Paired Review of High Concept Document by Jonathan https://padlet.com/jonathan_shore/v0ot8yo8npvi Add your comments, on what you thought as a pair, of the high concept documents you have reviewed. en-us 2018-03-14 00:56:23 UTC 2018-03-14 11:30:21 UTC hello@padlet.com Matt & James https://padlet.com/jonathan_shore/v0ot8yo8npvi/wish/241798371 Example 1: 
It does contain most of the necessary elements but it needs to sell the game.
A lot of thought has went into the characters, venue and time period.
It has replayability, however this is limited to a set amount.
The game is immersive as it is set in real life.
A weakness to the game could be it's simplicity. 
Has enough to achieve a merit grade.
Example 2:
The game has no selling point and a hook.
Good premise and venue however, the features need work and images instead of lists would be nice for the characters section
The game is hard to win so this would appeal to people who prefer difficult challenges but would put people off who prefer easier games.
It would achieve a Pass grade.

]]> 2018-03-14 11:18:15 UTC https://padlet.com/jonathan_shore/v0ot8yo8npvi/wish/241798371 Mustafa and Riley https://padlet.com/jonathan_shore/v0ot8yo8npvi/wish/241798614 doesn't show any of the items in the house. The game has no back story, but it has a good setting. The game has no hook.

Theirs no images for the second game. The writer keeps repeating himself. mentions that their one person in the island, but their are 5 enemies in the island. The grammar was very poor. I would not recommend the game.]]> 2018-03-14 11:19:02 UTC https://padlet.com/jonathan_shore/v0ot8yo8npvi/wish/241798614 Dylan & Ewan https://padlet.com/jonathan_shore/v0ot8yo8npvi/wish/241798631 Example 1: Location is vague. Poor grammar. Not two pages long. Only describes one room. Does contain images.

Example 2: No images. Not 2 pages long. Poor grammar. No hook. Plenty of detail in characters. Premise is detailed.
]]> 2018-03-14 11:19:05 UTC https://padlet.com/jonathan_shore/v0ot8yo8npvi/wish/241798631 Finn and Gurman https://padlet.com/jonathan_shore/v0ot8yo8npvi/wish/241798685 1st example
Negatives:
- Lacks detail
- No images of the game
- Sketch is of the TV/Console
- No hook
- Only information one main character
Positives:
- Set in a realistic place in a real time period
- Explains basic mechanics

2nd example
Negatives:
- No images
- Too much written information
Positive:
- Introduction to the point explains the purpose of the game
- In depth information on characters
- Surroundings explained well
- Story is explained well]]> 2018-03-14 11:19:16 UTC https://padlet.com/jonathan_shore/v0ot8yo8npvi/wish/241798685 Kerk and Callum https://padlet.com/jonathan_shore/v0ot8yo8npvi/wish/241799089 Example one;
Good
- Including images
- Explain in some details
Bad
- Grammar is awful
- He/She doesn't know how to format a word document
- Boring concept

Example two;
Good
- Straight to the point
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Bad
- No images
- Poor grammar
- What is it this?]]> 2018-03-14 11:20:23 UTC https://padlet.com/jonathan_shore/v0ot8yo8npvi/wish/241799089