https://padlet.com/26shunter/xtgk0c1dbvm0 Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2019-12-05 19:28:51 UTC 2019-12-10 19:21:20 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.net/icons/png/1f3c0.png 26jleske https://padlet.com/26shunter/xtgk0c1dbvm0/wish/420963080 One thing you did well on in your story is using similes. One simile I thought was really good was “As Case slowly gets out of bed like a sloth. I also thought it was good was how you incorporated most of the comments I gave you. One thing I wished you did was read over your story a little more carefully because sometimes it wouldn’t make sense or there would be spelling errors.]]> 2019-12-06 19:31:25 UTC https://padlet.com/26shunter/xtgk0c1dbvm0/wish/420963080 26cherb https://padlet.com/26shunter/xtgk0c1dbvm0/wish/422377832 One thing I like is the title it gives a lot of details but at the same time it can be anything. It helps people want to read it. Another thing is that i liked the start and it was super helpful on the actions of case like when you said. “As Case slowly gets out of bed like a sloth he seems very unexcited for his first practice.  “Ughh!,”  groaned Case I’m never going to be as good as the other players.” “I’m definitely going to make a bad impression.”. One thing I  can tell you to fix is the run on sentences.

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