https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4 en-us 2023-02-09 11:33:54 UTC 2023-02-10 01:25:06 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.net/icons/png/1f600.png ng_yan_xue_kaiser https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2474868233 2023-02-09 11:37:08 UTC https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2474868233 ng_yan_xue_kaiser https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2474868513 At most two groups per character]]> 2023-02-09 11:37:23 UTC https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2474868513 teo_xin_hui_joyce1 https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2474897004 The character dont have to be from LOF]]> 2023-02-09 12:06:15 UTC https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2474897004 ng_yan_xue_kaiser https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2474899444 The well-dressed man tapped his foot to the rhythm of his heartbeat, humming a monotonous tone. He put down his dull-coloured briefcase, adjusted his tie and shifted his eyes to his watch - Three o'clock. "Has the train not arrived?" He murmured. The longer he stood, the more the shiny black shoe made contact with the ground. He pursed his lips, gritting his teeth. " The train ahead has stopped for serious reasons. There will be a delay." The words of the public address system hit him like a spear. His fingers started to wiggle as numbers flowed into his head; he muttered, "Three forty, wait, no Three forty-five, I'm done for."  He could feel the ever-so-increasing heartbeat on the side of his neck; the taps got louder, and he realised he would be late for the meeting with the VIP customer. He tilted his brow, doubting if the train would come anymore. He glanced at his watch again; the time on the phone seemed to be laughing at him. Knowing he would be more than thirty minutes late, his wiggling fingers shifted to make a fist. The irritation was becoming unbearable. Just as a river of colourful language started flowing out of his mouth, a beam of light entered his peripheral vision, and a steadily increasing sound of chugging met his ears. He turned his head, pleasantly surprised. " Your seat here, mister." The train attendant welcomed the man in black and white. Relieved, he used the end of his sleeves to wipe the droplets off his forehead, took a deep breath and made a beeline for the doors, eager to move again.]]> 2023-02-09 12:08:42 UTC https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2474899444 mmzlll https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2474956837 You only had to look at the businessman to infer he had somewhere to go to, and he wasn't happy that he wasn't there yet. His restless posture and disgruntled expression gave away his impatience immediately. Occasionally glancing at his watch, he muttered a few soft, unintelligible words that were better not being heard by anyone else, sometimes shifting his weight from one foot to the other. As time passed, his face betrayed greater anxiety levels, up to the point when you could see the beads of sweat on his forehead from a few metres away. Finally giving in, the businessman started to leaf through his meeting notes, killing time by flipping through his meeting notes. Finding that leafing through his notes only increased his panic, he returned them to his leather briefcase, his face now beet red both from heat and anxiety. His free hand clenched into a fist, imagining himself releasing his anger on the bus driver, who took what the businessman thought was an eternity to arrive. The bus driver arrived five minutes later to a red-faced man in a suit, ready to hurl his leather briefcase at the him. ]]> 2023-02-09 13:00:44 UTC https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2474956837 teo_xin_hui_joyce1 https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2474970953 2023-02-09 13:12:44 UTC https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2474970953 leong_tian_qi https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2475021256 At an abandoned construction site, a man stood upright; arms crossed, many more were behind him. He was different from them, with a more muscular and burly frame, which gave him a look of superiority amongst the rest, instilling fear into those who dared come his way. He was like the alpha of his wolf pack, and the construction site was their home. "What are you doing in our territory?" He bellowed. For every step he advanced toward the opposing gang, a loud cracking of knuckles could be heard. The "weaker ones" of the conflicting gang began cowering, under his shadow, slowly retreating afterward. The gang leader, however, was left unfazed. He stood alone; his men had already backed a few metres. So you're not like your herd of cowards, huh? You dare to challenge me? Although the brawny man did not say it verbally, his actions spoke for him. He raised his spiked club, up to leverage with the opposing gang leader's face. Seeing the weapon, the leader's face contorted in fear as he slowly backed off, step by step, with his hands in the air. He had reached his limit and had no choice but to invade another gang. Soon, the loud humming of motorcycle engines faded as their gang disappeared into the horizon. "Another day's job of defending our home. This is how you do it, boys!" The gangster roared and was returned with cheers and shouts of approval.]]> 2023-02-09 13:48:11 UTC https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2475021256 leong_tian_qi https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2475035987 The burly gangster, along with his gang members, retreated back into his concrete forest for a well-deserved rest. "Dad! you did amazing today! And your club, it's so cool!" "you weren't supposed to see that!" He chuckled in a deep tone, picking his son up onto his shoulders.]]> 2023-02-09 13:57:13 UTC https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2475035987 teo_xin_hui_joyce1 https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2475764726 She had a slim body that looked like an hourglass. The wind ran through her silky smooth umber brown hair. Her beauty shined as bright as the sun. As she walks along the catwalk, the crowd of people parted like the Red Sea. Everyone's eyes were fixed on the shining gem. It seemed as if the crowd was packed like sardines. She thought, "there are so many paparazzi and people here." Her graceful waves at the sea of fans enforced her elegant image even more.]]> 2023-02-10 00:09:31 UTC https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2475764726 kasperchanzh https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2475795730 “And the winner is… Kadpeed!” exclaimed the principal as a tall and scrawny boy walked with big confident strides. He was wearing a smug and tilted-up face that had complacency written all over it. Grinning like a cheshire cat, his head was tilted upwards and his hands in his pockets as if to say he was better than everyone. He reached out with his large hands and received his trophy. ]]> 2023-02-10 00:47:42 UTC https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2475795730 eden_xie_zheng_heng https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2475802642 The man swaggered in as he shot dagger-like looks at all his other colleagues. Donning a sleeveless flannel jacket with a white singlet and having a bald cut, he was one of the most feared gangsters out of all of the others. Tattoos could be seen on every inch of his body. He had a burly build, even the bravest of people did not dare to ever stand in his way. Every time he strolled on the streets, everyone readily gave way to him.

]]> 2023-02-10 00:56:36 UTC https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2475802642 gavriel7chia https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2475805266 Repeated the word impatient and businessman.

Do not use "you".

Add more adjectives/descriptive-For example, for the briefcase, write "Gucci leather briefcase"

A businessman will not take public transport]]> 2023-02-10 00:59:47 UTC https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2475805266 leong_tian_qi https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2475808856 - Repeated words: burly, replace with brawny
- Add more description: e.g., tattoos, outfit]]> 2023-02-10 01:04:14 UTC https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2475808856 seth_tan_jun_de https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2475811067 2023-02-10 01:07:06 UTC https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2475811067 seth_tan_jun_de https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2475813196 His speech was haughty and dripping with conceit, as he pontificated about his vast knowledge and mocked others for their perceived ignorance. Considering himself a veritable fount of knowledge, he considered those around him mere intellectual inferiors. As a result of his arrogance, others recoiled from his presence, leaving a trail of resentment and animosity in his wake. He would sneer at those who dared challenge him and show off his superior intellect as well. To prove his dominance, he often interrupted others mid-sentence. As arrogant as his behavior was, the scholar's appearance was equally so. As if daring others to question his superiority, he held his chin high and his gaze downcast. His speech was splattered with condescension, and he moved with the arrogant swagger of a peacock. He was a "towering inferno of conceit."]]> 2023-02-10 01:10:04 UTC https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2475813196 https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2475816504 Choose word that match the situation
For example, a negative connotation and negative character

Remove things that have already been used

Give more details about how arrogant this character is.


]]> 2023-02-10 01:14:12 UTC https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2475816504 https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2475816926 Do not use "grinning like a Cheshire cat" as it is positive while the character is negative. Instead, we can use something like "nasty sneer" or "lopsided grin" and remove "tilted-up face" as it is repeated. Describe character more effectively.]]> 2023-02-10 01:14:47 UTC https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2475816926 ng_yan_xue_kaiser https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2475818628 -Time is money
- Good description :)]]> 2023-02-10 01:17:10 UTC https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2475818628 chia_jia_en_angelyn https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2475820231 Be clear about what you are trying to convey.
Don't repeat adjectives, instead use synonyms of the adjective.
Avoid using the word 'you', use first-person or third-person pronouns.
Make your character believable, do not give them traits that don't support the image you are aiming for. Choose words that suit the situation.
Describe your characters stereotypically
Choose a fitting place for your description to take place.

]]> 2023-02-10 01:19:24 UTC https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2475820231 seth_tan_jun_de https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2475821118 use appropriate speech 
the speaker is supposed to sound excited
delete the boastful cause he doesn't show any part of it. Need to show he's mean to his friend etc.
need put in more effort
rewrite]]> 2023-02-10 01:20:38 UTC https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2475821118 kong_le_xin_samuel https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2475821347 A man of great intelligence and ambition, he was often seen as a leader among his peers. His knowledge was vast and his opinions were highly sought after. He was often seen as the go-to person for advice and guidance. Despite his wisdom, he had a tendency to be a bit overbearing and domineering. He was not afraid to voice his thoughts and could be quite vocal about his beliefs. His manner of speaking could sometimes come off as condescending and dismissive, but his intentions were always well-meaning.]]> 2023-02-10 01:20:59 UTC https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2475821347 lim_wei_zong https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2475821725 takeaways

1. we need to describe characters more thoroughly and use more precise adjectives

2. use more dialogue]]> 2023-02-10 01:21:35 UTC https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2475821725 https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2475821814 try to make it more logical and specific, and less grammar mistakes]]> 2023-02-10 01:21:45 UTC https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2475821814 https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2475821851 We should describe characters sterotypical, and be descriptive]]> 2023-02-10 01:21:48 UTC https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2475821851 chia_jia_en_angelyn https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2475821989 I take that we should improve on our grammar and be more specific on what we are trying to convey about our character.]]> 2023-02-10 01:22:01 UTC https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2475821989 wzx https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2475822026 We need to have adjectives and vocabulary to describe characters more. We learnt more about how to apply STEAL. ]]> 2023-02-10 01:22:04 UTC https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2475822026 kong_le_xin_samuel https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2475822496 The man was highly intelligent and knowledgeable, but often exhibited an air of superiority and pride. He was often seen as an expert in his field, and he had often flaunted his achievements. He possessed a confidence that bordered on conceit, and he was not afraid to express his opinions. He was opinionated and overbearing, but he also had a great deal of insight and wisdom.]]> 2023-02-10 01:22:43 UTC https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2475822496 kasperchanzh https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2475823841 Connotation method with character, pairing neg connotation with neg character for xample,do not repeat same vocab]]> 2023-02-10 01:24:37 UTC https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2475823841 teo_xin_hui_joyce1 https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2475823863 We must not repeat the words that are in the topic.
We must use STEAL, more good descriptive words, and we can work on our grammar and a more wide variety of vocabulary.]]> 2023-02-10 01:24:39 UTC https://padlet.com/ng_yan_xue_kaiser/ub8p7b7rio5tkdr4/wish/2475823863