I showed personal growth in my narrative by showing how we went from overlooked and not super confident to confident.

The only area was for punctuation, so I need to go back and see where I messed up in that area.

I have been struggling with my vocab through the 3 different essays so I tried to improve my vocab through my final essay and also went through my other essays to revise. Added more vulnerability and sentences flow through my writings

advancing my core values and vulnerability, and being able to open up within my writings.

I showed personal growth in how I loved building with legos as a kid, and how I grew up in that and decided to be a construction plumber.

I need to work on sewing more vulnerability throughout the essay and possibly add more sensory details

I showed personal growth through the lessons my dad, taught me. He taught me to be hard-working and never give up. He also taught me to Honor or military and be a servant to others.

I am going to work on my vocabulary using more unique sentence patterns and showing the story rather than telling it. I also need to work on my conclusion, I used too many sentences that meant the same thing differently.

Some personal growth that I showed throughout this rough draft is having a better work ethic in what I did. I showed this by explaining what I did previously and what I do now.

One of the things that I need to work on is my use of better vocabulary. I'm going to work at the boring words and bring them more to life with it still flowing well

I showed a little personal growth with how what I wrote about changed how I think about certain things

I need to explain things more and need to have more variety and not be as repetative

I showed personal growth by including ways that my dad has both challenged and impacted the person I am today

I received feedback on sentence structure. I can make my sentences more complex with variety by making sure I am not repeating anything but still able to get the same point across.

I showed growth through events but could go more in depth

Some sentences seem choppy in a few paragraphs. Need to have better flow.

the personal growth I showed through my essay is perseverance in the face of challenges and never backing down no matter what comes my way

I need to fix the run ons and my essay was too long. I also need to use more advance vocabulary

I showed personal growth in my narrative by adding more vulnerability and I feel like I did better with that in this essay. I would like to add more detail to my essay thought instead of just telling the story.

I got a lot of feedback on repetitiveness especially in the last paragraph. I agree with that feedback after reading it back because a lot of the sentences sound similar. I plan to go back to those areas and fix the repetitiveness.

The personal growth I demonstrated in my writing was growing self-confidence and learning to make friends. I showed this by sharing what an impact the Concordia shooting sports team made on my life and what their friendship sparked in me.

I received feedback on my writing craft, I was told that I need to connect my first and second paragraphs better (which I agree with), I plan on fixing this by receiving more feedback from others to find a better way to connect my paragraphs.

I showed personal growth by explaining that I lost self-esteem, but regained that confidence back when transferring. I became a better leader, friend, and person.

I need to work on more complex vocab and sentences, I also need to go more in depth why I chose to come to lcs and add more info on it.

I discovered my passion and what I want for my future through my grandpa and his dedication

I received a lot of feedback on choppy sentences and I will fix that by revising the specific sentences in question

I personally don't think I did a very good job with this essay cause I wrote it very quickly and forgot sentence structure and good grammar. there was personal growth in it however with how I've continued deer hunting throughout my life

my sentence structure and grammar received negative feedback rightfully so and I didn't even split up my paragraphs I will make sure to be more careful about it hopefully by giving myself more time on the final draft

I wanted to show how much I love children and I did that by having my dream job be a mom. I have grown enough to be confident in raising children.

I need to connect the paragraphs instead of letting them stand on their own. I am going to achieve this by connecting the last sentence of the paragraph to the first sentence of the next paragraph. I will also connect simple sentences making them more complex.

I showed personal growth in the sense of showing how my work ethic and how hard I worked to achieve what I wanted.

An area I received feedback on was that my sentences seemed to be a little choppy, so my plan is to combine some to make it better.

I showed growth as I had a problem with something and overcame it to see the other perspective

I received feedback on using better sentences, and words. I will do things by replacing some words and sentences by using better ones

I showed personal growth through what I have been doing by taking in constructive criticism positively and applying that the more I write my papers.

I showed personal growth by showing how even though the person who was there to watch me made me nervous, by the end of the race and during it, I was pretty calm and realized that I didn't need to be nervous at all

Showing a little bit more personal growth by adding more details and clarity to my writing about how it made me feel when Nikki came to watch me and comparing how I felt at the beginning to how I felt at the end

I had to write 2 essays because the first one was very creative and philosophical but it mention nothing about what the prompt was about so I made another one and it came out pretty good and showed how I improve by completely restarting and making a new one.

The areas that I could work on for the new one I don't know for now but what I've heard from some peer members that read it is that its good but good is not the answer im looking for but what I've seen in my own work is that i need more connections and vocab.

I think I showed growth through the process of slowly getting better at a skill and not giving up

I need to work on run on sentences, I can fix this by rereading my work and splitting up long sentences

through this piece, values were shown through hard work and perseverance. maybe could add in even stronger values.

Wording was probably the main thing, as well as adding in sensory details.