Group Sakura: Organising an argument... by Denny Vlaeva https://padlet.com/dvlaeva/wta7ttn577dm ...because someone (Denny) messed it up en-us 2018-05-21 21:34:02 UTC 2025-10-18 15:23:31 UTC hello@padlet.com [ topic sentence ] dvlaeva https://padlet.com/dvlaeva/wta7ttn577dm/wish/262512807 c. It is often claimed that if one lives within the law, being seen on CCTV is irrelevant (e.g. Clam, 2004, Johns, 2005a). This position, however, does not take into account the sense of fear that this can cause.]]> 2018-05-21 21:34:02 UTC https://padlet.com/dvlaeva/wta7ttn577dm/wish/262512807 [ evidence] dvlaeva https://padlet.com/dvlaeva/wta7ttn577dm/wish/262512809 a. More specifically, constantly being watched can cause a sense of guilt in a person and therefore bring about a fear of punishment.]]> 2018-05-21 21:34:02 UTC https://padlet.com/dvlaeva/wta7ttn577dm/wish/262512809 [ explanation] dvlaeva https://padlet.com/dvlaeva/wta7ttn577dm/wish/262512810 d. Evidence for such a position comes from Smith and Jones (2008) who conducted a survey on how people felt when they were being watched. A number of interviewees (60%) admitted that they checked to see if they had done something wrong, or were ‘nervous’ (p.453).]]> 2018-05-21 21:34:02 UTC https://padlet.com/dvlaeva/wta7ttn577dm/wish/262512810 [ commentary] dvlaeva https://padlet.com/dvlaeva/wta7ttn577dm/wish/262512811 b. Although the study was limited to one area, it does suggest that CCTV cameras can have a negative effect on society.]]> 2018-05-21 21:34:02 UTC https://padlet.com/dvlaeva/wta7ttn577dm/wish/262512811 [evidence] dvlaeva https://padlet.com/dvlaeva/wta7ttn577dm/wish/262512812 a. According to a 1991 visitor survey (Tourism Council of the South Pacific, 1991), after beach activities and natural scenery (62%), visitors to the Cook Islands are looking for entertainment and folklore and cultural experiences (37%).]]> 2018-05-21 21:34:02 UTC https://padlet.com/dvlaeva/wta7ttn577dm/wish/262512812 [commentary] dvlaeva https://padlet.com/dvlaeva/wta7ttn577dm/wish/262512813 b. Tourists are thus helping to create jobs which are based on making them feel welcome and at the same time they put cash into the economy directly by paying for services.]]> 2018-05-21 21:34:02 UTC https://padlet.com/dvlaeva/wta7ttn577dm/wish/262512813 [topic sentence] dvlaeva https://padlet.com/dvlaeva/wta7ttn577dm/wish/262512814 c. Turning first to the economic benefits of tourism, we can see that in the case of the Cook Islands, there is a variety of sources of income from tourist receipts.]]> 2018-05-21 21:34:02 UTC https://padlet.com/dvlaeva/wta7ttn577dm/wish/262512814 [evidence ] dvlaeva https://padlet.com/dvlaeva/wta7ttn577dm/wish/262512815 d. Tourists contribute to the local economy by spending money on travel to and around the country, as well as on accommodation, food, entertainment and souvenirs. Myles (2004), for example, found that close to 70% of total tourist expenditure was on accommodation, restaurants and bars, with a further 16% on transport, tours and entertainment.]]> 2018-05-21 21:34:02 UTC https://padlet.com/dvlaeva/wta7ttn577dm/wish/262512815 [ commentary] dvlaeva https://padlet.com/dvlaeva/wta7ttn577dm/wish/262512816 a. This cost, it could be argued, would have made the drugs affordable to Third world countries.]]> 2018-05-21 21:34:02 UTC https://padlet.com/dvlaeva/wta7ttn577dm/wish/262512816 [commentary] dvlaeva https://padlet.com/dvlaeva/wta7ttn577dm/wish/262512817 b. This increased charge most probably prevents sub-Saharan countries from investing in treatments for HIV/AIDS.]]> 2018-05-21 21:34:02 UTC https://padlet.com/dvlaeva/wta7ttn577dm/wish/262512817 [topic sentence] dvlaeva https://padlet.com/dvlaeva/wta7ttn577dm/wish/262512818 c. One issue that has brought about the current shortage of available treatment for HIV/AIDS is the ownership of patents.]]> 2018-05-21 21:34:02 UTC https://padlet.com/dvlaeva/wta7ttn577dm/wish/262512818 [evidence] dvlaeva https://padlet.com/dvlaeva/wta7ttn577dm/wish/262512819 d. In India, for example, the government allowed the copying of drugs that had been patented by multinational pharmaceutical industries. This copying led to a reduction in the cost of antiretrovirals from $15,000 to $200 (Harris, 2011).]]> 2018-05-21 21:34:02 UTC https://padlet.com/dvlaeva/wta7ttn577dm/wish/262512819 [evidence] dvlaeva https://padlet.com/dvlaeva/wta7ttn577dm/wish/262512820 e. The Indian government, however, outlawed the copying of patents in 2005 (ibid.), thus escalating the cost of the antiretrovirals to the original $15,000.]]> 2018-05-21 21:34:02 UTC https://padlet.com/dvlaeva/wta7ttn577dm/wish/262512820 What cohesive devices did you find in the: dvlaeva https://padlet.com/dvlaeva/wta7ttn577dm/wish/262512822 Topic sentence: Turning first to 

Evidence sentence(s): 
According to, for example

Commentary:  sentences+ thus +... base on ...
]]> 2018-05-21 21:34:02 UTC https://padlet.com/dvlaeva/wta7ttn577dm/wish/262512822 What cohesive devices did you find in the: dvlaeva https://padlet.com/dvlaeva/wta7ttn577dm/wish/262512823 Topic sentence:This position, however
Evidence sentence(s):More specifically
Explanation(s):Evidence for such a position comes from
Commentary sentence(s):Although ]]> 2018-05-21 21:34:02 UTC https://padlet.com/dvlaeva/wta7ttn577dm/wish/262512823 What cohesive devices did you find in the: dvlaeva https://padlet.com/dvlaeva/wta7ttn577dm/wish/262512824 Topic sentence:what brought shortage ion HIV treatment
Evidence sentence(s):indian governments
Commentary sentence(s):comments about the cost and increased charge]]> 2018-05-21 21:34:02 UTC https://padlet.com/dvlaeva/wta7ttn577dm/wish/262512824 Organising an argument within a paragraph dvlaeva https://padlet.com/dvlaeva/wta7ttn577dm/wish/262512825 Take a look at this handy guide to writing paragraphs, by the University of the East of London. It reminds us what we discussed and practised about paragraph structure last week, just in a slightly different way - hopefully it's helpful.

When you're finished, try to order these sentences - each colour is a separate scrambled paragraph, on a different topic.

After that, think about what cohesive devices you saw in each part of each para.]]> 2018-05-21 21:34:02 UTC https://padlet.com/dvlaeva/wta7ttn577dm/wish/262512825