https://padlet.com/ms_leena/y8f7bdswera4xcnx What comments do you have about the writing? en-us 2023-02-15 16:40:13 UTC 2023-02-16 01:45:10 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.net/icons/png/1f4d8.png ms_leena https://padlet.com/ms_leena/y8f7bdswera4xcnx/wish/2484324618 run-on sentences, 
mixed up the names of the characters like 'Mandy' and 'I' or 'me',
a lot of spelling errors, 
no punctuation for dialogue, 
starting sentences with 'and', 'until', 'but', 'because', 
starting sentences with small letters, 
not capitalising the 'I', 
putting capital letters randomly ]]> 2023-02-16 01:39:12 UTC https://padlet.com/ms_leena/y8f7bdswera4xcnx/wish/2484324618 ms_leena https://padlet.com/ms_leena/y8f7bdswera4xcnx/wish/2484326354 not so many run-on sentences, 
many spelling errors, 
expression is wrong (e.g. The day I when to school with tired), 
mixing up 'went' and 'when', 
not capitalizing 'I', 
not using past tense

]]> 2023-02-16 01:40:59 UTC https://padlet.com/ms_leena/y8f7bdswera4xcnx/wish/2484326354 ms_leena https://padlet.com/ms_leena/y8f7bdswera4xcnx/wish/2484329927 run-on sentence, 
joining all the different points with 'and', 
did not use past tense, 
mixing up the characters (calling the parents 'you', calling 'him' 'me')]]> 2023-02-16 01:45:10 UTC https://padlet.com/ms_leena/y8f7bdswera4xcnx/wish/2484329927