https://padlet.com/23koser/voaiwsbgiqih Thank you for reading my work. Please remember to be respectful and kind and use the correct format for comments. Thank you for stopping by, hope to see you again! en-us 2018-03-02 14:13:58 UTC 2018-03-02 15:14:53 UTC hello@padlet.com 23egoldstein https://padlet.com/23koser/voaiwsbgiqih/wish/237428561 Something that I really like about your piece was I could see how much time you spent on show not tell. This really showed me a lot about what kind of writer you are. I really enjoyed your descriptiveness and the type of word choice you used. I think its a very intesting for the reader to preview, espcially for the beginning. I also think you did a good job creatig the characters and what roles they have in the story line. One star that I would leave for you is to really work on your grammar usage, besides that I think you did a really good job. ]]> 2018-03-02 15:10:00 UTC https://padlet.com/23koser/voaiwsbgiqih/wish/237428561