https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3 en-us 2016-11-16 13:44:05 UTC 2026-02-17 20:52:32 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138137568 Some areas of improvement on my paper are all of them but the most one that needs  improvement is my addressing the counter claim because i did both so i don't know if i will get points taken off.
The paper that I would like feedback on is all because i want to know if I did decent.]]> 2016-11-16 16:19:14 UTC https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138137568 https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138137649 I think th]]> 2016-11-16 16:19:21 UTC https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138137649 https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138137759 2016-11-16 16:19:30 UTC https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138137759 https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138137840 🔵 I think that it all needs improvement, but, I think my 2nd body area thingy needs the most improvement. 🔵 ★I would like feedback on all of my paper.☆]]> 2016-11-16 16:19:38 UTC https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138137840 https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138137965 2016-11-16 16:19:55 UTC https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138137965 https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138138014 2016-11-16 16:20:01 UTC https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138138014 https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138138328 My conclusion
I can't firgerout how to start continue and end it.

]]> 2016-11-16 16:20:34 UTC https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138138328 https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138138389 2016-11-16 16:20:39 UTC https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138138389 https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138138396 2016-11-16 16:20:39 UTC https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138138396 https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138138406 2016-11-16 16:20:41 UTC https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138138406 https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138138413 2016-11-16 16:20:41 UTC https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138138413 quirklesteins27 https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138138523 I think that my rebuttal may need some improvement because I wasn't really sure about how to make it. And, I would like feedback on all parts of my paper.]]> 2016-11-16 16:20:52 UTC https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138138523 https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138138541 Some areas that need improvement are not repeating things in my writing. Over all, I do think Idi]]> 2016-11-16 16:20:54 UTC https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138138541 https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138138554 i think it all ends some improvement mainly my evidence and reasoning though
and i feel that he could look on my topic sentenceing]]> 2016-11-16 16:20:56 UTC https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138138554 https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138138618 I think I could improve on my my topic sentences on my body paragraph sentences, andI would like feedback on my body paragraphs.]]> 2016-11-16 16:21:04 UTC https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138138618 https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138138620 2016-11-16 16:21:04 UTC https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138138620 https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138138674 2016-11-16 16:21:12 UTC https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138138674 https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138138750 I need to improve my rebuttal. It might be good, it might not, I'm not sure. I didn't state a very good reason that it is wrong, even though it is. I think my intro is very good and I would like feedback on it.
This was wrote with  💻 ]]> 2016-11-16 16:21:19 UTC https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138138750 https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138138897 I think that how i start my sentences is something that i need help on i would like feed back on my conclusion and i also need help on that.

]]> 2016-11-16 16:21:38 UTC https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138138897 https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138138974 I feel strong about my reason on why i think Joel is not honorable but i think i could use improvement with like supportive evidence also i need to improve with the quotes.😉]]> 2016-11-16 16:21:48 UTC https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138138974 https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138138994 I need improving in the middle of my essay. I would like feed back on the ending because it really isn't strong enough. My body i need help on.🤔]]> 2016-11-16 16:21:52 UTC https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138138994 https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138139196 2016-11-16 16:22:19 UTC https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138139196 https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138139197  I think my evidence is good but maybe my reasoning and transitions could use some work. Also my honor section(first parish on the organizer). I would like feedback ]]> 2016-11-16 16:22:19 UTC https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138139197 https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138139321 I need to improve my conclusion and I would like feedback for my introduction and conclusion.]]> 2016-11-16 16:22:29 UTC https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138139321 https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138139416 2016-11-16 16:22:40 UTC https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138139416 https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138139417 I feel that part that I need to improve on is my transitions and my first paragraph's supporting reasons. So, I would like productive feedback on those parts.
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]]> 2016-11-16 16:22:40 UTC https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138139417 https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138139421 my ideas are a bit weak and don't go in order from what happens from beginning to end.....]]> 2016-11-16 16:22:41 UTC https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138139421 https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138139553 in]]> 2016-11-16 16:22:54 UTC https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138139553 https://padlet.com/tshephard1/ujpb1ghsr9n3/wish/138139569 1. introduction
2. body

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