Devising feedback by Ben Cammack

Moment

bcammack4 — 2024-05-13 15:41:10 UTC

My favourite moment was the movement sequence. I felt sorry for your main character and it's repetitive nature made me think about how frustrating their life might be.

Question

bcammack4 — 2024-05-13 15:42:07 UTC

Who was the character who played the musical instrument? Where did you imagine they came from?

Idea!

bcammack4 — 2024-05-13 15:44:17 UTC

I thought it would be cool if you repeated the movement section again at the end to suggest a cyclical structure.

Idea

2024-06-12 08:24:40 UTC

motifs- Using the same interviewer made it easy to understand what was going on between interviews even though it was different people that were being talked to. The 'help me' by xenia was repeated which made the words more impactful. The hopelessness every time it was said built the relationship between the character and the person taking the money.

Moment

2024-06-12 08:24:47 UTC

I really liked the starting and the ending scene when the topic was introduced and brought to an end. At the beginning, during the news interview, the length of time used for Met Gala was much longer than the war scene, which I thought was a political message. At the end, using the cards as a way to symbolize the money that the people were giving or losing. You could tell by their facial expressions as to how they felt when they got money and when they lost their money. The celebrity looked annoyed but the person in war looked scared when they lost money.

Moment

2024-06-12 08:24:49 UTC

I liked the introduction which showed us the connection of what we view as important in comparison to world wide problems, and it linked to the interview scene and explained it.

Moment

2024-06-12 08:25:20 UTC

My favourite moment was the use of the cards to show how money is given to less unfortunate people but they were just being conned by the richer people. It shows how corrupt come people are when it comes between helping the poor and gaining more money.

Moment

2024-06-12 08:26:52 UTC

My favourite moment was the interviewing prompt when the political message was conveyed where people showed importance to celebrities and not wars. The focus on each different freeze frame and the epic theatre used with the signs conveyed to the audience that there should be awareness for all matters in the war

Moment

2024-06-12 08:33:27 UTC

My favourite moment is the political message with the members of the public being interviewed. This is because it really shines light on how closed off from the world we really are, this scene allows the audience to reflect and think.

Moment

2024-06-12 08:35:46 UTC

I like the cyclical structure that you created using the verbatim, it helped to show clearly where the issue started and ended. I also like how you used the movement sequence with the chair when you showed the tense relationship with the characters.

Moment

2024-06-12 08:35:54 UTC

I liked the symbolism of the chair and the movement when everyone was fighting for it. The cyclical structure of beginning and ending with the same scene was very strong. There was also really strong characterization such as Ash's multi-roleing switching between characters.

Moment

2024-06-12 08:36:04 UTC

My favourite moment was the scene where the characters were fighting over the "chair" (gcse results) i could clearly see at some points it was used as a "shield" against the characters father which was also broken down by the father and then later also as a jail as the character is locked in their room studying it created a dramatic effect which allowed the performance to be very interesting

Chair scene

2024-06-12 08:36:36 UTC

There was good symbolism in this scene because it showed how that one person can ruin a whole dynamic by doing or saying something yet they are still struggling themselves. It also showed how much pressure some people have on them, if someone has pressure on them they then put pressure on others so I think this scene was good for showing a multitude of different things.

moment

2024-06-12 08:36:53 UTC

I really liked the child and parent fighting over the chair I thought the chair was extremely symbolic and it gave the audience a physical understanding. I thought it was quite interesting since it was more effective than use something smaller.

Moment

2024-06-12 08:44:10 UTC

My favourite moment is the scene where they present how rumors are actually spread from one person saying something and it spirals into something much worse, it allows the audience to see how we can twist the truth just because we don't like someone and then the spotlight is on them for something that they did not do/say

Idea

2024-06-12 08:45:04 UTC

Could maybe have stronger characterization to make it more interesting. I loved the scene of all the influencers making a video and all ending together and showing the duality behind the screens.

idea

2024-06-12 08:45:34 UTC

it would be interesting to see the impact of social media (the after effects) on the characters

Moment

2024-06-12 08:46:26 UTC

I liked the call at the beginning and how multiple people were talking to the same person and how one person was in the middle of the circle. It showed the character feeling overwhelmed and the effects of rumours.