Strategic Choices made by the Writer: Sample A or Sample B: Period Two by Martin McCarrick https://padlet.com/martin_j_mccarr/xm4gvcpdk78lt4o0 en-us 2023-12-12 11:27:13 UTC 2023-12-13 14:13:41 UTC hello@padlet.com Jasmin Alfaro 455017 https://padlet.com/martin_j_mccarr/xm4gvcpdk78lt4o0/wish/2822517617 Diction: The use of the words "treacherous" and "unattainable"


Allusion: Quotes from famous shows or people (Hannah Montana and Kelly Clarkson)

]]> 2023-12-12 13:56:07 UTC https://padlet.com/martin_j_mccarr/xm4gvcpdk78lt4o0/wish/2822517617 Jace Flores https://padlet.com/martin_j_mccarr/xm4gvcpdk78lt4o0/wish/2822521516 Uses elevated language to emphasize and support specific sentences and claims.


Uses personal experience as evidence to support her defensible thesis.

]]> 2023-12-12 13:58:27 UTC https://padlet.com/martin_j_mccarr/xm4gvcpdk78lt4o0/wish/2822521516 Greer https://padlet.com/martin_j_mccarr/xm4gvcpdk78lt4o0/wish/2822523585 The writer uses an anecdote of soccer from her childhood to illustrate her point and relate to her audience.


The writer also uses allusion to pop culture in order to further connect with her audience

]]> 2023-12-12 13:59:56 UTC https://padlet.com/martin_j_mccarr/xm4gvcpdk78lt4o0/wish/2822523585 Jocelyn Campos https://padlet.com/martin_j_mccarr/xm4gvcpdk78lt4o0/wish/2822527868 Transition words: the use of however was used in two paragraphs to change the topic of each paragraph


cumulative sentence: when the writer talks about how perfection is used in a positive and negative tone it's not just used for one specific subject

]]> 2023-12-12 14:03:04 UTC https://padlet.com/martin_j_mccarr/xm4gvcpdk78lt4o0/wish/2822527868 Yanina Paz-Lopez https://padlet.com/martin_j_mccarr/xm4gvcpdk78lt4o0/wish/2822528297 Uses elevated language to emphasize the claims and evidence that she is using to support the claims that they are making.


The writer uses allusions by having quotes from famous/well known people in the text which supports the claims that she is making

]]> 2023-12-12 14:03:25 UTC https://padlet.com/martin_j_mccarr/xm4gvcpdk78lt4o0/wish/2822528297 maria abarca https://padlet.com/martin_j_mccarr/xm4gvcpdk78lt4o0/wish/2822531231 -personal experience to support her thesis

"I scored 2 goals....."


-writer uses allusion with quotes from famous people/TV shows

]]> 2023-12-12 14:05:21 UTC https://padlet.com/martin_j_mccarr/xm4gvcpdk78lt4o0/wish/2822531231 McKinley https://padlet.com/martin_j_mccarr/xm4gvcpdk78lt4o0/wish/2822533485 Juxtaposes the difference in perfection between a Fashion designers and a Doctor.


Defends the value of striving for perfection through real life examples such as Thomas Edison and Space X explorer.

]]> 2023-12-12 14:07:03 UTC https://padlet.com/martin_j_mccarr/xm4gvcpdk78lt4o0/wish/2822533485 Jenn Maravilla https://padlet.com/martin_j_mccarr/xm4gvcpdk78lt4o0/wish/2822538342 The writer uses real life scenarios as examples to support their claim. "If no value was placed upon striving for perfection, doctors would have no need to go through years of schooling and residency to ensure they are prepared to perform."

Uses transitions words and has a topic sentence for each paragraph regarding to the prompt.


]]> 2023-12-12 14:10:22 UTC https://padlet.com/martin_j_mccarr/xm4gvcpdk78lt4o0/wish/2822538342 Melissa Campos-Melgar 2097344 https://padlet.com/martin_j_mccarr/xm4gvcpdk78lt4o0/wish/2822543011 Uses emphatic language to emphasize her claim and the evidence she uses to support it.


The writer uses Allusions by using famous quotes from famous people/TV Shows.

]]> 2023-12-12 14:13:35 UTC https://padlet.com/martin_j_mccarr/xm4gvcpdk78lt4o0/wish/2822543011 Matthew Earp https://padlet.com/martin_j_mccarr/xm4gvcpdk78lt4o0/wish/2822548453 The Author presents a defensible thesis "The value of perfection is none because it simply doesn't exist".

]]> 2023-12-12 14:17:25 UTC https://padlet.com/martin_j_mccarr/xm4gvcpdk78lt4o0/wish/2822548453 Justin https://padlet.com/martin_j_mccarr/xm4gvcpdk78lt4o0/wish/2822549906 reformed argument: provides apporirateand relevent evidences examples like using how doctors and fashions designers need to strive for perfection. Uses transitons between each paragraph. ]]> 2023-12-12 14:18:22 UTC https://padlet.com/martin_j_mccarr/xm4gvcpdk78lt4o0/wish/2822549906 Matthew Earp https://padlet.com/martin_j_mccarr/xm4gvcpdk78lt4o0/wish/2822550903 Elevated language was used such as "Arrogance" "Connotation" "Unenviable"

]]> 2023-12-12 14:19:05 UTC https://padlet.com/martin_j_mccarr/xm4gvcpdk78lt4o0/wish/2822550903 Matthew Earp https://padlet.com/martin_j_mccarr/xm4gvcpdk78lt4o0/wish/2822552968 Effective use of a metaphor "Bombarded with resources".

]]> 2023-12-12 14:20:33 UTC https://padlet.com/martin_j_mccarr/xm4gvcpdk78lt4o0/wish/2822552968 Natalie Fuentes https://padlet.com/martin_j_mccarr/xm4gvcpdk78lt4o0/wish/2823938563 Substitution based on word choice.

"..concept that several people strive for.."

"..the value of perfection is none.."


Good use of counterargument

"Negative when regarding comparison in a negative light or positive when praising someone for other extravagant work"


]]> 2023-12-13 14:13:41 UTC https://padlet.com/martin_j_mccarr/xm4gvcpdk78lt4o0/wish/2823938563