Glowing and Growing by M. Burke https://padlet.com/burkeme1/wnk7ssokgvb Once you are finished offering feedback and revisions to your 5th grade writing pal, leave him/her something that is "GLOWING" in their writing and an area that needs some "GROWING". Be sure to leave them a positive and encouraging phrase at the end. Use the students first name and last initial in your response. en-us 2019-03-05 15:28:06 UTC 2019-03-11 13:59:50 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet-assets.s3.amazonaws.com/icons/Brightnessdown.png EXAMPLE burkeme1 https://padlet.com/burkeme1/wnk7ssokgvb/wish/337952660 Hi Hannah G. I loved reading your argumentative essay! Thank you for sharing it with me. A glowing moment was your use of statistics and tweets to support your thinking. A growing moment would be for you to strengthen your conclusion and avoid using "These are the reasons why" Consider ending with a question and an answer or an "If...Then" statement. I can't wait to read your revisions! ]]> 2019-03-05 15:30:04 UTC https://padlet.com/burkeme1/wnk7ssokgvb/wish/337952660 Quinn Rodoff pekalcl https://padlet.com/burkeme1/wnk7ssokgvb/wish/338918031 Hi Quinn! I really enjoyed reading your argumentative essay! You did great! I think a glowing moment was your introduction paragraph! Although I had a few minor suggestions, you ultimately did very well! You sounded very professional in your writing, and you got your point across in a very clear way! I think a growing moment could be staying on topic with your claim. You did very well in your first body paragraph, but you drifted away in your second and I started to get confused. Next time just make sure that each body paragraph corresponds to one point of your claim. I can't wait to read your revisions!! 

Sincerely,
Caroline]]> 2019-03-07 15:47:27 UTC https://padlet.com/burkeme1/wnk7ssokgvb/wish/338918031 Morgen Brown https://padlet.com/burkeme1/wnk7ssokgvb/wish/339320263 Greetings Morgen. I had lots of fun reading your essay! I think a glowing moment was your evidence, especially in your body paragraphs. Your evidence was very persuasive, and it changed my thinking. You also had very good wording for your evidence. I think a growing moment for you could be to check your wording more carefully. Mostly, try to make sure you don't have run-on sentences. However, overall your essay was very exceptional. Keep up the good work!]]> 2019-03-08 14:49:14 UTC https://padlet.com/burkeme1/wnk7ssokgvb/wish/339320263 Ella Brey https://padlet.com/burkeme1/wnk7ssokgvb/wish/339320563 I enjoyed you essay on Graphic Novels in the classroom. I think a glowing moment was your grabber sentence, with a question it made me want to read to find the answer. Another one was you had very good evidence. I felt like they supported the claim well. A growing moment was that some sentences were hard to understand and had double of the same word. Another was that you concluding sentence was a good question but it makes you seem neutral on the situation instead of supporting that they should be used in the classroom. Great job overall I think it was a great essay and I cant wait to read your revisions!]]> 2019-03-08 14:49:47 UTC https://padlet.com/burkeme1/wnk7ssokgvb/wish/339320563 Tobias Rhoades hickoap https://padlet.com/burkeme1/wnk7ssokgvb/wish/339320778 Hi Tobias! I really enjoyed reading your argumentative essay! A glowing moment, was you picked out some really amazing quotes from the passage you read to support your claim! It was really well supported. A growing moment was maybe to find ways of explaining what the quote supported. I felt like you were using the same wording for all you quotes but, it would be really awesome if you were perhaps able to change it!]]> 2019-03-08 14:50:12 UTC https://padlet.com/burkeme1/wnk7ssokgvb/wish/339320778 William Slack macnaak https://padlet.com/burkeme1/wnk7ssokgvb/wish/339320791 Hey William, your writing was very clear as to what you wanted to express! Your thoughts were really conveyed well throughout your essay. Having an opinion that is strong and that you believe in is something to hold on to. I really did enjoy your perspective on the assignment, and was persuaded by it. Thank you for putting good work into this. I found that your conventions need a little bit of work, but overall your writing style and organization we very well. Picking quotes out of the text and putting them into your written passage was a very advanced move! I think you are definitely writing like a sixth grader! Keep up the good work! - Audrey ]]> 2019-03-08 14:50:14 UTC https://padlet.com/burkeme1/wnk7ssokgvb/wish/339320791 Kiley Moister https://padlet.com/burkeme1/wnk7ssokgvb/wish/339321951 Hi Kiley! I had a great time reading your essay. A glowing moment is when you pointed out that graphic novels made you more excited and interested about reading. This was a good point, and you should expand on this some more. I think a growing moment is that you don't really elaborate on your points. For example, when you stated that graphic novels are easy and short, and that they are silly, you didn't explain why this relates to your thesis. If you can explain why graphic novels being short, easy, and silly is a reason that they should be taught in the classroom, it would really strengthen your essay. Overall, I enjoyed your essay, but you need to explain how your points connect to your claim. This would make your essay more persuasive and professional. Keep up the good work!]]> 2019-03-08 14:52:24 UTC https://padlet.com/burkeme1/wnk7ssokgvb/wish/339321951 Isabella Bonanno https://padlet.com/burkeme1/wnk7ssokgvb/wish/339322199 Hey Isabella! I think your opinion is very strong! However I think you should write a bit more so I can understand why you think this. Good job!]]> 2019-03-08 14:52:52 UTC https://padlet.com/burkeme1/wnk7ssokgvb/wish/339322199 Evelyn Mirambeaux https://padlet.com/burkeme1/wnk7ssokgvb/wish/339322648 Yo your argumentative essay was really good, and was fun to read. I think your glowing moment was your evidence and analysis. You stated great facts and backed it up very well. A growing moment for you would be to take your time and focus on rephrasing and formatting sentences correctly. Other than that good job.  ]]> 2019-03-08 14:53:43 UTC https://padlet.com/burkeme1/wnk7ssokgvb/wish/339322648 Claire O'Donnell ghorbn https://padlet.com/burkeme1/wnk7ssokgvb/wish/339323267 Hey Claire! I really enjoyed reading you argumentative essay! I think that you have good opinion and good evidence to back it up. I think a glowing moment for you was your analysis and the evidence. You really had some good quotes in there! A growning moment for you is to restate you points in your last paragraph. But overall you did very well with this and that your essay is very well written. Great Job!!]]> 2019-03-08 14:54:54 UTC https://padlet.com/burkeme1/wnk7ssokgvb/wish/339323267 Abigail Bevilacqua https://padlet.com/burkeme1/wnk7ssokgvb/wish/339323969 Hi Abigail! I really liked reading your argumentative essay! It was really good! One glowing moment for yours was your introduction and conclusion. I liked how you stated your opinion, both paragraphs were really strong and persuasive, and got the readers attention. You were also good at stating, and supporting your opinion. One growing moment I would say was to stay a little more on topic with your body paragraphs, they were good, but some parts were a little off topic, and maybe to include some evidence to support your thoughts in your essay. Other than that, overall your argumentative essay was written really well to prove your opinion, and I enjoyed helping you out with it! I'm looking forward to reading your revisions!! Great job!!
- Samrin]]> 2019-03-08 14:56:06 UTC https://padlet.com/burkeme1/wnk7ssokgvb/wish/339323969 Camryn Czajkowski https://padlet.com/burkeme1/wnk7ssokgvb/wish/339324027 Hey Camryn! I really enjoyed reading your argumentative essay. I think that it is very well written, but I have provided a few suggestions that will make it sound even better. Your glowing moment was your intro, it got the readers attention and it made me want to keep reading. However i think that a growing moment is that you should not use the same words multiple times in one paragraph. Other than this I think that your writing was really good in proving your point. Great Job!
-Shree Dave]]> 2019-03-08 14:56:12 UTC https://padlet.com/burkeme1/wnk7ssokgvb/wish/339324027 Caroline Johnson https://padlet.com/burkeme1/wnk7ssokgvb/wish/339324686 2019-03-08 14:57:26 UTC https://padlet.com/burkeme1/wnk7ssokgvb/wish/339324686 Jude Butterly macnaak https://padlet.com/burkeme1/wnk7ssokgvb/wish/339326937 Hey Jude, your writing was awesome! It reminded me of what I wrote about when I was your age. You writing was very persuasive as to why you wanted comic books taught in the classroom. I was very convinced that graphic novels really should be here. You used advanced words all throughout your essay and it really enticed the reader. Thank you so much for sharing such a great piece of writing with me, I really enjoyed it. Jude, you should really keep writing with the style that you have. It is really completely you! There is no one that can change that, so keep that. Your essay was well written with just a few mistakes! It was so good I forgot what grade you were in! I had mistaken you for a sixth grader! I would really like to hear some more of your writing sometime! Great job. - Audrey ]]> 2019-03-08 15:01:16 UTC https://padlet.com/burkeme1/wnk7ssokgvb/wish/339326937 Caroline Johnson doherrp https://padlet.com/burkeme1/wnk7ssokgvb/wish/339327334 Hi Caroline! I enjoyed reading your argumentative essay and think you did a great job on it! A glowing moment I think you had was having clearly stated evidence. You made it very clear which side you stood for and gave great evidence in your rebuttal. One growing moment for your essay would be to make sure you reread your essay for grammatical issues. A few of your sentences didn't make sense or could have used a comma or period. If you cannot think of a way to reword the sentence, you can always take it out completely, and start fresh. This gives your brain a way to think of a new sentence so you do not think of the words you need to incorporate. Other than that I think your essay was very well written. Awesome job!
Sincerely, 
Reyna]]> 2019-03-08 15:01:59 UTC https://padlet.com/burkeme1/wnk7ssokgvb/wish/339327334 Tessa Rudolph https://padlet.com/burkeme1/wnk7ssokgvb/wish/339327967 Hey Tessa! I really liked your argumentitive essay, and I enjoyed reading it. You did a great job on it and you had a lot of good points to prove why you think that graphic novels should not be taught in the classroom. A glowing moment I think you had, is you provided good points to prove your reasoning, and you showed good examples relating to your point. I think your growing point is that you may want to provide some more evidence in where you talked about what research proves. Besides this, I think your paper was great, and provides a strong argument. Keep up the good work!]]> 2019-03-08 15:03:11 UTC https://padlet.com/burkeme1/wnk7ssokgvb/wish/339327967 Zachary B. https://padlet.com/burkeme1/wnk7ssokgvb/wish/339328608 Hey cool kid Zach. Your argumentative essay was very good. You need to revise your conclusion, and make it longer than a sentence. You had a few run on sentences but they are very easy to fix. I really like how you used a twitter tweet. You evidence was good but you may need to include a little more evidence in some of your paragraphs. 

]]> 2019-03-08 15:04:27 UTC https://padlet.com/burkeme1/wnk7ssokgvb/wish/339328608 Gavin Butler https://padlet.com/burkeme1/wnk7ssokgvb/wish/339330450 Hi Gavin, I really liked your essay. You used good evidence with supporting details. Just revise your paragraphs and make sure you don't have run-on sentences like you fourth paragraph. Try breaking up sentences with conjunctions. Also, with those conjunctions, place commas so you make compound sentences. Your explanations were good, but try making your points a bit more specific. For example, if there are more pages then tell the reader what that can do for them. This way you could have more supporting details and make your paragraphs a little bit longer. Other than that, your essay was well written and I really like your topic. Keep writing. 
- Aayush Kevadia]]> 2019-03-08 15:07:32 UTC https://padlet.com/burkeme1/wnk7ssokgvb/wish/339330450 q https://padlet.com/burkeme1/wnk7ssokgvb/wish/339336869 2019-03-08 15:18:51 UTC https://padlet.com/burkeme1/wnk7ssokgvb/wish/339336869 Olivia Stevens https://padlet.com/burkeme1/wnk7ssokgvb/wish/339337717 Sup Olivia! I am expressed by your argumentative essay. I enjoyed reading it, and I must say that you were very supportive about your opinion. One of your "GLOWING" moment was your beginning sentences of your paragraphs and how you also in cooperated not only your point of view but the teacher's as well. Your "GROWING" moments in your essay would be to use less of repetition on certain words and phrases and also a little more detail on your subtopics. Although overall your essay was awesome and your really are a very good writer!😁😁😁]]> 2019-03-08 15:20:32 UTC https://padlet.com/burkeme1/wnk7ssokgvb/wish/339337717 Alivia Nguyen https://padlet.com/burkeme1/wnk7ssokgvb/wish/339340871 What's up Alivia? Your essay was great, I saw a lot of good points and it was very well organized. I would say that where your really "glowed" was in the organization of your essay. It was neat and in order by topic, no extras at all. I didn't really see anything that needed improvement in terms of writing or little errors, I feel that the essay could be so much more if you expanded on some of your points. You tell the reader about the "what" but not the "why" behind your points. I think all of your points were impressive and very strong, but they would really shine if you added some extra thoughts behind them. Other than that, you did a great job!

Ethan]]> 2019-03-08 15:26:36 UTC https://padlet.com/burkeme1/wnk7ssokgvb/wish/339340871 Draven Monti https://padlet.com/burkeme1/wnk7ssokgvb/wish/339341649 Hey Draven! Your essay was amazing! Your a great writer! Your essay sure did "glow". Your organization was amazing and the words you used were great! ]]> 2019-03-08 15:28:03 UTC https://padlet.com/burkeme1/wnk7ssokgvb/wish/339341649 https://padlet.com/burkeme1/wnk7ssokgvb/wish/339406534 When I walk into a bookstore I see gravity amazing images and art styles. It amazes me all the different art styles that the artist have used to write these novels. and that is what inspired me to try it myself and make my own style. 

I think that graphic novels should be taught in the classroom because it can teach kids to read with expression .Also graphic novel can help kids on a lower reading level get better at reading.Graphic novels can also help make friend because advanced readers and struggling readers can talk on the same playing field. 

I think it is safe to say that graphic that I was kind of mixed up Viewpoint another they should be taught in the classroom or not. I understand that it would be one of the main reasons choices and we cannot forget about the old literature because you would not be able to learn the same skills that you would be able to on a normal book.





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