https://padlet.com/zahra2359/Bookmarks Made with a lightning strike of genius en-us 2020-03-16 04:53:50 UTC 2025-12-07 12:58:25 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.net/icons/png/1f680.png zahra2359 https://padlet.com/zahra2359/Bookmarks/wish/476428820 2020-03-26 13:14:42 UTC https://padlet.com/zahra2359/Bookmarks/wish/476428820 zahra2359 https://padlet.com/zahra2359/Bookmarks/wish/510631002 Zahra, I know that you have tried comparing between walkman and Spotify. but I don't feel the comparison in it. you describe a lot but you don't really include how the present and past different. 

I suggest you do this: 
pick two features of Spotify that you want to compare with Sony walkman. 

example: 
1. price
Spotify subscription per month is 60K but we can download as many albums as we want. MEANWHILE with walkman we had to buy a cassette for 20K for only one album.even the 60K in Spotify also includes podcasts, which means Spotify is cheaper 

2. durability
cassette did not last long if we often rewind or fast forward. (ini saya ambil contoh essay kamu)the reel could be easily broken. with Spotify, we can rewind all we want and repeat the same song without worry

do not say anything about recording songs on walkman or anything. that will distract the focus of your essay. 

so, let me repeat. your essay is actually fine. but it does not feel like a comparison. please just re-arrange the structure like I suggested.]]> 2020-04-16 13:10:39 UTC https://padlet.com/zahra2359/Bookmarks/wish/510631002 zahra2359 https://padlet.com/zahra2359/Bookmarks/wish/510635106 Zahra // 0403519062 // IG19C]]> 2020-04-16 13:12:26 UTC https://padlet.com/zahra2359/Bookmarks/wish/510635106 zahra2359 https://padlet.com/zahra2359/Bookmarks/wish/634443372 2020-06-20 15:44:05 UTC https://padlet.com/zahra2359/Bookmarks/wish/634443372