Meu mural sublime by Julia Souza Ferreira

A viagem..

julia_ferreira3 — 2018-09-17 14:38:14 UTC

julia_ferreira3 — 2018-09-17 14:40:42 UTC

On a trip was a monkey and a fox.

julia_ferreira3 — 2018-09-17 14:41:37 UTC

The non-surprising fox (with his selfishness) was doing very well during this trip, while the poor monkey carried things for them to keep.

julia_ferreira3 — 2018-09-17 14:46:54 UTC

Until at some point in the story the monkey wondered why he carried things on his own

julia_ferreira3 — 2018-09-17 14:49:48 UTC

At this moment a dispute began, dispute to see who would be more noble ...
The fox exposed its beauty as an argument, while the monkey used its "past" to give it power, saying that its ancestors were gods.

julia_ferreira3 — 2018-09-17 14:54:45 UTC

The monkey called itself superior, for its interior was noble, while the fox possessed a superficial beauty.

julia_ferreira3 — 2018-09-17 14:56:54 UTC

But at a certain moment they arrived in a kind of cemetery with several monuments of gods, who put the monkey in its place, saying that it would not be possible to know if the gods were really ancestors of him, because all were dead, and dead do not speak.

julia_ferreira3 — 2018-09-17 14:59:17 UTC

Moral of the story: NOT THE EVIL THAT LAST FOREVER, AND NOR WELL THAT NEVER ENDED.

julia_ferreira3 — 2018-09-17 15:00:56 UTC

julia_ferreira3 — 2018-09-17 15:02:31 UTC

ivinhacamargo — 2018-10-17 21:35:28 UTC

Olá, Preciso que corrija alguns pontos na sua short history.
- Sugiro que coloque um título para sua Historia no inicio da sua página
- Sinto falta da voz passiva no seu texto. Peco que reveja e insira essa estrutura na partes que forem necessárias.
- Sugiro que reestruture seu mural, talvez escolher uma outro formato.
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Cheers!