Matthew G Google Sites Peer Feedback 2021 - 2022 by Matthew Gaona https://padlet.com/28mgaona/ub8vgxemqbygq1nv Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2021-10-04 14:45:37 UTC 2021-12-02 16:48:18 UTC hello@padlet.com https://www.kolpaper.com/wp-content/uploads/2021/04/Boyfriend-FNF-Wallpaper-3.jpg https://padlet.com/28mgaona/ub8vgxemqbygq1nv/wish/1800078758 I loved lots of things about your Writing!!  One thing that I liked was how your greeting was full of enthusiasm, and how you “secretly” added in the Flavor Blasted goldfish as one of you likes.one thing that I wish you could do is to add more detail to your likes. ]]> 2021-10-07 14:51:01 UTC https://padlet.com/28mgaona/ub8vgxemqbygq1nv/wish/1800078758 Stephen G. (For M.I.M.) 28sgaona https://padlet.com/28mgaona/ub8vgxemqbygq1nv/wish/1923269852 A strength of your memoir is the way in which you include onomatopoeia such as, “Chaka Chaka Chaka,” or “nom nom nom.” It helped me visualize what the elevator sounded like and gave me a clearer picture of where you were and what you heard in the moment. I also like how you described what you saw for example, “The timeline of New York.” It helped me see what you were seeing and seeing how tall up you were. However, something you could improve on is to try and be less repetitive. While I was reading your memoir, it became predictable and boring. If you want readers to be hooked, try and make it less repetitive.





]]> 2021-12-01 16:48:49 UTC https://padlet.com/28mgaona/ub8vgxemqbygq1nv/wish/1923269852 Bruh that pic be sus 28gkonig https://padlet.com/28mgaona/ub8vgxemqbygq1nv/wish/1925392151 I liked how you were using voice as if it was fighting against your self. I like how it was very inside and a little war inside your head. I like how at the beginning it was very descriptive and I really enjoyed reading it. Thumbs up! Very Good! I just wish that you could have used less Dialogue because it was throwing me off track. Over all pretty good!]]> 2021-12-02 15:14:54 UTC https://padlet.com/28mgaona/ub8vgxemqbygq1nv/wish/1925392151 your piece was awesome! I really loved how you added many inner thoughts, like “oh my gosh! What if I fall off? It really helped understand your fears a lot better. I also liked how you kept having nightmares about falling off the building. It added quite a bit of humor when you woke up not once, but twice! One thing that you could work on was your takeaway. Sorry to say this, but I felt that it wasn’t really that much of a lesson. Maybe you could add some meaning into it? 28tbeach https://padlet.com/28mgaona/ub8vgxemqbygq1nv/wish/1925491542 2021-12-02 15:54:53 UTC https://padlet.com/28mgaona/ub8vgxemqbygq1nv/wish/1925491542 Your friend Cooper 28cblank1 https://padlet.com/28mgaona/ub8vgxemqbygq1nv/wish/1925619704 This was a great Piece! I loved how you had a dream where you feel 102 stories to your death then woke up! That was amazing, and then you faced your dreams fear of falling, and it turned out you shouldn’t be scared of your own nightmares, because you should explore the real place if it is, in real life! The only thing I think you could have added with it was some more story! I literally loved the story man! I hope you could do more so I could read More! Shalom! -Cooper ]]> 2021-12-02 16:48:18 UTC https://padlet.com/28mgaona/ub8vgxemqbygq1nv/wish/1925619704