In the living room, you could see my parents medals because they used to join lots of marathons and there's my dad's collection of car toys, there's a yellow car, a blue car and many more.

In my bedroom, I don't put posters up my wall since my mom would be mad at me. But i put a polaroid picture of me and my friends that have been together with since the 1st grade, we would talk all the time but as not much as before, since we're in a different class now. I also put a picture of my family there. i think it was 7 years ago when we took that picture.

I have been a fan of Harry Potter since i'm 5 years old. Besides, I also collect some Harry Potter stuff. It's not that much, but i'm sure you'll love it.

I love to read books and i have tons of it. My favorite books are Harry Potter, Diary of a Wimpy Kid and Alice's Adventure in Wonderland. You know the smell of a book right? It's so good, i don't know how to explain it but it smells like vanilla and i love it so much. I also put a fairy light up my wall, it has plenty of stars.

I have 4 medals in my bedroom, both of my medals are from a choir competition, and one of them is from a marathon I joined in the 1st grade.

In the living room, you could see some music instruments, such as acoustic guitar,electric guitar,violin,piano, and a ukulele. I play the violin and the piano which is really fun but makes me stress at the same time, but i enjoy it!

I have been playing tennis since last year, so i have 2 tennis rackets and 5 tennis balls. I'm not that expert in tennis but i would love to be invited in a tennis competition, even though i need to practice more.

Couple of days later, it was the English storytelling audition for the National competition. I found out that three of my friends had joined the audition, one was a fifth grader and the other two were in the same grade as me. I went to the fourth grade classroom where the audition had located. I went in with my friend who joined the audition too, we saw three of our English teacher, they had been waiting for us. The teacher asked me first to tell the story, and i was very relieved after that because i remembered the story. Two days later, it was my storytelling competition in Indonesian. It was also located at the classroom in fourth grade. I went to the classroom with a trembling voice because i was very nervous.

Then, I saw my teacher who teach me in theather and the fourth grade , i have known him for about a year because he substitute my choir teacher whenever she’s absent from the class. I stood in front of them and they set a timer for 3 minutes, even though my story was 8 minutes long. I told them the story and it went very well.

A week later, i was sitting at my class. My homeroom teacher was telling us some informations about our activity. I was barely half awake since it was in the morning. All of a sudden, i heared my teacher was talking about storytelling competitions. I also heared my name in it in, and she told my friends and i that i qualified for the Indonesian storytelling competition, that means i will be competing for the Nationals. All of my friends clapped for me and i found out that i was 3 out of 8 or probably 6 kids that joined the audition.

The next day, i got another message, it says said that i was qualified for the English storytelling competition. I was very happy, i got to join two National storytelling competitions for the first time.

A month had passed, i was practicing my story for the competition and at that time i joined an International choir competition. So i did not practice storytelling for a week because i was joining the choir competition. Eventually we got gold medal! Me and my choir team were very happy. After the choir competition i practiced again for the storytelling competition. I was not allowed to eat fried foods and drink cold drinks. During practice, my teachers would set a timer so they will know how many minutes did me and my friends tell the story, because the maximum is only 5 minutes. My English story was 4 and a half minutes long but my Indonesian story was 8 minutes, so i removed some of the script and make it less long.

2 months later, it was the day before the storytelling competition. My teacher told me that both of my competition will be in a different day, but unfortunately the schedule changed. So i will be doing both of my competitions in the same day. The next day, i went to school pretty late than usual because my competition started at 8:30 AM. I was the third participant to do the storytelling and was very nervous.

My story was about a little boy named Billy, he met an Elephant at the circus. My costume was a clown wearing an elephant hat because in the story there was an elephant. My competition was online, so we were using laptops. A little mic was attached to my shirt and it was my time to shine. I finally finished my English competition and changed costumes for my Indonesian storytelling competition. I wore a Kebaya because my story was about Timun Mas, an Indonesian folkstory. I was the last participant to tell the story, and i did it pretty well.

Few months had passed, it was a rainy cold day and it was the time for the announcement of the winners. I was very excited, i told my friends about it and they were excited. My teacher send me a link, it was the winners of the competition. But the competition was not only about storytelling, and it was not there yet so i have to wait. Since i already got picked up, i went straight to my house. Waited a few hours and there it is, the announcement of the winners in the storytelling competition. Sadly i did not win both of the competitions i joined, but some of my friends did and i was very happy for them.

Even though i lost, i was not giving up to join other competitions. Storytelling makes me want to join theater clubs and hopefully act in movies, it also teaches me to express my feelings through tell a story.

Since I was a child, my parents encouraged me to read. Historical and fantasy fiction was my favorite genre, and I had an obsession with history. After reading, I would tell my parents what was the story like by doing such a little drama. I was an expressive child and would tell stories to people i'm close with (except i was a very shy kid).

My interests was not just reading though, I also play some musical instruments, specifically violin and traditional instruments. As I grew older, I started to join storytelling competitions because lots of teachers saw my speaking skills. Not only music and storytelling, I also gained interest in tennis.

Well, because of my interests, I started to think. What will I be and do for the future? I wanted to be a teacher or a professor when I was six, but i don't really like teaching though. Ever since then, I did some little researches about jobs that has histories in it and I was very interested being an archeologist. But it's not enough, I wanted more jobs other than that. I watched Harry Potter movies and saw how Emma Watson, Maggie Smith, Daniel Radcliffe and Rupert Grint acted, it made me interested. It also seemed pretty fun, since I enjoyed storytelling and act during my favorite subject(which is theater). Still, it's not enough. I wanted more and more jobs and

Once, I also thought that becoming a professional tennis player seems fun too. Coco Gauff made me interested in tennis, so as Rafael Nadal, Djokovic and Roger Federer.

I think that's enough, but what university will I study at after Highschool? I searched top 10 universities in the whole world and Oxford has my heart. But wait, before that I wanted to be in Harvard but I changed my mind. Anyway, I want to have full scholarship to Oxford. That means I need to study more, join lots of competitions, and get a high score in English. Hopefully, I will be an actress, archeologist and a professional tennis player who studies at Oxford. If you ask me again, if there's another job and universities other than that. I will probably be a professional quidditch player that studies at Hogwarts, hehe just kidding, Hogwarts is not real.

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The writing flow is already good. I saw some grammatical mistakes and I've already fix that.

Learn in giving a gap in paragraph, comma, and point, for making a good writing flow.

In written English, type the word 'I' with capitals.

I still see some sentence in your writing seemed like it's spoken, not written.

It's already good though if you've made this as a creative writing.

Gwen said that memory was just one piece of the puzzle when it came to train our brain. Leo agree with Gwen’s statement and he said that keeping our brain sharp is as important as keeping our body fit. He said that laughter was really great too for brain health. Leo said he had noticed after a good walk he could focus better on his work, and he asked if we had ever felt that way.

He added that memory palace sounded like a place he would love to visit.

He said that his brain felt like it was running on empty Whenever he could get less than six hours of sleep.

and finally, then Gwen persuaded us to train our brain the same as our body.

Roger Federer won 20 Grand Slam singles titles, eight Wimbledon titles and was reached the finals of all four Grand Slam tournaments three times in the same year.

His greatest was the US Open Final against Lleyton Hewitt, as he said in his interview. Sadly in September 2022, he retired due to knee injuries that required multiple injuries.

Note: The grammar is almost perfect, I just found one mistake here.

But I didn’t see much of passive tense that you made in this text. Next time, we can try to make a text that has a full context of passive voice sentence.

Besides that, I think you’ve already understood about the using of Passive, right?

and one thing, as a short biography of someone, the writing flow is already smooth here.

Edinburgh Castle was used for lots of purposes, such as a royal residence, and a prison but its main purposes was for military. The castle was damaged in many blockade, specifically the Lang Siege in the 16th century and the Jacobite Rising in 1745.

Even though it was brutally damaged, many Scottish and English monarchs lived there. Mary Queen of Scots stayed in the castle and gave birth to James VI.

Not only Mary Queen of Scots, King Charles was the last person who also stayed at the castle before his Scottish coronation in 1633. There are more people who also stayed in Edinburgh Castle, such as Queen Margaret, King James IV, James VI, Oliver Cromwell, Sir Walter Scott and Hippolyte Blanc.

Nowadays, it is used for tourist attraction since no one would live there for a full time.

Tourists visits the Edinburgh Castle, besides of its historic building and history, it contains the Honours of Scotland, which are the oldest crown jewels in Britain.

I will share to you about my hobby and why I enjoy it.

So, my hobby is playing games on my mobile phone. I have many games application on my phone. There are some games that I like.

The first one is the games for playing football. The name of the game is E-football.

In that game, I can choose and set the player and manager in the football match. Also, there are many events in this game. The events can give me many of great football player through joining them.

In E-football games, I can adjust the strategy and formation in the game, so that I can win from the match easily.

However, In this game, I found some challenges. Sometimes, it is so difficult to collect coins to buy good player and manager in this game, and I also get some bugs and the bad signal when I play the game. But, all the challenges doesn’t stop my hobby to play this game.

The second game that I like is Mobile Legend games. This game is a multiplayer online battle arena. I like to play this game because in this game, we need to set many strategies and also the teamwork with other players to win this game.

In this game I can choose many character of heroes that I like. I have to attack the enemy’s base while protecting my base to win the game. I like to use marksman character called “Granger” because It can make a lot of damage on the enemy.

That’s all for the games that I like to play. Overall, I enjoy this hobby so much. It is because many things I can get from playing games. First, playing games overcome my boredom. When I’m bored, I can play many events in the game. Besides that, through playing games, I can build a good relationship with my friends. While we’re playing, I can talk and laugh together with my friend about the game. So, I think I will never stop playing the games and make it as my hobby.

That’s all I can explain about my hobby. Thank you for hearing my story.

Good morning.

It’s very common to see people smoking, such as elders, adults and even teens.

They can’t resist to smoke at any time (driving, eating etc), and throwing used cigarettes everywhere because it’s like their daily life and as a way to cope during their difficult situations. They are extremely dangerous for our health and could possibly cause many serious problems, like cancer, heart disease, stroke and many more. It also harms people around you, even if they’re not smoking.

In 1990, United States, 418,690 people died to due smoking and that was about 20% of all deaths that year.

To sum up, smokers likely to get various health problems and I believe smoking cigarettes or a new electronic smoking device called vape are to blame. Teenagers are starting to discover about cigarettes, and start to use it as their daily life. They became very addicted to it and could not stop.

In conclusion, cigarettes ruin physically, mentally and emotionally. People should stop smoking, start a new healthy way for their daily life and ban cigarettes as soon as possible.