don’t move for the sake of it, plant yourself to get more effect.

i really liked your character representation, you really embodied her.

try not to rock back and forth it’s slightly distracting and takes away from your performance.

good projection

obviously understands character well

Too much rocking try to be still

-move a bit less so that we can focus on the bay your saying rather than what part of the body your moving

-really good facial expressions and flow was nice

-really good choice of monologue

-leave time at the end to finish instead of coming out so fast

Good facial expressions can see how the character feels.

Good pace.

Can hear the emotion in her voice.

Comfortable in the space.

Great facial expressions

Great tone

Great confidence

‘Cre-mate-ted’

Felt like a real story you were telling

At the end just pause and wait for the end and not tell us it’s the end.

Amazing monologue jasmine, well done x

don’t tap your feet as it takes away from your performance

you embodied the character really well

lovely emotion

Great emotion

Tone is perfect

Real anger

Add some more pauses

Great monologue

Great eyeline

High emotions

clear emotion

good pauses

Emotion in voice is very good, portrayal of anger is great.

Focus point was good

Pause was really good

Facial expressions is seriously in character

ebi

The ending needed to pause a bit longer

Really nice emotion in the voice.

Good eye contact.

Nice facial expressions.

Waited for a bit before walking off.

Held a lot of authority in your voice.

Great job bringing it back together

maybe change the tone as it gets more intense

Good emotion

Don’t corpse if you forget a line

Enunciate some more

Good pace

just try to learn your lines more

add a bit more character when you are talking about him hitting you.

nice eyeline

Articulate some of your words as they get lost

Facial expressions were nice

Be more confident

Can hear the emotion in your voice.

Facial expression shows the emotion you’re trying to convey.

Can try and convey desperation more.

Really good Leah well done x

-when talking about how he hit you and grabbed you , these words your almost reliving it in your mind so show that.

-really good diction

-nicely spoken and showed you care for this person that has been horrible to you

Well done <3333

Good emotion

very well practiced

good change in tone and volume

your pauses are really lovely.

nice eyeline.

Very grouded and connected to your emotions

Project a little more in certain areas.

Good pauses for effect.

Can really see the pain in your eyes.

Can hear the emotion in your voice.

I was able to feel what you were feeling.

Well done Charlotte.

-“I kept being stupid” line was impactful. maybe leave a bit more pause afterwards almost as if you have realised that you have admitted that you haven’t made smart choices and your hearing yourself take accountability.

-you know the correct time to pause and it felt natural and not rushed 100%

-light feeling to the play

nice eyeline.

Grouded, great use of emotion and nerves

good diction

emotion shown clearly

As soon as you started you could hear the resentment and the emotion in your voice.

Was confident in the space.

Was very powerful.

Was able to hear the pain and see that you loved the person you were talking about.

Well done Sophie x

power in stillness, that worked really nicely.

Change the tone after the repetition of “I saw a magpie today “

Don't sound like you're reading off a script, sounds a bit robotic.

Add a bit more movement.

Clear pronunciation.

The emotion was clear in your tone.

Even though you were stood still it still held power.

Was clear in how you wanted it to be presented.

Well done Sophie x

-you don’t have to always be looking straight when talking to soemone or about soemthing you can look down or at your hands

-change your tone a bit more “I saw a magpie today,well one” you can say it in a more conversational way as if your trying to grab out attention by saying it

-loved the tone at various points ,diction was great :)))

Well done

Quick changes in pace and tone

performed very well

The different emotions you use blend well together.

Really good facial expressions.

Love the anger, I can feel it.

Captured everyone's attention.

Clear pronunciation.

Could hear the frustration in your voice.

Was able to see the emotion on your face.

Was able to hear the pain and frustration in your voice.

Was a very powerful performance.

Brought the performance back to a still for the end which was great.

Well done Maisie xx

good diction

Paused were great.

When talking about your mum o, maybe sound more confused as to why she was crying when you say the line.

understands character well

Could hear emotions in your voice.

When you talked about going home it didn’t really feel like you were performing it and you just said it.

You gave the character emotion and character really.

Well done.

lovely characterisation

Maybe slow down

Facial expressions are lovely and there's a nice amount of movements

Very good pronunciation

really good monologue

emotion shown well

-really good Confidence

-loved how when you said John you soften your voice so you could clearly tell it’s someone you care about :)

Well done

really lovely eyeline.

When you're talking about the memory I like the confusion when you're trying to recall what happened

Good facial expressions

try not to touch your face unless it’s part of the monologue

liked the pauses and pace

Tension and fidgety as she starts recalling the traumatic bits.

Clear recall of a memory and good diction and pace

-“Where has he gone” sound and look more confused

First few lines could be more frantic. Your trying to find someone you clearly love so we as an audience need to see your eagerness and frustration

Diction was great

Well done

i liked your emotion.

Don't force yourself to cry if you don't think you'll cry

Project a bit more

emotion shown clearly in voice

“ I want my dad” that’s a powerful moment.

Can see the pain on your face and it helps convey your emotions.

Try and own the space a bit more.

Well done Aniya xx

Rasp in the voice adds to the emotions, sound like on the verge of tears

Voice and emotions calming a little as you list ‘things I know to be true’ is nice

Ebb and flow of the emotion is well and a good representation of grief

LOVE THE USE OF VOICE

Maybe chance the throughout the monologue to keep in engaging

“My arms then my leg” maybe touch or look at those parts that you are talking about.

When you’re talking about the seasons “winter summmer” etc - this is the part where you’re taking ablut things you know are true so have more confidence in those lines. This list is what helps you to get over your feelings and feel better

Should be a shift when you say your not ‘Lucy Curtwood’

nice eyeline

have more confidence in yourself

try to add more emotion maybe try experimenting with tone a bit more

Add more emotion in voice

“One point and one point only” this is important and should make us think what point your going to say

Play around with pitch

Good diction

Great remembering lines

Try and challenge more emotion into the Voice.

Tap into the enthusiasm more

Smile shows a inner joke that she still finds amusing

good eyeline

you’re words are really clearly spoken

Spoke really clearly

Had nice facial expression's.

Was able to tell the fact that your playing a young adult/teenager by the way you portrayed the character.

Could be more confident in the space.

Chose a good monologue for you.

Well done Sophia xx

The result:

You understand this character and prove it through body and facial expressions

you know how to draw in the audience

character emotion is good

Incredible emotion.

Good focal point

Showed us andraste and the berries

Good vocal range.

Changed the eye line gave the impression that you was talking to different people.

The emotion really came through in your voice.

Held a lot of power.

Was confident in the space and in yourself.

Well done Frann xx

Taking control of the stage and bringing us along with you, the facial expressions capture the emotion in your voice.

Eyeline was good between audience and Andraste.

Be aware of projecting you're voice throughout.

Well done xx

really lovely characterisation

Your eye-line and focus is great

I can hear the emotions in your voice

Try not to fidget

The built up of your emotions really helps makes it engaging

-well done for remembering lined

-clearly have thought about the way you want to come across to the audience

-great eye line

nice eyeline

very clearly spoken

nice pause

Like the frustration and tiredness in your voice as you are listing things off.

Good facial expressions.

Make sure you keep projecting towards the end.

Very good monologue, enjoyed it!

Have a good pace and you keep that throughout the monologue.

Can hear emotion in your voice.

Your facial expression changes throughout the monologue.

Look at the length of your pauses can they be longer or shorter and could that change the impact .

Was a powerful monologue and I think that you chose a good one.

Well done Liv xx

Clear rage and anger

Clearly talking to someone else. You make the audience see this other person.

Good pacing

good emotion

You facial expressions really shows what your going through

Your eye line is great

Your raspy voice shows how upset and hurt you are

Try not to pace so much

Well done vic xxx

Good vocal emotion it changed throughout and made it more impactful.

You had good facial expressions and you had good range.

Was a great monologue for you.

I was able to feel how you were feeling.

Came back from your mistakes and made it better.

Good use of pauses makes a difference.

Well done Vic xx