DO NOW: Post Your Revision Goal by Dario Sulzman https://padlet.com/newhavenpublicschools/wdzxbcekb8hx5yae Make a post with your name, one piece of feedback you've received for revision, and one sentence from your draft where you plan to start revising. en-us 2023-11-15 12:19:22 UTC 2025-08-18 04:26:05 UTC hello@padlet.com Israel Ortiz https://padlet.com/newhavenpublicschools/wdzxbcekb8hx5yae/wish/2790770933 One thing i got back was to be more descriptive and add more detail to my essay


"I've distanced myself from another love – my mom"

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“going to church every Sunday”

]]> 2023-11-15 12:37:34 UTC https://padlet.com/newhavenpublicschools/wdzxbcekb8hx5yae/wish/2790772326 Valeria Perez 1050364 https://padlet.com/newhavenpublicschools/wdzxbcekb8hx5yae/wish/2790773201 One piece of feedback is to give context about what the details mean to my life.

"In Fulton st the owner of the house told us."

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I now think it was good that my family hid the reason why my dad went to prison since that would have even traumatized and at the same time confused me a lot

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"When I had gripped the door handle to open it my hands were aching almost felt as if I had a vibration shaking in my hand when I gave it pressure when I got outside"

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"While I was on my phone watching some tik tok’s, I looked up to check out my surroundings"

]]> 2023-11-15 12:43:42 UTC https://padlet.com/newhavenpublicschools/wdzxbcekb8hx5yae/wish/2790779029 Harrison https://padlet.com/newhavenpublicschools/wdzxbcekb8hx5yae/wish/2790789527 Simplify some unneeded information and add more detail to bigger plot points, especially the ending.

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]]> 2023-11-15 12:55:46 UTC https://padlet.com/newhavenpublicschools/wdzxbcekb8hx5yae/wish/2790792922 Kasheem https://padlet.com/newhavenpublicschools/wdzxbcekb8hx5yae/wish/2793929367 I added more detail to the hospital scene in my reflection story so the audience can vision themselves in the hospital

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