Writing productive comments! by Trish Serviss https://padlet.com/pcserviss/wt7rkavlbb00156m Independently read and rate the feedback samples on the Padlet. Discuss your ratings for each feedback sample.Reach consensus on the rating for each sample. Write one group comment on each sample with your final rating and rationale for your rating decision. The rationale should explain how the D-E-S (Describe, Evaluate, Suggest) features within the feedback sample led your group to that rating decision. en-us 2020-08-12 22:15:51 UTC 2020-08-13 20:27:15 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.net/icons/png/1f92f.png pcserviss https://padlet.com/pcserviss/wt7rkavlbb00156m/wish/677897401 I really like how you stated the sources when you analyze your subject's writing style. However, I noticed that you did not indicate any significant patterns besides the fact that Jessica did not like to read. To me, Jessica's perspective on reading is not a pattern, but a fact. I think you can solve this by reviewing your notes and interviews to find any possible pattern that was interesting about Jessica's reading process.


]]> 2020-08-12 22:15:51 UTC https://padlet.com/pcserviss/wt7rkavlbb00156m/wish/677897401 pcserviss https://padlet.com/pcserviss/wt7rkavlbb00156m/wish/677897402 The author wants to end the paper with something. However, if you could write a conclusion paragraph that sums up the paper, it will be much better.]]> 2020-08-12 22:15:51 UTC https://padlet.com/pcserviss/wt7rkavlbb00156m/wish/677897402 pcserviss https://padlet.com/pcserviss/wt7rkavlbb00156m/wish/677897404 You give clear examples but I see that you use the word "Also" several times in the beginning of most sentences. Try to use different transition words or just remove the word as a whole because it makes it feel like a run on sentence.]]> 2020-08-12 22:15:51 UTC https://padlet.com/pcserviss/wt7rkavlbb00156m/wish/677897404 pcserviss https://padlet.com/pcserviss/wt7rkavlbb00156m/wish/677897405 I see that you explained the reading habits of your subject. However, I think that you are trying to convey the importance of these habits by describing them . I suggest that you go more in depth about the significance of these habits and how it affects him as a reader.]]> 2020-08-12 22:15:51 UTC https://padlet.com/pcserviss/wt7rkavlbb00156m/wish/677897405 pcserviss https://padlet.com/pcserviss/wt7rkavlbb00156m/wish/677897406 I can see that you thoroughly identify the trend and specify the origin of the trend. I also recognized that the subject prefers to read with a physical copy rather than electronic because from doing that she can be more engaged in the reading activity. However, where you are lacking is analyzation. I believe that your claim would be much stronger if you analyze why is her habit of reading a physical text significant. It is very important to identify the significance of the trend that you are describing because, without it, your report would just be a summary of the information gathered which is what you seem to do currently. I would suggest that you really look at how the physical copy benefits the way she interprets the text or at least draws conclusions on how electronic texts can hinder the way she reads it.]]> 2020-08-12 22:15:51 UTC https://padlet.com/pcserviss/wt7rkavlbb00156m/wish/677897406 Writing Helpful Comments pcserviss https://padlet.com/pcserviss/wt7rkavlbb00156m/wish/677897407 Helpful comments DESCRIBE what they see the writer trying to do, EVALUATE how well the writing is doing that thing, and SUGGEST how the writer can make specific, focused revisions. 

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