Non-Literary HL Essay / IB Class by Erika Nieto Wenzell https://padlet.com/enieto8/y1bllss5zzlwapfj Exercise 7.7. Editing to Improve According to Assessment Criteria. en-us 2021-07-21 16:37:44 UTC 2025-10-25 10:02:10 UTC hello@padlet.com Complete Exercise 7.7. Pg. 310: 1. Make annotations on: Inappropriate 2. Vocabulary, 3. incoherent ideas, 4. ask questions about the essay, 5, make suggestions for rewording, 6. insert missing ideas,7. underline key sentences, 8. identify useful phrases, 9. give general feedback. enieto8 https://padlet.com/enieto8/y1bllss5zzlwapfj/wish/1657298891 2021-07-21 16:44:51 UTC https://padlet.com/enieto8/y1bllss5zzlwapfj/wish/1657298891 Sole Ayora https://padlet.com/enieto8/y1bllss5zzlwapfj/wish/1658663848 Complete Exercise 7.7. Pg. 310: 1. Make annotations on: Inappropriate 2. Vocabulary, 3.  incoherent ideas, 4. ask questions about the essay, 5, make suggestions for rewording, 6. insert missing ideas,7.  underline key sentences, 8. identify useful phrases, 9. give general feedback. 
  

2: The language is not inappropiate but it is informal due to the type of communication.
3. Some incoherent ideas are the one who makes references of other people talking because she is not clear with some external person 
4: Why are people not answering completly?
HOw was the moment created?
5. Maybe more clarity between ideas.
6. Missing ideas of how the person interviewed acted 
8. The conclusion.
9. It was good but wasnt very clear in what said each person.

]]> 2021-07-22 21:42:23 UTC https://padlet.com/enieto8/y1bllss5zzlwapfj/wish/1658663848 Miguel marmol abad https://padlet.com/enieto8/y1bllss5zzlwapfj/wish/1658670890 2. The language in that example of HL Essay is informal and not very serious, because of the words that are use. The terminology is a coloquial one, not an academic english, being a not well written HL essay.]]> 2021-07-22 21:58:19 UTC https://padlet.com/enieto8/y1bllss5zzlwapfj/wish/1658670890 Samantha Fuentes gsfuentesl https://padlet.com/enieto8/y1bllss5zzlwapfj/wish/1658673485 https://docs.google.com/document/d/1tzsJl-WDaatMRUdAmFu-dyBlgKQ0ZS4C3x5lXtMB5YM/edit?usp=sharing]]> 2021-07-22 22:04:19 UTC https://padlet.com/enieto8/y1bllss5zzlwapfj/wish/1658673485 Ana Paula Olaya apolayaf https://padlet.com/enieto8/y1bllss5zzlwapfj/wish/1658701901 2021-07-22 23:08:26 UTC https://padlet.com/enieto8/y1bllss5zzlwapfj/wish/1658701901 Valentina Serrano. vfserranoo https://padlet.com/enieto8/y1bllss5zzlwapfj/wish/1659058580 2021-07-23 04:14:56 UTC https://padlet.com/enieto8/y1bllss5zzlwapfj/wish/1659058580