Run, Jog, Walk by Stefanie Pyrum

Run, Jog, Walk by Stefanie Pyrum https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9 What pace are you at for passing AZ Merit? en-us 2018-01-23 19:22:15 UTC 2026-01-29 21:17:01 UTC hello@padlet.com We all did good on the conventions section, we had a good amount of paragraphs, we need to work on our evidence. https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224299994 BreAnna
Trinity
Makayla
Annika]]> 2018-01-24 16:29:07 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224299994 I did quite well on my conventions. I also had a more intriguing hook than usual. https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224302678 -Makayla]]> 2018-01-24 16:33:49 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224302678 I have been getting better with my grammar and my claim/hook https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224302726 -Annika]]> 2018-01-24 16:33:53 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224302726 My body paragraphs had the correct way of citing quotes. It also had a lot of evidence. https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224303235 Trinity]]> 2018-01-24 16:34:45 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224303235 My strengths were having a lot of facts, and the number of paragraphs I had. https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224303398 BreAnna]]> 2018-01-24 16:35:02 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224303398 I need to work on using evidence as well as reasoning(lately my evidence has been turning into reasoning). I also need to work on making my claim better (and not just stating the obvious). https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224304145 -Makayla]]> 2018-01-24 16:36:15 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224304145 something I need to practice would be focusing on my claim more and not getting carried away in other nonsense. As well as not resaying evidence that was already told in previous paragraphs. https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224304193 Trinity

]]> 2018-01-24 16:36:20 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224304193 I maintained my claim though the essay https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224304198 -Annika]]> 2018-01-24 16:36:21 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224304198 I need to work more on stating the evidence from the article other than just facts, and I need to work more on my hook, trying to catch the readers attention https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224304530 BreAnna]]> 2018-01-24 16:36:56 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224304530 I need to get stronger and more evidence when I am on article don't always know what to use and what not to use all the time https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224304789 -Annika]]> 2018-01-24 16:37:26 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224304789 Even if my grammar is getting better I still need to work on that along with my spelling I have always been bad with these but I still need to work on it https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224306191 -Annika]]> 2018-01-24 16:39:47 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224306191 something I would like to work on would like to have help on is staying on track with my claim and using more and new evidence https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224306523 Trinity]]> 2018-01-24 16:40:16 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224306523 I need more help on my hook and organizing my paragraphs more so it's not just random facts put into multiple paragraphs, and I need more help on making my conclusion longer. https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224306540 BreAnna]]> 2018-01-24 16:40:19 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224306540 I want help with descriptive ways to write claims, drawing the reader in ever more. I also want help with introducing evidence. https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224307182 -Makayla]]> 2018-01-24 16:41:23 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224307182 I still need to work on all my evidence spelling and grammar https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224308956 -Annika]]> 2018-01-24 16:44:15 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224308956 We all had smooth or generally integrated evidence. Most of us got threes on our purpose, focus, and organization. https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224317446 Giselle
Gwen
Khia
Charlotte]]> 2018-01-24 16:59:08 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224317446 My paper stayed on topic throughout and I had a fairly good hook that described a scene relevant to the paper. https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224319728 Charlotte]]> 2018-01-24 17:02:54 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224319728 I maintained my claim consistently through my essay and I had good conventions. https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224319999 -Khia]]> 2018-01-24 17:03:21 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224319999 My strengths were having minor errors and correct punctuation. My other strength was that I had relevant evidence and had precise references. https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224320276 Giselle]]> 2018-01-24 17:03:50 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224320276 I am staying more organized and I am going with the flow more and transitioning from topic to topic smoother. https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224320294 -Gwen]]> 2018-01-24 17:03:51 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224320294 I need to work on making conclusions that don't just repeat all the points presented in the paper. https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224321247 I need to use more evidence.
Charlotte]]> 2018-01-24 17:05:26 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224321247 I need to work on remembering not to use I, me, or we so much and I need to work on my sentence structure so I don't have so may run-on sentences. https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224322282 -Gwen]]> 2018-01-24 17:07:07 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224322282 I need to work on having more evidence to use and explaining my points better. https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224322286 -Khia]]> 2018-01-24 17:07:08 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224322286 I need to practice using more techniques and having more variation in my sentence structure. https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224322296 Giselle]]> 2018-01-24 17:07:09 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224322296 I still need help with making my claim smooth and one sentence and using more techniques in my paper https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224322852 Giselle]]> 2018-01-24 17:08:17 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224322852 I need to work on writing for topics I don't like and have evidence for and having a consistent sentence structure. https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224323086 -Khia]]> 2018-01-24 17:08:40 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224323086 I need more practice on my hook and making it stronger and more attention grabbing and I need to practice managing my time better so I have longer, neater paragraphs https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224323574 -Gwen]]> 2018-01-24 17:09:34 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224323574 My strengths are having a very long detailed essay and making sure to stay on topic of my claim. https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224434493 -Hailey]]> 2018-01-24 20:26:51 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224434493 I found solid evidence that supported my topic better than I have since last semester. https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224434624 -Josie ]]> 2018-01-24 20:27:12 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224434624 Something that I need to work on is that I need to pay attention to my sources and not to use pronouns. https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224435417 -Josie ]]> 2018-01-24 20:29:17 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224435417 Something i need to focus on is making sure i am citing my quotes properly in my essay. https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224435469 -Hailey]]> 2018-01-24 20:29:27 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224435469 i need to work on using better vocabulary and better word choices https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224436144 2018-01-24 20:31:26 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224436144 All of had either similar or closely the same issues with sources, either not citing them or putting them where they weren't needed. https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224436709 Noah
Hailey
Matt
Josie ]]> 2018-01-24 20:32:59 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224436709 my strength is finding good evidence - Noah https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224437205 2018-01-24 20:34:18 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224437205 I need to https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224437377 2018-01-24 20:34:49 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224437377 I think my hooks into my essay could be a lot stronger. https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224438019 -Hailey]]> 2018-01-24 20:36:40 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224438019 Our whole group used pronouns, some need to find stronger evidence, accurate punctuation, a sturdy claim, and different sentence starters. https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224445124 Monica
Ashley
Elizabeth
Melissa

]]> 2018-01-24 20:54:58 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224445124 i need more reliable sources https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224445683 -monica]]> 2018-01-24 20:56:22 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224445683 Most of my grammar is good and my hook was good. -Ashley https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224445846 2018-01-24 20:56:51 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224445846 using less pronouns https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224446001 -monica]]> 2018-01-24 20:57:20 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224446001 my claim https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224446154 -monica]]> 2018-01-24 20:57:51 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224446154 bringing in the reader and throwing shade a little https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224446277 -monica]]> 2018-01-24 20:58:15 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224446277 My strength was my diverse vocabulary, strong evidence, and sticking to my claim. https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224446361 Elizabeth

]]> 2018-01-24 20:58:36 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224446361 I need to practice replacing numbers with word from and finding better articles. https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224446514 2018-01-24 20:59:08 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224446514 https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224446538 I'm really good with hooks and using different things then just a questions to pull readers in and im also usually good at finding good evidence based on my claim.

-Melissa]]> 2018-01-24 20:59:13 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224446538 sentence startes https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224446542 -monica]]> 2018-01-24 20:59:13 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224446542 wider vocabulary or sentence flow https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224446598 -monica]]> 2018-01-24 20:59:30 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224446598 Something I need to work on are my sentence starters, I want to look at different ways to open up an idea. https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224446646 Elizabeth]]> 2018-01-24 20:59:38 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224446646 https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224447091 I need to elaborate more and not repeat myself so much, and I want to do better transitions from idea to idea.
-Melissa

]]> 2018-01-24 21:01:21 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224447091 I want to practice my sentence starters since I can get repetitive with the same words. https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224447350 Elizabeth ]]> 2018-01-24 21:02:20 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224447350 My intros need to be better and my claim needs to be better. https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224447365 2018-01-24 21:02:22 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224447365 https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224447411 I want help with elaboration and transitions
-Melissa]]> 2018-01-24 21:02:31 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224447411 I need to add more to my essay, it could be longer paragraphs or even better transitions to sentences. https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224763419 Jace]]> 2018-01-25 17:18:31 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224763419 I had good conventions and word choice. https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224764579 Jace]]> 2018-01-25 17:20:25 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224764579 Our group needs to work on word choice, progression of ideas, conventions, better hooks, and the length of our papers. https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224764655 Vance
Jace
Gilbert
Abigail
Sandra]]> 2018-01-25 17:20:32 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224764655 I need to work on showing the significance of my evidence. https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224764794 Jace]]> 2018-01-25 17:20:46 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224764794 Two of my strengths are my claims are good and my conventions are great. https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224765843 Vance]]> 2018-01-25 17:22:35 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224765843 I need to work on my progression of ideas and word choice. https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224766533 Vance]]> 2018-01-25 17:23:50 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224766533 I want help with awesome hooks and better word choice. https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224766919 Vance]]> 2018-01-25 17:24:29 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224766919 My strengths were composition and organization https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224767059
Abigail]]> 2018-01-25 17:24:44 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224767059 my claim and evidence https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224767986 gilbert

]]> 2018-01-25 17:26:17 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224767986 All of us had a very strong use of evidence and technique of elaboration. https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224875966 Alyssa W
Selene
Eden]]> 2018-01-25 21:04:09 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224875966 Our group thinks that we need to work on word choice https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224876521 -Austin
-cooper
-caleb
-jenna]]> 2018-01-25 21:05:59 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224876521 My claim was supa good https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224876640 -AUSTINO]]> 2018-01-25 21:06:16 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224876640 I was strong with stating facts https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224876849
-coop]]> 2018-01-25 21:06:52 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224876849 I need to work on using punctuation better https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224876852 -Austino

]]> 2018-01-25 21:06:53 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224876852 I need help with body paragraphs https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224877054 -Austino]]> 2018-01-25 21:07:34 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224877054 I did the best in including evidence from the source https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224877059 Alyssa W

]]> 2018-01-25 21:07:36 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224877059 I need to work on using more words and expanding my vocabulary. https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224877063 cooper]]> 2018-01-25 21:07:37 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224877063 I did good with supporting my claim with facts. I cited them correctly https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224877201 -jenna]]> 2018-01-25 21:08:00 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224877201 https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224877230 I did great in the purpose, focus, and organization section. I had a strong claim and didn't off topic. I also had an appropriate style and tone.
-Eden
]]> 2018-01-25 21:08:07 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224877230 I need to work on my use of conventions https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224877353 Alyssa W]]> 2018-01-25 21:08:34 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224877353 I want to elaborate on my use of evidence. https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224877407 -cooper

]]> 2018-01-25 21:08:48 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224877407 something I need to work on more is introductions and hooks and conclusions. https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224877575 -jenna]]> 2018-01-25 21:09:23 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224877575 I would like help with transition words https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224877721 Alyssa W]]> 2018-01-25 21:09:51 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224877721 had a decent sized essay essay https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224877801 -caleb]]> 2018-01-25 21:10:07 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224877801 I need to have better structure in some of my sentences. Lastly I need to be general through my references https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224877860 -Eden]]> 2018-01-25 21:10:19 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224877860 I would like help with on how to successfully write a good intro sentence and how to end my paper efficiently. https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224877995 -jenna]]> 2018-01-25 21:10:52 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224877995 Need to work on making all of my wording compatible with the information I use https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224878081 -caleb]]> 2018-01-25 21:11:11 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224878081 https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224878082 I used a variety of transitions and I had very minor errors in my essay.
-Selene]]> 2018-01-25 21:11:11 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224878082 What I need more training with is supporting and citing evidence correctly and making sure it fits in. https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224878483 -Eden]]> 2018-01-25 21:12:39 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224878483 I need help with my claims and hooks https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224878600 -caleb]]> 2018-01-25 21:13:01 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224878600 https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224879008 I need better word choices and to keep my claim more clear.
-Selene]]> 2018-01-25 21:14:25 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224879008 https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224879430 I need help with making my claim less confusing and to have better ideas from beginning to end.
-Selene]]> 2018-01-25 21:15:53 UTC https://padlet.com/kamali0634/yql4pfwmo3q9/wish/224879430