https://padlet.com/laurennoel32/y3bknc8gk4ul feel free to give me some feedback! en-us 2016-11-09 10:26:19 UTC 2025-11-12 02:03:05 UTC hello@padlet.com falck002_312 https://padlet.com/laurennoel32/y3bknc8gk4ul/wish/136341308 WWW - The narrative of your film trailer is unique as it is about a woman trapped inside a teenager's body. You have also given thought to what will happen throughout the whole film trailer. The plot is interesting.
EBI - You stated what happen at the ending of the film as you ended your film pitch with enigma. Does Lucy kill her friends? Or, do they kill her? Also, if you added a plot twist, way was Lucy pretending to be someone that she wasn't and why where her family hiding this secret?]]> 2016-11-09 10:39:03 UTC https://padlet.com/laurennoel32/y3bknc8gk4ul/wish/136341308 armanimb1 https://padlet.com/laurennoel32/y3bknc8gk4ul/wish/136345239 WWW: I like your film narrative it is a unique idea ive also bnever heard of hypopituitarism so it would be very interesting how you develop this idea 
EBI: Just justify your ideas as to why you chose this film idea and also is there any other locations you will include. Also maybe add a plot twist. ]]> 2016-11-09 10:57:55 UTC https://padlet.com/laurennoel32/y3bknc8gk4ul/wish/136345239 laurennoel32 https://padlet.com/laurennoel32/y3bknc8gk4ul/wish/136668207 2016-11-10 10:22:41 UTC https://padlet.com/laurennoel32/y3bknc8gk4ul/wish/136668207 https://padlet.com/laurennoel32/y3bknc8gk4ul/wish/136670594 www: The idea of the film is unique and creative and has a lot of potential to be a professional trailer. 
Ebi: Finish the bottom half of the film pitch so we can have a better understanding of your trailer all together and this may give you ideas for your advertising. ]]> 2016-11-10 10:34:48 UTC https://padlet.com/laurennoel32/y3bknc8gk4ul/wish/136670594 shahs208_312 https://padlet.com/laurennoel32/y3bknc8gk4ul/wish/136670977 Your narrative is creative and well thought, the idea that you've come up with hasn't been explored much which makes it intriguing.
To make it better you could maybe add a plot twist]]> 2016-11-10 10:36:48 UTC https://padlet.com/laurennoel32/y3bknc8gk4ul/wish/136670977 https://padlet.com/laurennoel32/y3bknc8gk4ul/wish/136671050 WWW: Great narrative,  very creepy, also unique
EBI: You definitely should add a plot twist, maybe a reason why she has that condition, or if she is hiding something.]]> 2016-11-10 10:37:14 UTC https://padlet.com/laurennoel32/y3bknc8gk4ul/wish/136671050 https://padlet.com/laurennoel32/y3bknc8gk4ul/wish/136671278
WWW: You chose hypopituitarism which is really unique and I like the overall storyline.

EBI: Maybe make it out like her parents didn't know and they had to find the information from somewhere else. Also state what happens at the end.


]]> 2016-11-10 10:38:21 UTC https://padlet.com/laurennoel32/y3bknc8gk4ul/wish/136671278 skyemendoza99 https://padlet.com/laurennoel32/y3bknc8gk4ul/wish/136671390 I like the idea about a women being trapped in a teenage body, it sounds interesting 
EBI: include a plot twist]]> 2016-11-10 10:39:01 UTC https://padlet.com/laurennoel32/y3bknc8gk4ul/wish/136671390 https://padlet.com/laurennoel32/y3bknc8gk4ul/wish/136671467 narrative sounds thrilling and the plot twist seems really exciting and unique. also the flashbacks will be really useful for character development and explain the plot in more detail. maybe add some more scary elements to make the trailer more conventional. ]]> 2016-11-10 10:39:31 UTC https://padlet.com/laurennoel32/y3bknc8gk4ul/wish/136671467 fousfanpop https://padlet.com/laurennoel32/y3bknc8gk4ul/wish/136675446 the storyline is really good, especially when u leave it at cliff hanger which gives us the question of whether she will kill her friends or if she will lead them to more traps that will eventually make them psychologically damaged.
EBI- make her parents more like they don't know who lucy is.... this could mean that lucy is trying to wipe out her adopted parents memories, so that they cant remember the deep secret which lucy possesses. 
but then her adopted parents eventually remember things about lucy, and they try to 
contact her friends, but lucy murders theparents before they cross the line for Lucy. 
(-lucy was waiting for the chance to trap her friends soul in order to survive longer and exist longer, this is known to be her nature- but the friends didn't know because they only had the intention to help Lucy)- 
this may contradict your storyline in one way or another, but I think its a good plot twist, if you change it slightly so that the enigma exists from the beginning. also don't mention that she has hypopituitarism until the end- and I think this isn't enough in itself, because if she is trapped in the teenage body, its better to say that she is also possessed with spirits that makes her this way.I hope u can understand. ]]> 2016-11-10 10:59:09 UTC https://padlet.com/laurennoel32/y3bknc8gk4ul/wish/136675446 owenc005_312 https://padlet.com/laurennoel32/y3bknc8gk4ul/wish/137184463 WWW: I like the idea that you are combining different narratives from different movies.
EBI: Your log line is a smaller version of your synopsis; try to make it like a sentence describing the whole film, like you would when clicking on a film on Netflix. Also, add more resources on your list. ]]> 2016-11-13 12:07:45 UTC https://padlet.com/laurennoel32/y3bknc8gk4ul/wish/137184463