I hope you're well. I found your IO very good and with a lot of potential, there is a lot of context and information in the background.

However, it is necessary to improve the answers to the questions so that they are not too descriptive.

Your score is: 16

Best regards,

Leonardo

Score: 18

OMAR: You did a really good job. You explained the characters clearly and also the rhetorical devices, which shows a solid understanding of the text. The only thing you could improve is making some of your answers a little longer to give them more depth. Other than that, everything was really good.

Score: 18

Grade: 17/20

First of all, I consider the presentation to be pertinent, since it adequately mentions the characters, rhetorical devices such as simile or metaphor, as well as the internal or external conflict. Something I highlight is the correct use of the terms specific to the extract and, as a consequence, the story "The Velt" itself. Now, with respect to the answers to the first questions focused on the content of the extract, I noticed a great effort. However, I don't think it was very argumentative in the sense that it made any reference to the story. Although on some occasions events from the story were mentioned, they were not related or linked as such. With respect to the last two questions highlighted by the IB itself, the answers were pertinent, and something I highlight is the relationship or link that the student imposed when answering their questions. Although I think that to a certain extent there was not much fluency and in some cases the sentences were poorly spoken. Aside from that, overall both the presentation and the responses were relatively good and compelling.

SCORE: 16

Score: 17

However, there are also some points to improve. For example, it would be better if he described the characters in the scene in more detail, as this would make the analysis richer.

“With practice, he can achieve even more.”

Score: 18

Score: 17/20

On the positive side, he comments on the background of the book, such as the author, and provides a brief and clear context for the novel. In terms of analysis, it mentions the rhetorical devices with explanation and analysis, the setting, the characters, and the theme of the excerpt selected. Similarly, in the questions, it uses quotes clearly and justifiably.

On the negative side, it should remember to mention the internal and external conflict on other occasions, and most importantly, a conclusion to the analysis. As for the questions, you should control the time of your answers, since in question number 1, the time is short.

In general, I recommend using more fluid and argumentative language.

Aguirre:

Score: 18

On the positive side, you mention all the parts of a good analysis of the excerpt, similar to the question, you use your time in the best way, and your language is more fluid and sequential.

On the negative side, we recommend ending the analysis with a conclusion and using quotes in the questions section.

Your audio is clear. In the first moment you have mentioned all the relevant elements of the Individual Oral. But, you could to improve in the part of "characters" because it is a little understandable when you mention the characteristics of the characters. In the second moment you answer and an analysis is evident, you could to improve in the pronuntiation of some words. It´s mention the IB theme "Human Ingenuity" and it is explained, connecting it with short store.

SCORE: 16

Score: 17

Another positive point is that she organized her ideas in a clear and logical way, which made the presentation easy to follow. She also connected her answers with real-life situations, which made the presentation more meaningful. In addition, she referred to some IB global themes.

If there is one small point to improve, it could be the inclusion of a quotation, as that would have added more depth to her analysis. However, this does not reduce the overall quality of her presentation.

“She has great potential to keep improving.”

Score: 19

SCORE: 18

So, you have 10/20. :)