Quote Often but Quote Well by Vanessa Halling https://padlet.com/v_halling/udz2hfwozhmnsg95 Read the given passage and offer this writer some helpful advice about his/her use OR lack of use of quotations. HELP! en-us 2020-11-29 23:17:34 UTC 2020-12-01 17:19:18 UTC hello@padlet.com I hate wet and rainy days. It rained a lot in 1816.... a lot - like every day; the weather in Europe was abnormally wet because it rained in Switzerland on 130 out of the 183 days from April to September. If I was Mary Shelley I might decide to write a book too. After all, it was the only thing you could do without TV or anything. She said that she "passed the summer of 1816 in the environs of Geneva...we occasionally amused ourselves with some German stories of ghosts... These tales excited in us a playful desire of imitation" v_halling https://padlet.com/v_halling/udz2hfwozhmnsg95/wish/969489522 2020-11-29 23:22:11 UTC https://padlet.com/v_halling/udz2hfwozhmnsg95/wish/969489522 Medha https://padlet.com/v_halling/udz2hfwozhmnsg95/wish/976578750 The quote chosen was fitting for the context, but it could have been incorporated in your paragraph better. For example, you could have embedded the entire quote in your paragraph, and then analyzed it. ]]> 2020-12-01 17:12:35 UTC https://padlet.com/v_halling/udz2hfwozhmnsg95/wish/976578750 Daraja Brown https://padlet.com/v_halling/udz2hfwozhmnsg95/wish/976578981 The quote you chose was great, but I think you can utilize it better in your response. First of all, you can cite where specifically she said that for more context. The quote itself is speaking to how she spent time with those around her in the summer of 1816, so perhaps you could focus more on what she did do and embed your quote throughout it. I also really like how you contextualized the weather and rainy season, but it would carry more merit if you quoted/cited your statistic about the 130/183 days of rain.]]> 2020-12-01 17:12:38 UTC https://padlet.com/v_halling/udz2hfwozhmnsg95/wish/976578981 Isabella Tsai https://padlet.com/v_halling/udz2hfwozhmnsg95/wish/976579215 The quote chosen works nicely, however, the utilization of it was weak. In order to have a stronger response, utilizing the quote effectively would be the best choice. To do this, you should embed the quote into your response rather than citing it in its entirety. By doing so, it strengthens what you are saying rather than using it solely as a method of credibility. ]]> 2020-12-01 17:12:40 UTC https://padlet.com/v_halling/udz2hfwozhmnsg95/wish/976579215 Ty'Lee https://padlet.com/v_halling/udz2hfwozhmnsg95/wish/976579668 The quote they had was good but I feel like they should've had another quote before that to talk about the weather or how Shelley felt rather than just describing it in your own words.]]> 2020-12-01 17:12:44 UTC https://padlet.com/v_halling/udz2hfwozhmnsg95/wish/976579668 Lillian Sirju https://padlet.com/v_halling/udz2hfwozhmnsg95/wish/976579674 The quote you used fits the overall theme of your passage, but the contents of the quote can be embedded into your writing to help it flow better and be less jarring, in terms of going from your ideas to the quote's ideas. Since the you and the quote talk about passing the time, you can split the quote up based on that idea, and use Shelley's words (in quotations) and your own as one topic of a sentence, allowing your passage to flow better. ]]> 2020-12-01 17:12:44 UTC https://padlet.com/v_halling/udz2hfwozhmnsg95/wish/976579674 Cayce https://padlet.com/v_halling/udz2hfwozhmnsg95/wish/976580245 The quote used was a good quote, but I believe that it could have been analyzed better to fit your overall paragraph. The quote could have been cited it better, using commas and embedding the proper placement of where you found the quote. ]]> 2020-12-01 17:12:51 UTC https://padlet.com/v_halling/udz2hfwozhmnsg95/wish/976580245 Bhuvi https://padlet.com/v_halling/udz2hfwozhmnsg95/wish/976587970 While the chosen quote is a good quote, it is not used effectively to support a strong claim. The quote can be analyzed more in order to make it a strong supportive claim. It could also have been embedded better.]]> 2020-12-01 17:14:15 UTC https://padlet.com/v_halling/udz2hfwozhmnsg95/wish/976587970 Ky'Rion https://padlet.com/v_halling/udz2hfwozhmnsg95/wish/976588133 The quote and everything was good but I think that it would be best if you could cite exactly where that quote is in the story.]]> 2020-12-01 17:14:16 UTC https://padlet.com/v_halling/udz2hfwozhmnsg95/wish/976588133 Ayanna https://padlet.com/v_halling/udz2hfwozhmnsg95/wish/976593846 The quote works well, but you could transition into the quote better.]]> 2020-12-01 17:15:22 UTC https://padlet.com/v_halling/udz2hfwozhmnsg95/wish/976593846 Tomisin https://padlet.com/v_halling/udz2hfwozhmnsg95/wish/976598832 2020-12-01 17:16:19 UTC https://padlet.com/v_halling/udz2hfwozhmnsg95/wish/976598832