend to hide or run from the emotional struggle brought about however within Yann Matel's The Life of Pi, Piscine Patel, a young Indian boy is stranded on a lifeboat with a 450 pound adult tiger after having the boat ,along with all his family, sink and must utilizes strategies of fear such as thriving with the animal to provide him with the strength to progress survival.

"brought about" by what? Beginning with "a young Indian boy," you need to edit the remainder of the sentence. "progress" is the wrong word]]> 2017-03-27 17:00:14 UTC https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/yx4txnc0gwd8/wish/162891265 Micah - 5 https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/yx4txnc0gwd8/wish/162891508 In Chinua Achebe's novel,Things Fall Apart, Okwonko who is the main character adjusts himself to cultural shifts happening within his tribe, relating to the religion of christianity. Ironically, the title fits well with okwonko's masculine world falling apart due to part of his tribe converting to christianity and even his own family resenting gisnwishes. Masculity of the mind diminishing from his beliefs veing tested and his family revelling against polothestic traditions.

Careful, Micah. The last sentence is not a complete sentence. Edit spelling and other conventions. You could strengthen context by offering an example of a cultural shift. ]]> 2017-03-27 17:00:52 UTC https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/yx4txnc0gwd8/wish/162891508 Beatrice Maina - 5 https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/yx4txnc0gwd8/wish/162891528 The Ibo village home to the powerful leader Okonkwo undergoes cultural collision emphasized in the novel Things Fall Apart by Chinua Achebe. Okonkwo' respect is received through the actions of abandoning his first wife's son, Nyowe, when he betrays the village and joins the religion of Christianity. The strict and distinct character of Okonkwo's harsh actions establishes the divine ruling of a strong man who came from a weak father who Okonkwo greatly differentiates from.

Rephrase "who Okonkwo greatly differentiates from"--don't end a sentence with a preposition. What is the nature of the cultural collision? ]]> 2017-03-27 17:00:55 UTC https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/yx4txnc0gwd8/wish/162891528 Shelby Dumersaint - 4 https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/yx4txnc0gwd8/wish/162891804 In Chinua Achebe's novel, Things Fall Apart the main character, Okonkwo, is faced with difficulties such as dealing with change in which he responds negatively to this cultural collision. Okonkwo's response to this collision illuminates the novel as a whole since Okonkwo is such a strong man physically but when things start to change his downfall begins. 

You flip from "change" to "cultural collision" without detailing the nature of the collision of cultures. What cultures? Who is Okonkwo? Your context is missing!]]> 2017-03-27 17:01:41 UTC https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/yx4txnc0gwd8/wish/162891804 Alejandro -5 https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/yx4txnc0gwd8/wish/162892820 Humans, unlike animals, are psychologically unequipped for  murderous acts. Only the most deranged psychopaths posses the ability to kill with no remorse and student Raskolnikov from Fyodor Dostoyevsky's Crime and Punishment is not such a person. His worrisome response and the illness he developed as a result of his crimes proves his humane qualities and that his actions were merely the result of his tragic environment.

Second sentence is missing much needed punctuation. His "worrisome response" to what? What "humane qualities"? What "actions?" What was so tragic about his environment? These questions address context, which should be presented at the beginning of your prompt. ]]> 2017-03-27 17:04:29 UTC https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/yx4txnc0gwd8/wish/162892820 Daniel T. (I messed up bad, sorry) - 6 https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/yx4txnc0gwd8/wish/162893908 Through the dire circumstances foretold, the true nature of earth and man are revealed to be greatly intertwined as acknowledged in Yann Matel's Life of Pi where the well-rounded , challenger of norms of Piscine "Pi" would be confined to the seven month battle against nature's fiercest warrior--raw tyranny of the king of animals.A great beast of nature, the Bengal tiger Richard Parker, threatens the safety of Pi. Daunting trials are presented to the young boy and by the experience firsthand in a zoo with the child animals of nature and the tense period of time passed, Pi will understand the connection mankind has to nature--deep-rooted as humans as the children of nature who strayed from harmony and life will the rest of earth. 

First sentence is missing a comma...be careful. Excellent insight in the final sentence, but it is too wordy. ]]> 2017-03-27 17:07:22 UTC https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/yx4txnc0gwd8/wish/162893908 Miguel Lago - 6 https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/yx4txnc0gwd8/wish/162894903 Certain moments during one's early life may change one's own moral and psychological development, as seen in Yan Marvel's Life of Pi.  In Life of Pi, the protagonist Pi undergoes a psychological change that would allow Pi to adapt to the crisis he would endure at sea with Richard Parker. Life of Pi explores Pi early lifehood and how it influenced Pi's development and adaptation at sea with Richard Parker.  The pivotal moment in Pi's early lifehood was when Pi's father demonstrated to Pi and his brother the dangers of animal through letting a lion violently attack and eat a goat.  This early experience exposed Pi to the hospitality of animals that which served instrumental in his adaptation and eventual survival with Richard Parker.     

"through" is the wrong preposition
"Life of Pi", "Life of Pi" in two consecutive sentences is repetitive.  Who is Richard Parker? "that which served" is wordy]]> 2017-03-27 17:09:59 UTC https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/yx4txnc0gwd8/wish/162894903 Shelmine A - 4 https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/yx4txnc0gwd8/wish/162956833 Things Fall Apart by Chinua Achebe details the  life of a man named Okonkwo who fears weakness and seeing signs of weakness being portrayed in his own clan when a new religion dominates the land. Okonkwo's people always as their  polytheistic religion and rules based around that religion, but when people started to exert bizarre action the clan has never experienced before the clan don't know how to react to their actions. Due to the clan's weakness of not exerting actions to stop the missionaries and watching his first son Nwoyo leave Okonkwo's religion in the end Okonkwo committed suicide to end his misery. 

"Seeing signs" -- rephrase . "Okwonkwo's people always..." through religion does not read clearly. What bizarre action? Rephrase the final sentence so it reads with a purpose. ]]> 2017-03-27 20:49:37 UTC https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/yx4txnc0gwd8/wish/162956833 Jairo - 5 https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/yx4txnc0gwd8/wish/163099891 In Chinua Achebe's "Things Fall Apart", the syncretism of cultures in Southern Nigeria is rejected by a powerful and masculine tribe leader, Okonkwo. Being the great and powerful Okonkwo, he takes great pride in all he represents, such as his tribe and name, with an urgency to nullify any sign of weakness. Okonkwo is quick to reject all "new" culture and religious customs being introduced by foreign missionaries due to the fact he feels the inconsistency of change is in itself weakness. The change of his son's religious views, described as "betrayl of blood", which was too much for Okonkwo to grip. After questioning the concept of identity, Okonkwo lost all grip. 

DO NOT place quotes around novel titles. Rephrase "due to the fact"--wordy, and "is in itself"--wordy. Eloquent use of language facility but your introduction has no PURPOSE. ]]> 2017-03-28 12:44:14 UTC https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/yx4txnc0gwd8/wish/163099891 Ketchina Vilfranc https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/yx4txnc0gwd8/wish/163164697 Charles Dickens' Great expectations pip is young blacksmith apprentice that is consumed by his desire of social class advancement. He wants better and expects greater things than what he has. He is thrust in to a foreign environment that is London. He is overwhelmed and feels out of place. He is both amazed and disgusted at the city of London and its inhabitants.]]> 2017-03-28 15:23:25 UTC https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/yx4txnc0gwd8/wish/163164697 Cameron https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/yx4txnc0gwd8/wish/163173352 Chinua Achebe's Things Fall Apart accounts the life of Okonkwo a stoic, strong willed fighter whose unwavering work ethic and intolerance toward weakness have allowed him and his family to prosper in their Nigerian culture, but now the long standing traditions of his culture are being challenged by the invasions of missionaries. The beliefs and notions shared between him and his tribal men are being called into question when more individuals belonging to his ethnic group begin to be converted by the Christian religion causing shame and remorse by Okwonko for his village.]]> 2017-03-28 15:47:20 UTC https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/yx4txnc0gwd8/wish/163173352 Katherine https://padlet.com/meshaun_vaughn/yx4txnc0gwd8/wish/163188005
The animistic ideals consume the lifestyle of Okonkwo and his village in Chinua Achebe's novel, Things Fall Apart. Okonkwo, the protagonist and wealthy man of yams and wives,  holds traditional values of animism and patriarchal society over the white mans evangelical Christianity, leading to an internal struggle between traditional values and change as Okonkwo's Nigerian village begins to experience change. 
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