https://padlet.com/29apansare/vailfa1ufzjubok1 Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2022-10-21 15:31:13 UTC 2025-12-23 22:43:06 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.net/icons/png/1f4b8.png 29mnewell https://padlet.com/29apansare/vailfa1ufzjubok1/wish/2357742758 This is…AMAZING! This is a really good memoir, great sensory details, great figurative language and much more! I also remember this moment in class, I knew I said “ dang it “ because I was jealous. I was also curious when I was reading your memoir as well, I kinda thought in my head “ hm, so that’s what she was thinking when this happened “. However it would’ve made it better if you used a little bit more similes. But anyway this is a great memoir, keep up the good work! ^v^ 👍]]> 2022-10-26 17:47:36 UTC https://padlet.com/29apansare/vailfa1ufzjubok1/wish/2357742758 29asharma https://padlet.com/29apansare/vailfa1ufzjubok1/wish/2491439169 Hi, Anwesha! A star to offer you would be how descriptive your introduction paragraph was. With the time given you really used elaborate detail to make the introduction great. Another star to offer would be your cees paragraph. I loved how the scene went. Your scene was amazing to support your claim. A wish I could offer to you is expanding a little more. I would really put mind into focus and try to strive for a 5 paragraph essay. Overall, you did a great job!]]> 2023-02-22 16:51:55 UTC https://padlet.com/29apansare/vailfa1ufzjubok1/wish/2491439169 29asharma https://padlet.com/29apansare/vailfa1ufzjubok1/wish/2524092120 Hi, Anwesha! A strength of your theme analysis paragraph, “Astounding & Boundin’” is all of the description you used. For example, I loved when you said, “…there will be people that are mean, judgemental, and inhumane …” In addition, I enjoyed your transition words. For instance, “To clarify & hence” are great transition words that you included in your piece. A wish I could offer is to take a closer look at punctuation. Overall your piece was amazing!]]> 2023-03-20 18:29:26 UTC https://padlet.com/29apansare/vailfa1ufzjubok1/wish/2524092120 29ansandhu https://padlet.com/29apansare/vailfa1ufzjubok1/wish/2525566875 Hi Anwesha! Good job with your theme analysis essay. One star I have for your piece is I love your claim and sum up sentences. I love how you used powerful and emotion packed words like “palpable” and “gratifying.” This really brought emotion into your piece. Secondly, I like how you varied our transitions. You did a really nice job of organizing your essay with those transitions. You used them in perfect places which made them effective. Finally, a wish I have for your paragraph is that I wish you would explain what the evidence meant more in the first explanation. It’s hard to understand what the evidence means when you have not provided background knowledge about the situation. Other than that, excellent!]]> 2023-03-21 15:07:12 UTC https://padlet.com/29apansare/vailfa1ufzjubok1/wish/2525566875 https://padlet.com/29apansare/vailfa1ufzjubok1/wish/2525828457 Hi Anwesha! One thing you did well in your theme analysis paragraph “Astounding and Boundin’” is your astonishing word choice. Just by skimming over your piece, I saw great words like “inhumane” and “aloof.” Great word choice! Another strength you have is how you formed your sum up sentence. There was great word choice like “palpable” and “gratifying” and a strong base theme to start off with. Spectacular! Although this piece was simply amazing, something you could have put more effort into was expanding your sentences more. There were a lot of short and choppy sentences, and you could have broadened them more. But great job, keep up the good work!]]> 2023-03-21 17:43:02 UTC https://padlet.com/29apansare/vailfa1ufzjubok1/wish/2525828457 29ansandhu https://padlet.com/29apansare/vailfa1ufzjubok1/wish/2533832861 Hi Anwesha! Good job on your theme analysis paragraph! First off, I loved your word choice. Words like “mourned” and “shame” really brought a lot of emotion to your paragraph and helped the reader better understand what you were saying. Secondly, your transitions were very effectively used. They helped your paragraph flow and connected your ideas very nicely, so well done with that. Finally, a wish I have for your paragraph is that you were more elaborate. I think that  you could explain who “they” are because you use them a lot and it's hard to know who you are referring to. Also add quotes around your second explanation. ]]> 2023-03-27 21:21:24 UTC https://padlet.com/29apansare/vailfa1ufzjubok1/wish/2533832861 29smalone https://padlet.com/29apansare/vailfa1ufzjubok1/wish/2534037646 Hello Anwesha! (So sorry if I spelt that wrong.) One thing I really liked is your strong word choice. Throughout your writing you used words like, empowering, bullying, manner, unbelievably, etc. By using words like this it really gives the reader the idea that the writer knows what they are talking about which is what they should feel. I also really liked your evidence. You were very descriptive and really got a picture in my head. As I was reading I was thinking that you should be the narrator of the Pixar short and if there was a narrator that is what they would have said. I also really liked how well written your writing was. I understood everything perfectly which is exactly what you want your readers to do. You made sure everything was perfectly written and it was so clear. Your writing was so good I couldn’t find anything to make a wish for. You should be proud of yourself.]]> 2023-03-27 23:58:26 UTC https://padlet.com/29apansare/vailfa1ufzjubok1/wish/2534037646