https://padlet.com/26bkgordon/vwa907fpzcb Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2019-12-05 18:36:42 UTC 2025-10-08 02:05:51 UTC hello@padlet.com https://i.ytimg.com/vi/F8OfNYeVEgw/maxresdefault.jpg 26eprincipe https://padlet.com/26bkgordon/vwa907fpzcb/wish/421674151 I thought you did a really good job with your story. One of my favorite quarts is how you described her morning. I had a really good picture of the scene in my mind and i think it was very realistic. The second thing i like was when the office told her that her mom was in the hospital. I liked this beacuse it was a very big pint of the story and i am glad that you oicked that to be th erising action. ALthoug your story was amazing i wish that you could describe what her best friend Gabby´s personal and her actions and looks.]]> 2019-12-09 16:02:57 UTC https://padlet.com/26bkgordon/vwa907fpzcb/wish/421674151 https://padlet.com/26bkgordon/vwa907fpzcb/wish/422300493 For my first star comment I love how you made Mrs Whichard in this story and how you wrote about “Brianna Watermelon” and how you said good afternoon instead of good morning because you do do that in class. My second star comment is how emotional you made your story. I really love the part where Luna said “It’s ok mommy is strong” it was really a powerful quote and just a powerful story altogether. A suggestion I am offering is the story feels kinda rush. For example one second she is in the hospital then out then back in, it would've flowed better.  

]]> 2019-12-10 17:30:46 UTC https://padlet.com/26bkgordon/vwa907fpzcb/wish/422300493 26nlambert https://padlet.com/26bkgordon/vwa907fpzcb/wish/422391760 Another thing I like about your story is ,is that how you show how the characters are feeling by using very good character traits. For example, “My very annoying brother Leon, comes in sliding into the bathroom in his yellow banana pajama shorts.” You said annoying brother, I like that because really shows the reader what kind of character the brother is. Also you said banana pajama shorts. One thing I would work on is the theme. If I were you I would explain the characters thinking a little bit more.]]> 2019-12-10 19:39:53 UTC https://padlet.com/26bkgordon/vwa907fpzcb/wish/422391760 26ramberg https://padlet.com/26bkgordon/vwa907fpzcb/wish/422500587 I love your story and all the description! I think your story is amazing! Just like Alexa, I also like how you included Ms. Whichard in your story. Just like Elyse, I think this story is very realistic. My favorite part of your story was when Luna said, "it was as foggy as my brain in Math class!" because I think that is really creative! I hope you keep writing amazing stories just like this! ]]> 2019-12-11 00:17:47 UTC https://padlet.com/26bkgordon/vwa907fpzcb/wish/422500587