Ella Google Sites Peer Feedback 2019 - 2020 by Ella Goldstein https://padlet.com/26egoldstein/yhmtc29yn6c Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2019-12-05 19:28:49 UTC 2021-01-12 03:39:42 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.net/icons/png/1f604.png story comment-ARTHUR:):):):):) 26abarbosa https://padlet.com/26egoldstein/yhmtc29yn6c/wish/421705875 I like how you already added a lot of detail in the start of your story]]> 2019-12-09 16:49:05 UTC https://padlet.com/26egoldstein/yhmtc29yn6c/wish/421705875 In your story “Alone” I like when you put a visual of the bus. My favorite part of your story is when you said When the bus pulled up it made a squeaky sound that sounded like an old door being opened for the first time in years.It was very creative and I felt like I could actually hear the school bus squeaking In your story I also like how you showed her inner thoughts and they were things a person who is depressed feels. Like in this sentence oh great they probably think I am a loser and think I am fat. This really shows your theme.However, a suggestion is not to use so many “she thought.” If you used something else like “as a tiny voice said to her.” This would really engage the reader a little bit more 26eadegboyega https://padlet.com/26egoldstein/yhmtc29yn6c/wish/421815569 2019-12-09 19:25:52 UTC https://padlet.com/26egoldstein/yhmtc29yn6c/wish/421815569 story feedback 26schan https://padlet.com/26egoldstein/yhmtc29yn6c/wish/422378503 I liked the fast hook/begining at the start of the story.I also liked that when she met Harley at lunch and the description of her. But I think that the story is going by really fast and you should make more description.

]]> 2019-12-10 19:21:52 UTC https://padlet.com/26egoldstein/yhmtc29yn6c/wish/422378503 https://padlet.com/26egoldstein/yhmtc29yn6c/wish/833295771 2020-10-15 17:27:34 UTC https://padlet.com/26egoldstein/yhmtc29yn6c/wish/833295771 Two stars and a wish 26dkervel https://padlet.com/26egoldstein/yhmtc29yn6c/wish/1068413307 Star: I love the hook. It really got me interested in reading the story. It had a great suspense to it.
Star: I love how you wrote about how the character was feeling and theyre senses. I knew exactly how they were thinking. It was really great
Wish: I wish the story had a more description so we could feel like we were in the story more.]]> 2021-01-08 19:07:36 UTC https://padlet.com/26egoldstein/yhmtc29yn6c/wish/1068413307