https://padlet.com/23jberry/x0xeeb3irwsy Hello! Welcome to my padlet, thank you for reading my writing pieces, I look forward to your feedback Please comment positively :) en-us 2018-02-01 15:01:29 UTC 2018-03-28 14:21:50 UTC hello@padlet.com Hpaige https://padlet.com/23jberry/x0xeeb3irwsy/wish/236955843 My two stars are I like how you included a lot of different moves that included diversity and no diversity, and I was surprised by how many moves that were based on diversity were really voiced by white people.  My one wish for you is that next time only include their last names when you are talking about them (so instead of Will Smith just write, Smith)
-Paige]]> 2018-03-01 15:18:05 UTC https://padlet.com/23jberry/x0xeeb3irwsy/wish/236955843 23mboone https://padlet.com/23jberry/x0xeeb3irwsy/wish/237381039 I really liked how your story would be relatable to people I also enjoyed how you had me hanging on the edge of my seat as the climax reared up it was really good. Some that you need to work on is the way you phrase your sentences and how you spell your words check your G.U.M.S.
Sincerely- Morgan Boone]]> 2018-03-02 13:39:40 UTC https://padlet.com/23jberry/x0xeeb3irwsy/wish/237381039 https://padlet.com/23jberry/x0xeeb3irwsy/wish/237400329 I really liked your vignette . It really painted a clear picture in my head on what was going on in that moment for you. One thing you could look to do in the future would just do a quick overview/re read your writing to make sure there are no grammar and spelling mistakes. But that is an easy fix. Overall great job, I really enjoyed your writing. 
-Danielle Most]]> 2018-03-02 14:21:10 UTC https://padlet.com/23jberry/x0xeeb3irwsy/wish/237400329 Hpaige https://padlet.com/23jberry/x0xeeb3irwsy/wish/246911765 Star: I really like how much detailed you had and how you added a back story to your main character
Wish: next time just read over you piece because there were a couple of mistakes and there are a couple of spots that are a little confusing. over all though it was really interesting and I really like it!]]> 2018-03-28 14:15:25 UTC https://padlet.com/23jberry/x0xeeb3irwsy/wish/246911765