cube manipulation group 2 by renee auzan https://padlet.com/shazreenenurjanna/yipui0izjy0d feedback en-us 2017-12-20 04:06:26 UTC 2024-12-15 17:10:08 UTC hello@padlet.com feedback shazreenenurjanna https://padlet.com/shazreenenurjanna/yipui0izjy0d/wish/217809278 http://www.showme.com/sh/?h=5WwZXmK 

]]> 2017-12-22 05:31:19 UTC https://padlet.com/shazreenenurjanna/yipui0izjy0d/wish/217809278 shazreenenurjanna https://padlet.com/shazreenenurjanna/yipui0izjy0d/wish/217809392 2017-12-22 05:34:35 UTC https://padlet.com/shazreenenurjanna/yipui0izjy0d/wish/217809392 shazreenenurjanna https://padlet.com/shazreenenurjanna/yipui0izjy0d/wish/217809426 2017-12-22 05:35:34 UTC https://padlet.com/shazreenenurjanna/yipui0izjy0d/wish/217809426 shazreenenurjanna https://padlet.com/shazreenenurjanna/yipui0izjy0d/wish/217809506 2017-12-22 05:38:48 UTC https://padlet.com/shazreenenurjanna/yipui0izjy0d/wish/217809506 shazreenenurjanna https://padlet.com/shazreenenurjanna/yipui0izjy0d/wish/217809521 2017-12-22 05:39:09 UTC https://padlet.com/shazreenenurjanna/yipui0izjy0d/wish/217809521 Feedback shazreenenurjanna https://padlet.com/shazreenenurjanna/yipui0izjy0d/wish/217809546 http://www.showme.com/sh/?h=cG3M240]]> 2017-12-22 05:39:53 UTC https://padlet.com/shazreenenurjanna/yipui0izjy0d/wish/217809546 shazreenenurjanna https://padlet.com/shazreenenurjanna/yipui0izjy0d/wish/217809563 2017-12-22 05:40:38 UTC https://padlet.com/shazreenenurjanna/yipui0izjy0d/wish/217809563 shazreenenurjanna https://padlet.com/shazreenenurjanna/yipui0izjy0d/wish/217809576 2017-12-22 05:40:58 UTC https://padlet.com/shazreenenurjanna/yipui0izjy0d/wish/217809576 shazreenenurjanna https://padlet.com/shazreenenurjanna/yipui0izjy0d/wish/217809642 2017-12-22 05:43:02 UTC https://padlet.com/shazreenenurjanna/yipui0izjy0d/wish/217809642 shazreenenurjanna https://padlet.com/shazreenenurjanna/yipui0izjy0d/wish/217809643 2017-12-22 05:43:04 UTC https://padlet.com/shazreenenurjanna/yipui0izjy0d/wish/217809643 shazreenenurjanna https://padlet.com/shazreenenurjanna/yipui0izjy0d/wish/217809652 2017-12-22 05:43:19 UTC https://padlet.com/shazreenenurjanna/yipui0izjy0d/wish/217809652 shazreenenurjanna https://padlet.com/shazreenenurjanna/yipui0izjy0d/wish/217809681 feed]]> 2017-12-22 05:44:38 UTC https://padlet.com/shazreenenurjanna/yipui0izjy0d/wish/217809681 shazreenenurjanna https://padlet.com/shazreenenurjanna/yipui0izjy0d/wish/217809698 2017-12-22 05:45:32 UTC https://padlet.com/shazreenenurjanna/yipui0izjy0d/wish/217809698 shazreenenurjanna https://padlet.com/shazreenenurjanna/yipui0izjy0d/wish/217809705 2017-12-22 05:45:43 UTC https://padlet.com/shazreenenurjanna/yipui0izjy0d/wish/217809705 shazreenenurjanna https://padlet.com/shazreenenurjanna/yipui0izjy0d/wish/217809715 2017-12-22 05:45:55 UTC https://padlet.com/shazreenenurjanna/yipui0izjy0d/wish/217809715 shazreenenurjanna https://padlet.com/shazreenenurjanna/yipui0izjy0d/wish/217809724 2017-12-22 05:46:07 UTC https://padlet.com/shazreenenurjanna/yipui0izjy0d/wish/217809724 feedback shazreenenurjanna https://padlet.com/shazreenenurjanna/yipui0izjy0d/wish/217810337 1. progress of analysis ok, theres improment from last tutorial.

2. what is the title of your idea or concept? im not sure which concepr you are using for the manipulation. the cube should be manipulated but u kind of manipulate the internal part only. 

3. i conclude that u dont have a direction now. u need to choose one concept based on yr analysis and conclusion of the case studies. 
your concept must also reflect the architect's style.
4.pls come and discuss with me before final presentation.]]> 2017-12-22 06:04:51 UTC https://padlet.com/shazreenenurjanna/yipui0izjy0d/wish/217810337 feedback shazreenenurjanna https://padlet.com/shazreenenurjanna/yipui0izjy0d/wish/217990682 concept ok clear, but need to elaborate in detail. motion is movement but this is just visual meaning that it is static. so use stagnant motion to explain rather that just motion. using mindmap explain about the criteria of motion (as stated in your cube concept ex.mutitimivemnt, swirling,rotating, colliding and so on). u need to put that under your concept. strong cncept starts with clear and detail explanation. then follow by the translation to the cube. (can refer to adam's group on how he include diagram to explain concept)

2.sunken is not motion. the layering of it shows movement. choose another word to reflect motion. plus, the size is way too small. not proportion with other cube models. re do that one.

3. same for zigzag cube, refine the model

4. the rest looks ok, but diagram and explanation should be more detail. ( refer to shawn ng's group/evian's/alyssa/haiqal's)

5. refine and detail out all models. dont just bring this again for final (thats what u always do - dont justplay safe. develop it)

6. very good workmanship, neat composition!]]> 2017-12-26 02:39:51 UTC https://padlet.com/shazreenenurjanna/yipui0izjy0d/wish/217990682 feedback shazreenenurjanna https://padlet.com/shazreenenurjanna/yipui0izjy0d/wish/217991066 as i mention:

1. refine your concept title - "movement of a bird " is too general/direct. use other keyword ex. manoeuvre, gesture, genuflection and etc. eg. fowl's gesture etc.then elaborate the idea

2. translate your concept to diagrammatic manner (u can show bird as the main reference but translate it into diagram)

list out the component or the criteria of your concept (mind map it). in your cube manipulation explanation board, u mentioned bird fightng, mating, hatchng, flying and etc. put that under your concept so taht will be the criteria that ure studying on

3. focus on one specific idea. u dont have to have 3 ideas. focus make your understanding more in depth.

4. not 10th artwork k. its final cube
5. conclusion not detail (make diagram as well) distictive manipulation??

6. good diagrammatic explanation where you inter-grate sketch and description, but u need to show the manipulation (cube transformation ) as well. your inspiration is just reference but how u translate or apply that through the cube manipulation ( how u transform your cube to final outcome)

7. avoid direct translation to your cube or idea/ even u are inspired by a bird for an example, don't mimic that bird. translate it. just get the essence of the inspiration not the whole thing that u see.

8. ex. i like the way u translate 'pre and predetor to your model, looks abstract. but need to show how u adapt the inspiration towards your cube manipulation, not just directly mimic the action.



]]> 2017-12-26 02:54:03 UTC https://padlet.com/shazreenenurjanna/yipui0izjy0d/wish/217991066 feedback shazreenenurjanna https://padlet.com/shazreenenurjanna/yipui0izjy0d/wish/217991564 1. where is your CONCEPT??
u need to derive it from the understanding of your analysis /case studies and conclusion. concept is very important to guide you manipulation ideas.
(refer to other group)

2. your manipulation has no basis, your just refering to the architect's building. (directly translating the buildings to cube manipulation)

3. very poor and minimal diagram to explain about the manipulation process. (refer to other group ex. shawn ng's/alyssa/haiqal's/abd rahman's group) u must show how the cube is being manipulated to final outcome.

4. your perforated elements cube are wrong, pls understand what it means by perforated.

5. solid model is also wrong. what ure doing is using a flat strip. find out what is solid. ive given example in the updated project brief.

6. the first 4 model are following the requirement of techniques of manipulation the and type of composition. the rest are wrong.

pls come and see me after break]]> 2017-12-26 03:22:59 UTC https://padlet.com/shazreenenurjanna/yipui0izjy0d/wish/217991564 feedback shazreenenurjanna https://padlet.com/shazreenenurjanna/yipui0izjy0d/wish/217991786 as i mentioned:
elaborate on your concept. mind map the criteria or the component under the concept then elaborate for each criteria.  example fludity is the concept and wave is the inspiration.what are the elements/criteria of fludity? no sharp edges, flowy, organic/curvy line, rhythm etc which will be reflected in your cube manipulation (look at adam's group for concept)it might not be in depth but how they explain the concept clearly using diagram and description.  A strong concept is important to reflect the outcome of your cube manipulation.

2. practice to use diagram to explain (looking at your analysis) thats how u show your understanding better that just to re sketch back from waht u see. (refer to shawn ng's group on analysis)

3. diagram of how you manipulate your cube is ok, good but integrate more on your explanation or description with your diagram. don separate both   

4. at the moment, i dont see the idea of fluidity in your cube no 2,4, and final cube.

5. cube 2- the top part is overlapping rather than intersecting/colliding

6. cube 3 -more interlocking rather than intersect (intersect shows penetretion ( ex refer to alyssa group for intersection)

7. cube 4 - not presenatable as u just layer the top part. i dont see the 3d element

8. cube 5- u can translate fluidity in geometric line, it is fine but show how curve line can also be presented in different form.
i suggest that u standardize your way of translating whether to use geometric or organic. it will look more consistent as overall.

9. the last model need to redo. suddenly u adapt the broken pieces as the facade of gaudi's building. which i i cant relate that to fluidity.

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