Feedback by J Lowrie https://padlet.com/j_lowrie/w5pakvav2jx3 Leave your name and something positive and a next step below en-us 2018-06-11 17:03:17 UTC 2025-10-05 23:32:02 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet-assets.s3.amazonaws.com/icons/Soccerball.png https://padlet.com/j_lowrie/w5pakvav2jx3/wish/266886600 2018-06-12 19:01:44 UTC https://padlet.com/j_lowrie/w5pakvav2jx3/wish/266886600 Piece 1 https://padlet.com/j_lowrie/w5pakvav2jx3/wish/439884185 Some fantastic facts and use of varied sentence structures. Remember to include all necessary punctuation. Mr McClure Milefield Primary]]> 2020-02-03 19:26:30 UTC https://padlet.com/j_lowrie/w5pakvav2jx3/wish/439884185 Piece 2 https://padlet.com/j_lowrie/w5pakvav2jx3/wish/439886782 Some great use of conjunctions throughout. Good use of extended noun phrase too. Remember to include commas where necessary. Mr McClure Milefield Primary ]]> 2020-02-03 19:29:22 UTC https://padlet.com/j_lowrie/w5pakvav2jx3/wish/439886782 Piece 3 https://padlet.com/j_lowrie/w5pakvav2jx3/wish/439888377 Love the rhetorical question title! Good use of comma to separate items in your mini list (noun phrase).
Try not to forget all punctuation such as a question mark at the end of a question. Mr McClure Milefield Primary]]> 2020-02-03 19:31:24 UTC https://padlet.com/j_lowrie/w5pakvav2jx3/wish/439888377 https://padlet.com/j_lowrie/w5pakvav2jx3/wish/439888926 Super facts about wolves. I learnt so much just from the first sentence of each piece of work. Well done Y2. 
Mr Hopper
Northstead Primary
Scarborough]]> 2020-02-03 19:32:10 UTC https://padlet.com/j_lowrie/w5pakvav2jx3/wish/439888926 Piece 4 https://padlet.com/j_lowrie/w5pakvav2jx3/wish/439891359 Some very interesting facts here! Some I never knew! Good use of pronouns to avoid repetition too. You have used because well but now can you try including some varied conjunctions?
Mr McClure Milefield Primary]]> 2020-02-03 19:35:32 UTC https://padlet.com/j_lowrie/w5pakvav2jx3/wish/439891359 Mrs Howell https://padlet.com/j_lowrie/w5pakvav2jx3/wish/439894962 Wow! I loved reading these and can see how hard Year 2 have been working. I have learnt lots about wolves that I didn’t know so thank you. 
You have all used some great conjunctions to extend your sentences and explain your facts further. 
I challenge you to use different sentence openers in your next paragraph, see if you can use one of these...
Incredibly...
Would you believe...
Surprisingly...

👍🏼 Keep up the good work!
]]> 2020-02-03 19:39:56 UTC https://padlet.com/j_lowrie/w5pakvav2jx3/wish/439894962 https://padlet.com/j_lowrie/w5pakvav2jx3/wish/439909402 I really enjoyed reading your writing about wolves, you obviously have been working hard and researched well. I now know lots of new facts! I like the way you are beginning to use different openers and using conjunctions in your writing Just remember to check if you need a question mark. Keep up the excellent work!! I am looking forward to reading some more. 

Mrs Gordon, Barugh Green Primary ]]> 2020-02-03 19:59:50 UTC https://padlet.com/j_lowrie/w5pakvav2jx3/wish/439909402 https://padlet.com/j_lowrie/w5pakvav2jx3/wish/439913808 Some excellent pieces of writing! I loved reading all the fabulous facts about wolves- I have learnt so much! 
You have used a range of conjunctions effectively and lots of brilliant specific vocabulary! 
Remember to use capital letters, question marks and full stops! 
Mrs Underhay 
Milefield Primary School 
]]> 2020-02-03 20:06:37 UTC https://padlet.com/j_lowrie/w5pakvav2jx3/wish/439913808 https://padlet.com/j_lowrie/w5pakvav2jx3/wish/439954398 Wow Year 2! These are great, and full of interesting facts. You have used some good vocabulary. Your writing is considerate of your reader through the rhetorical questions you have used. Remember to check your punctuation.
Miss Gillespie, Milefield Primary School.]]> 2020-02-03 21:21:15 UTC https://padlet.com/j_lowrie/w5pakvav2jx3/wish/439954398 Mrs Bell https://padlet.com/j_lowrie/w5pakvav2jx3/wish/439956929 I really love how you have applied facts, your pieces flow really well. I can tell you have been working on openers and conjunctions. 

Incredible work ☺️]]> 2020-02-03 21:27:28 UTC https://padlet.com/j_lowrie/w5pakvav2jx3/wish/439956929