https://padlet.com/22smani/v561j5ccpqg2 Give me honest reports! en-us 2017-05-15 09:43:13 UTC 2025-10-07 14:15:04 UTC hello@padlet.com 22smani https://padlet.com/22smani/v561j5ccpqg2/wish/171785066
You provided really good evidence, but "I think that this will work well in Sivakasi due to the fact that the children will be protected by securities and will learn to become successful people." isn't exactly a fact, it's just your opinion.
Maybe reword this sentence a bit. "Think about it children, work to make crackers for around 1 billion people and think how much bad stuff they are inhaling."
When you say Tamil Nadu is not very rich, what is 'not very rich?' I think it would be easier to understand if you gave more concrete numbers. But over all, it was really good!  ]]> 2017-05-15 09:46:13 UTC https://padlet.com/22smani/v561j5ccpqg2/wish/171785066 22smani https://padlet.com/22smani/v561j5ccpqg2/wish/171785928 You shouldn't address the reader to their face. Don't make it like you are talking to the reader. You should give facts but not make it slang. Don't say, "Think about it..." When you are saying why the solution is good for your region, you should give examples from both places. Like economy, population, etc. Then connect that information to both places. ]]> 2017-05-15 09:51:20 UTC https://padlet.com/22smani/v561j5ccpqg2/wish/171785928 22smani https://padlet.com/22smani/v561j5ccpqg2/wish/171786580 You used statistics, which showed how your issue was a problem and you used reputable sites for your information. You stated your region (South India), but not the countries that are a part of the region. In some paragraphs, you only talked about certain countries from the region. You used some phrases like "bad stuff," and, "here and there," which isn't exact. You also didn't include statistics in every paragraph, and sometimes you used the word "around" for a certain number. Some of the good things you did were to write paragraphs for each of the dots and, to include mostly good evidence to support your claim.]]> 2017-05-15 09:55:25 UTC https://padlet.com/22smani/v561j5ccpqg2/wish/171786580 22smani https://padlet.com/22smani/v561j5ccpqg2/wish/171788197 You have well structured paragraphs and you used stats, but you did have some vague wording like "think about how much bad stuff..." and "horrible wages." It would help to add more specific numbers in place of these to show the reader how bad child labor is. You could also connect the solution and region with more evidence.]]> 2017-05-15 10:05:12 UTC https://padlet.com/22smani/v561j5ccpqg2/wish/171788197