Writing Suggestions by Anna Lane

Write one thing that the student should do to improve their score and one thing that they did well. Be specific to the rubric, include an example of something that you would change to earn a higher score.

annalane5 — 2024-03-21 18:06:36 UTC

Something good they had was they added the source that they used and they more than one parragragh

2024-03-21 18:07:02 UTC

🐕RAELEIGH♍

GOOD WRITING PIECE

2024-03-21 18:11:07 UTC

They did good on their sourcing so I gave them an 3 or an 4 it was good but they could still of added another source in there first paragraph and there last on because if they did they could of got an Distinguished and got a good grade. But instead they got an proficient because they didn't do so good on their support so that why they got an 15 but they did good because they didnt just have one paragraph they had 3 or 4

Clarity and coherence and language

2024-03-21 18:11:39 UTC

He had a very clear passage. He supported his opinion with reasons. He also used sources to support. So that the reason why i think he had a good and clear passage so i gave him a 3. His language was alright. I think he could use better words than just good. But still overall he had good language. But he had really good sourcing. He stated his sources. He also pulled information from the sources. He also explained them. In support he supported his reason with evidence from his sources. So at the end i gave him a total of 3 3 3 3 and a proficient.

Very good writing piece

Brayden :)

2024-03-21 18:11:46 UTC

they had good spelling and support

They did really good on their sourcing. They added two sources, "War Against Chocolate Milk" and "A School Fight Over Chocolate Milk".

2024-03-21 18:12:04 UTC

.・゜-: ✧☾Zoe☽✧ :-゜・.

SUPPORT

2024-03-21 18:12:33 UTC

They did good on their spelling n support

I gave there clarity and coherence a three it did introduce all the demands of the prompt there support was good they had a clear explanation of reasons they effectively cited evidence from the source. they created and maintained a clear structure to develop the opinion. language was a three they had a formal tone and maintains task appropriate writing

2024-03-21 18:12:50 UTC

Pharagraphs

2024-03-21 18:13:14 UTC

Add 7-8 pharagraphs in the first pharagraph itself. he supported his opinion well with good reasons, added the source from where he got that information he talks about. good clarity and coherence. good reasons and sourcing.

They need to add more details,but the sourcing was great . Marley

2024-03-21 18:13:46 UTC

They had a good source and they did have more then one parragragh

2024-03-21 18:14:52 UTC

Something good that they did was that they had a source, but something that they did wrong was they didnt add alot of details

2024-03-21 18:15:00 UTC