Include transitions, dialogue, and at least two sensory details. 

Use Past Tense

Use power words

Support:

- You can use sensory details such as “I could smell…,” “The noise grew louder…,” “Suddenly, I heard…”). 

- Use transition words such as First, Then, After that, Suddenly, and Meanwhile. 

Challenge Yourself:

• Add at least two lines of dialogue to show character interaction. 

• Use two figures of speech (simile, metaphor, personification) to build suspense. 

• Use two sensory details (sight, touch, etc.). 

“I like how you built suspense when…”

“Maybe add more dialogue to show what the character was feeling.”

“I like your use of transitions such as ‘Suddenly’ or ‘Meanwhile.’”

“Maybe describe more sensory details (what you saw, heard, or felt).”