Andres M. Google Sites Peer Feedback 2021 - 2022 by Andres Mora https://padlet.com/28amora/wqx7lpf0utpk1go2 Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2021-10-04 16:01:38 UTC 2022-04-25 15:45:06 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.net/icons/png/1f47e.png Amazing 28nlatham https://padlet.com/28amora/wqx7lpf0utpk1go2/wish/1796645041 I loved how descriptive you were with your writing at certain parts like the beginning where you explained how you were struggling with writing because you were thinking about video games. I don even know what you mean, you did a great job! Also how much you talked about what you liked. I just wish that you wrote a little more about what you liked and hated because I know you liked and hated more. But still, amazing job!]]> 2021-10-06 14:13:57 UTC https://padlet.com/28amora/wqx7lpf0utpk1go2/wish/1796645041 Andres this opening is great! When i saw the name i knew this was going be good. Your introduction is amazing! You hooked me immediately. And Andres ancient tales has a nice ring to it! I also like the description of having your hands glued to your key board, but i do hope if you see this you’ll edit some parts like fix up some areas where your descriptive writing will take a tiny turn for the better of your vocabulary! Next to your cats names you can write about what they do and like, thats my opinion though, you keep it how you wanna! ( trade mark Thomas ) 28tmacisaac https://padlet.com/28amora/wqx7lpf0utpk1go2/wish/1800666039 2021-10-07 18:19:40 UTC https://padlet.com/28amora/wqx7lpf0utpk1go2/wish/1800666039 Great job! 28nlatham https://padlet.com/28amora/wqx7lpf0utpk1go2/wish/1922974794 You did great, I really loved how descriptive you were with your writing and you did a really good job at that. I also loved how you showed your love for the robots from Star Wars! I just wish that you fixed up the punctuation, but other then that your story was fantastic!]]> 2021-12-01 14:54:38 UTC https://padlet.com/28amora/wqx7lpf0utpk1go2/wish/1922974794 A 28sberthold https://padlet.com/28amora/wqx7lpf0utpk1go2/wish/1923561192 A strength I like in you memoir is that you really added so much detail I was able to picture everything like when you said that “It was so smooth, glossy and the plastic was hard as iron” overall I really enjoyed this piece. The next thing that I loved is that you named that robot after your cat and I thought that that was such a thoughtful thing to do.I think that you can improve by changing the back round and I don’t have any suggestions for you because your piece was well written.


]]> 2021-12-01 18:48:49 UTC https://padlet.com/28amora/wqx7lpf0utpk1go2/wish/1923561192 Alex M https://padlet.com/28amora/wqx7lpf0utpk1go2/wish/1925824509
I like a lot of things and his title and quote mostly, I also liked your title and beginning of your small piece memoir. I also liked how you said why and how you said I would be connected to the controller. I also like your grammar and figurative language.
I also liked how Andres said his cat was biting off his fingers during the memoir I also liked how you said that your 
My wish is that YOU Andres should add more internal thoughts please.
]]> 2021-12-02 18:24:04 UTC https://padlet.com/28amora/wqx7lpf0utpk1go2/wish/1925824509 It is I 28cbeck https://padlet.com/28amora/wqx7lpf0utpk1go2/wish/2082393381 Hello Andres! You did a great job overall with your essay and I had a few things that stood out to me the most. One of the things that stood out to me the most was the fact that I did not see the same transition word twice at all. You did a great job having a multitude of different transition words. Another thing you did very well was the title. I loved how it rhymed and it was a great thing to start of a great essay. One thing you could have down better was put more detail into the introduction paragraph. It felt choppy when it said “he has to slowly wake up during school with a 12 pound weight on his head. He’s back home having dinner” I feel like you could have added 1-2 sentences in between them saying how he gets through the rest of the day and rides the bus home. Overall, great job!]]> 2022-03-07 19:23:09 UTC https://padlet.com/28amora/wqx7lpf0utpk1go2/wish/2082393381 Jonata Alfaro 28jalfarolozano https://padlet.com/28amora/wqx7lpf0utpk1go2/wish/2086472315 Hey Andres, I personally loved how descriptive you were. It really made me feel like I was a teenager in the beginning because I’m personally clumsy. I wish your paragraph was a little longer.]]> 2022-03-09 16:42:07 UTC https://padlet.com/28amora/wqx7lpf0utpk1go2/wish/2086472315 HEllo andres, its me S.B 28sberthold https://padlet.com/28amora/wqx7lpf0utpk1go2/wish/2086671037 I liked how you used descriptive word choice, like when you said “lastly,sleep deprivation causes a lot of symptoms “ that was a nice word choice. A strength I saw in your essay was when you stated that “. He that can take rest is greater then he that can take cities.”A wish I have for you is when you said “he has to slowly wake up during school with a 12 pound weight on his head. He’s back eating dinner” like I wish you would add more detail like what happened in between the time period.


]]> 2022-03-09 18:22:33 UTC https://padlet.com/28amora/wqx7lpf0utpk1go2/wish/2086671037 About your Story Task-Marco L. https://padlet.com/28amora/wqx7lpf0utpk1go2/wish/2156816837 Hey Andreas! Your story was just amazing to read and I enjoyed it so much. It was so creative and so appealing to read. Your sock piled it with so much detail, I was just so happy to read it. Another strength you had was you showed Blake’s personality so well. You showed that he is not the brightest of people, especially when he just walks onto those stairs without even thinking. Something I noticed that you could have done a bit better on was the speed of the writing. I think that you should have made the story go a bit slower. It felt kinda rushed as I was reading it. Great job Andreas!]]> 2022-04-25 15:45:06 UTC https://padlet.com/28amora/wqx7lpf0utpk1go2/wish/2156816837