https://padlet.com/26apagan/wl7fl3npa6n0 Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2019-12-05 15:13:09 UTC 2025-12-20 16:59:02 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.net/icons/png/1f33b.png 26ascott1 https://padlet.com/26apagan/wl7fl3npa6n0/wish/421625867 A strength I like in your narrative is. I like how you say “The sunshine shimmered through  my bedroom like it was a stage” It adds Detail to the reader and to what is going on. In addition I like the way you said “I hear the Styrofoam squeaking from inside the brown dusty boxes.” your many usages of figurative language help the reader to truly visualize what is occurring in the small moment. However, a suggestion I can offer for improvement is to maybe when she gets mad maybe make it sometimes on someone else than her gram you have her mostly get mad at her gram.

]]> 2019-12-09 14:54:41 UTC https://padlet.com/26apagan/wl7fl3npa6n0/wish/421625867 26eprincipe https://padlet.com/26apagan/wl7fl3npa6n0/wish/422238969 I like your story alot and I especially like the beginning because you are really specific on what happens while she is crying. I also liked  the creative words you used all through out the story. It adds better pictures of the story to my mind. But, i wish you would make her mad a diffrent people instead of her gram.

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