https://padlet.com/29gjohnson/xnmd0a5bs36d1w31 Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2022-10-21 15:31:12 UTC 2025-12-18 18:21:34 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.net/icons/png/264b.png 29cfriends https://padlet.com/29gjohnson/xnmd0a5bs36d1w31/wish/2357741170 The way you expressed your emotions about your dog was great! Your internal dialog definitely helped me understand how you felt. But you could definitely use another re read and edit your grammar.]]> 2022-10-26 17:46:38 UTC https://padlet.com/29gjohnson/xnmd0a5bs36d1w31/wish/2357741170 https://padlet.com/29gjohnson/xnmd0a5bs36d1w31/wish/2489956123 Hi Gabby. A strength of your essay is your transition words. They are beautiful, good vocab, and it seems like you put a lot of effort into making it. One that really stood out to me was essential. That was really beautiful and I know that if I was writing, I wouldn’t have thought of that. Additionally, I love how you elaborate your explanation. It really helped me understand what your evidence meant and why you chose it. One suggestion however, is to make your anecdotes longer. It needs sensory detail and more elaboration. You need to make it longer. Also, in the anecdote, you use words like “you” and “your.” There should be NO personal pronouns and you completely disobeyed that and added “you” anyways. Instead, I would put words like “a student.” Overall, I enjoyed reading your piece a lot.]]> 2023-02-21 16:25:44 UTC https://padlet.com/29gjohnson/xnmd0a5bs36d1w31/wish/2489956123 29dsmeltzer https://padlet.com/29gjohnson/xnmd0a5bs36d1w31/wish/2526230377 something amazing about this theme analysis is that you actually thought of a different theme then most people will think of, which to me is impressive. I believe that the theme is nice, and can relate to everyone! Wether it’s about skin color, or motivation issues! Anything! But, something that’s not  boundin’ into my face would be the title. I’m pretty sure, (if I remember right) that ms. Which are said the title can’t be the name or the short. Already a down, and one of the guidelines  does say “Add a catchy title for your paragraph” which, the simple name of the short isn’t gonna cut it. With the least amount of offense, I do think you could improve within the next writing piece.. But that is not very much. Because your theme analysis is already very good, it’s just the details that could make it better! Good job either way!]]> 2023-03-22 00:16:31 UTC https://padlet.com/29gjohnson/xnmd0a5bs36d1w31/wish/2526230377