Taryn Google Sites Peer Feedback 2019 - 2020 by Taryn Ribaudo https://padlet.com/26tribaudo/uzp7saitqrg8 Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2019-12-05 16:40:33 UTC 2025-10-23 15:01:20 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet-assets.s3.amazonaws.com/icons/Apple.png Story feedback- Kaylee 26kparchman https://padlet.com/26tribaudo/uzp7saitqrg8/wish/420852520

    • I love all your description in the beginning of your story how you had the description about the nachos and when Quinn pushed to the front of the line with the details of the broken hearts. I also loved the part when Quinn sits down with Chloe and Emily and how they tell her that people shouldn't be in front of her on line, it really adds to the story. The one part I don’t understand is why you said that Quinn demanded the last nacho and not the last bowl of nachos because who eats only one nacho for lunch.

    ]]>     2019-12-06 16:38:49 UTC https://padlet.com/26tribaudo/uzp7saitqrg8/wish/420852520     Story feedback- Victoria V. 26vvirga https://padlet.com/26tribaudo/uzp7saitqrg8/wish/421699435 Your story was great. I loved the description and I loved in the beginning because you helped me understand and visualize the characters. I also loved how she snapped at the flight attendant. It made me laugh. 1 thing that you could work on is making your character change a little less subtle. There wasn’t really a major event that changed her mind. Besides that your story was wonderful. 

    ]]>     2019-12-09 16:39:54 UTC https://padlet.com/26tribaudo/uzp7saitqrg8/wish/421699435     Story Feedback 26sbirck https://padlet.com/26tribaudo/uzp7saitqrg8/wish/421813157 I loved how you developed Quinn as being selfish. She sounded like she could be a really be a person in real life. I also LOVED the ending. It made me so happy for some reason. I do wish, however, that you could add more about NYC. Like, how does it look? Personally, I think that it is a pretty interesting place, so adding more details would make the story a bit better.]]> 2019-12-09 19:22:25 UTC https://padlet.com/26tribaudo/uzp7saitqrg8/wish/421813157 Story Feedback 26svanterpool https://padlet.com/26tribaudo/uzp7saitqrg8/wish/422269537 I loved the character development with Quinn. It was such a big difference between the beginning and the end. I also really like how in the beginning, you described how cray Quinn was for the nachos. However, I think you should use more descriptive words in the end of the story. It will help me picture it more. Otherwise, it was a really good story!]]> 2019-12-10 16:46:50 UTC https://padlet.com/26tribaudo/uzp7saitqrg8/wish/422269537 Story Feedback - Jayda I really loved your detailed. I like how Quinn went from Jealous to Satisfied. I just really liked how you expressed it. I also loved how you did show not tell for most of your story as ms Whichard says that makes your story 100% better just like story. I would add a little more action in the middle of the story or when she was getting her dinner. Good Job Taryn! 26jdunbar https://padlet.com/26tribaudo/uzp7saitqrg8/wish/422382077 2019-12-10 19:26:35 UTC https://padlet.com/26tribaudo/uzp7saitqrg8/wish/422382077