https://padlet.com/29xhorn/ubfy85ary5b3oz5a Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2022-10-21 14:45:28 UTC 2026-01-25 20:33:00 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet-uploads.storage.googleapis.com/1858791582/4bfa2131267b0cab1b2c28a2aba36f3e/5C39A034_A22C_4E1C_BB2D_FE9F78316C66.jpg https://padlet.com/29xhorn/ubfy85ary5b3oz5a/wish/2355697316 I liked all of your story bestie you had amazing details it was very long and you faced your fears ]]> 2022-10-25 15:43:56 UTC https://padlet.com/29xhorn/ubfy85ary5b3oz5a/wish/2355697316 29bhalpern https://padlet.com/29xhorn/ubfy85ary5b3oz5a/wish/2357735874 I really liked the amount of detail you put in your memoir. You put so much in I felt like I was next to you in the raft. I also really liked your inner thoughts a lot. I liked how at first you were scared then you liked it a bit then when you did the “2,4,6,8 who do we hate this river *clap clap* this river. Something you can improve is not doing more show not tell. I think the memoir was good overall though.]]> 2022-10-26 17:43:19 UTC https://padlet.com/29xhorn/ubfy85ary5b3oz5a/wish/2357735874 29mbrown https://padlet.com/29xhorn/ubfy85ary5b3oz5a/wish/2358031977 What I loved about your memoir was your strong choices of language for example “it was like preparing for war on those boats”. My second star that I like about your story is your ending, I loved how your ending started with an inner thought. What I would improve is your realization, I was a little sad that I didn’t get to see a lot of that in your memoir. (And no cosmic brownies!)

]]> 2022-10-26 21:58:34 UTC https://padlet.com/29xhorn/ubfy85ary5b3oz5a/wish/2358031977 29dsmeltzer https://padlet.com/29xhorn/ubfy85ary5b3oz5a/wish/2489972555 Some good things about this piece is definitely the word “indubitably” at the end of CEES paragraph 2. The word choices are fantastic and choice. Such as in the first CEES paragraph, it says “-pull an all-nighter-…” which in my opinion is pretty good. Or maybe the last CEES paragraphs go to the heart. It was a very odd (in the good way) one to say the least. It really surprised me. I didn’t expect there to be death, but I still enjoyed it. But there is a couple grammar issues such as spaces not being made after a period, and no period at all. But that’s all I can really think of, besides those it’s basically perfect! Keep up the good work!]]> 2023-02-21 16:37:21 UTC https://padlet.com/29xhorn/ubfy85ary5b3oz5a/wish/2489972555 29rvijayan https://padlet.com/29xhorn/ubfy85ary5b3oz5a/wish/2523728336 Hi, Xavier! A strength of your theme analysis paragraph, is the transitions you added it hooks the reader.  In addition, I like how you truly explain what your theme is and what Piper has done. However, a suggestion that I can offer for improvement is to perhaps give an easier explanation of your evidence in your own words.]]> 2023-03-20 14:56:35 UTC https://padlet.com/29xhorn/ubfy85ary5b3oz5a/wish/2523728336 29rvijayan https://padlet.com/29xhorn/ubfy85ary5b3oz5a/wish/2533238682 Hi Xavier, I think your evidence was good, because its lengthy and provides a bunch of details about your Pixar short For The Birds. I also like the way you use your transitions such as “secondly”, “In life” and etc. However a suggestion that I can offer is to make your explanation longer.]]> 2023-03-27 14:48:57 UTC https://padlet.com/29xhorn/ubfy85ary5b3oz5a/wish/2533238682