https://padlet.com/rachelwilliams16/xaj98sl9kuydd26z Choose one of the anchor papers. Give two pieces of evidence to support that it meets the success criteria for sentence fluency. en-us 2022-10-03 01:45:40 UTC 2022-10-13 18:19:22 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.net/icons/png/270d.png rachelwilliams16 https://padlet.com/rachelwilliams16/xaj98sl9kuydd26z/wish/2323038519 2022-10-03 01:49:00 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelwilliams16/xaj98sl9kuydd26z/wish/2323038519 rachelwilliams16 https://padlet.com/rachelwilliams16/xaj98sl9kuydd26z/wish/2323038977 2022-10-03 01:49:45 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelwilliams16/xaj98sl9kuydd26z/wish/2323038977 https://padlet.com/rachelwilliams16/xaj98sl9kuydd26z/wish/2339246593 One thing that was done well was they weren't choppy or didn't say the same thing at the beginning of every sentence.one thing that could change is in the first paragraph of Christmas is the best holiday it gives me one example of why thing would be just sad then the paragraph just says see the difference. ]]> 2022-10-13 18:15:43 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelwilliams16/xaj98sl9kuydd26z/wish/2339246593 https://padlet.com/rachelwilliams16/xaj98sl9kuydd26z/wish/2339246595 One thing that was done well was the facts it gave a lot of facts and information people will need. One thing that could be better is more of the if it could be more of the burning steel that could be another fact that sentence just doesn't belong in the paragraph it needs more facts so we could maybe learn some new things if you didn't already know about it.]]> 2022-10-13 18:15:43 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelwilliams16/xaj98sl9kuydd26z/wish/2339246595 https://padlet.com/rachelwilliams16/xaj98sl9kuydd26z/wish/2339246601 one thing that was well was long sentenses that are clear one thing that can be better is there was a sort sentens on the second paragraph the was unexseptiable ]]> 2022-10-13 18:15:43 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelwilliams16/xaj98sl9kuydd26z/wish/2339246601 30millsi https://padlet.com/rachelwilliams16/xaj98sl9kuydd26z/wish/2339246617 One thing that was done well was they used a bunch of big words. One thing that could be better was stop putting family so much.]]> 2022-10-13 18:15:44 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelwilliams16/xaj98sl9kuydd26z/wish/2339246617 https://padlet.com/rachelwilliams16/xaj98sl9kuydd26z/wish/2339246635 I liked that they used the sentence "people would be down in the dumps"

What I think could be better is if they didn't say family as much.]]> 2022-10-13 18:15:45 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelwilliams16/xaj98sl9kuydd26z/wish/2339246635 https://padlet.com/rachelwilliams16/xaj98sl9kuydd26z/wish/2339246636 I think that raging was a good word to say instead of bad. Also, Frightening is a good word to say instead of scary. The only bad thing is that there is nothing bad.]]> 2022-10-13 18:15:45 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelwilliams16/xaj98sl9kuydd26z/wish/2339246636 https://padlet.com/rachelwilliams16/xaj98sl9kuydd26z/wish/2339246682 One thing that was done well was how they used a lot of figurative language. One thing that could be better is, they could tell us more facts about sequoias. Because there was a single fact ,and then you just see the ending and then there is nothing else]]> 2022-10-13 18:15:47 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelwilliams16/xaj98sl9kuydd26z/wish/2339246682 30lawrencea https://padlet.com/rachelwilliams16/xaj98sl9kuydd26z/wish/2339246838 one thing they could change is instead of saying christmas in every sentence they could change the sentence.]]> 2022-10-13 18:15:53 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelwilliams16/xaj98sl9kuydd26z/wish/2339246838 https://padlet.com/rachelwilliams16/xaj98sl9kuydd26z/wish/2339247960 own thing that was done well is the umwnt of santens. own thing that could be better is all of teas the's]]> 2022-10-13 18:16:40 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelwilliams16/xaj98sl9kuydd26z/wish/2339247960 https://padlet.com/rachelwilliams16/xaj98sl9kuydd26z/wish/2339248068 Anchor paper 1

     Something good they did. They used more than just a period every sentence.

Something they could work on. Little bit longer sentences.

Anchor paper 2

Something good they did. used punctuation and used commas

Something bad they did. Their sentences were very choppy.   ]]> 2022-10-13 18:16:44 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelwilliams16/xaj98sl9kuydd26z/wish/2339248068 https://padlet.com/rachelwilliams16/xaj98sl9kuydd26z/wish/2339248267 One thing that was done well was, You didn't start your sentences with the same word over and over again.

One thing that could be better is, Don't go straight on with your sentence. You went like... " Imagine a life without Christmas In December..." So don't go straight on with your story. And you also are saying Christmas to much I know your whole story is about Christmas but try not to say it that much.]]> 2022-10-13 18:16:52 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelwilliams16/xaj98sl9kuydd26z/wish/2339248267 https://padlet.com/rachelwilliams16/xaj98sl9kuydd26z/wish/2339248588 paper 1

 one thing that was done well was they had different starter sentences
one thing that could use work was there was a few choppy sentences]]> 2022-10-13 18:17:07 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelwilliams16/xaj98sl9kuydd26z/wish/2339248588 https://padlet.com/rachelwilliams16/xaj98sl9kuydd26z/wish/2339250335 they did a good job by making a good story but mabe not use the same words over agen]]> 2022-10-13 18:18:12 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelwilliams16/xaj98sl9kuydd26z/wish/2339250335 https://padlet.com/rachelwilliams16/xaj98sl9kuydd26z/wish/2339251449 one thing that was done well was the facts about wildfires.
one thing that could be better if they did not say christmas that much.]]> 2022-10-13 18:18:56 UTC https://padlet.com/rachelwilliams16/xaj98sl9kuydd26z/wish/2339251449