https://padlet.com/26obillingham/uu4h0r134cmx Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2019-12-05 13:27:31 UTC 2019-12-10 19:12:17 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.net/icons/png/1f47b.png 26anazariosharpe https://padlet.com/26obillingham/uu4h0r134cmx/wish/421636001  Something I really liked in your narrative, “Outlandish”, is the part when the narrator said “ sitting in front of a man who seemed to have fleas and hadn’t taken a shower in about 2 weeks. He was sitting with a lady who kept talking about where to get the best coffee. (“Caw-fey” how she said. She sounded like she was a New Yorker.)” because of the amazing word choice and the comedic description.Another thing that pleased me is the part when the mean girl said “ “Well, well, well. What do we have here? A new girl I presume.” A girl behind her -the one who got hit with hair- said wickedly,’ because it seemed just like a movie and I could picture that this was based off of Mean Girls. I thought it was very funny. A suggestion I could offer is continuing to describe more of the setting changes Like when it says, “She clung to the frost coated subway entrance railing in front of the huge wooden doors of Independence High School with dear life hoping to wake up from this nightmare,” and, “ ‘Well, well, well. What do we have here? A new girl I presume,”. I think it would have helped to show more of when she was walking in and getting to her locker so that readers wouldn’t have to figure out the the setting changes themselves.

]]> 2019-12-09 15:10:02 UTC https://padlet.com/26obillingham/uu4h0r134cmx/wish/421636001 26mlatham https://padlet.com/26obillingham/uu4h0r134cmx/wish/421684885 I loved your antagonist! They were so fun to watch! I also enjoyed your characters character change in the story, after standing up for her new friend. One thing I would wish you changed was to have the 'mean girls' come back, because they were so entertaining.

]]> 2019-12-09 16:18:05 UTC https://padlet.com/26obillingham/uu4h0r134cmx/wish/421684885 26sbirck https://padlet.com/26obillingham/uu4h0r134cmx/wish/422368926 I really like how you compared Amelia, Emily and Abby to "Mean Girls". I also like how much voice you put in there! It was like you were telling me the story out-loud, Olivia. But, I wish you didn't add in the emails, but other than that, I loved it. :D]]> 2019-12-10 19:09:31 UTC https://padlet.com/26obillingham/uu4h0r134cmx/wish/422368926