https://padlet.com/23rcawley/vy5deinckf1y The feedback is key en-us 2017-06-22 15:36:36 UTC 2018-03-28 14:21:53 UTC hello@padlet.com 23hali https://padlet.com/23rcawley/vy5deinckf1y/wish/236954539 Hey Ryan! I like the way you introduced your issue in the beginning of your essay with a question. It grabbed my attention and followed through right into your topic. Secondly, I really liked your claims. They were very descriptive and I can tell you used the claim sheet!(which is a good thing) Finally, in the future, I suggest proofreading your work for minor grammar errors such as missing a word or punctuation mark. Overall, great essay!]]> 2018-03-01 15:16:22 UTC https://padlet.com/23rcawley/vy5deinckf1y/wish/236954539 23rprincipe https://padlet.com/23rcawley/vy5deinckf1y/wish/237382938 or supream

]]> 2018-03-02 13:43:51 UTC https://padlet.com/23rcawley/vy5deinckf1y/wish/237382938 23sbaumgartner https://padlet.com/23rcawley/vy5deinckf1y/wish/246861448 Cawley, this was hilarious I couldn't stop laughing, you made me jump out of my socks, anyways, this story was pheonomal! Especially how you used great footnotes, and how you hooked the reader by saying, "Breaking News." One wish for next time is maybe making the setting more appealing towards the reader, anyways amazing and pheonomal and outstanding and great story!!!!]]> 2018-03-28 12:36:45 UTC https://padlet.com/23rcawley/vy5deinckf1y/wish/246861448 23ddasi https://padlet.com/23rcawley/vy5deinckf1y/wish/246910637 I really liked the compositional risks you used and the things that an actual story writer would say. Also I was listening to God´s Plan while reading this and Maxwell Dasi was my Mom´s last name! Next time I suggest using more vocabulary. ]]> 2018-03-28 14:13:28 UTC https://padlet.com/23rcawley/vy5deinckf1y/wish/246910637