https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i LO: To be able to edit and improve a news article en-us 2022-03-03 02:37:57 UTC 2023-03-09 06:48:42 UTC hello@padlet.com 19zng https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074913800 2022-03-03 03:00:53 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074913800 19zng https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074914325 2022-03-03 03:01:11 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074914325 19echye https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074914931 2022-03-03 03:01:33 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074914931 19ylau https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074915054 2022-03-03 03:01:39 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074915054 https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074915730 First page]]> 2022-03-03 03:02:06 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074915730 19ylau https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074915756 2022-03-03 03:02:06 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074915756 19ltai https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074915821 2022-03-03 03:02:09 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074915821 19echye https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074916009 2022-03-03 03:02:17 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074916009 19ltai https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074916207 e]]> 2022-03-03 03:02:25 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074916207 https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074917075 2022-03-03 03:03:00 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074917075 ssicheng https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074917690 2022-03-03 03:03:23 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074917690 https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074918839 2022-03-03 03:04:08 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074918839 ssicheng https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074919074 2022-03-03 03:04:16 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074919074 19ylau https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074919302 The headline is good

Yii Chern]]> 2022-03-03 03:04:25 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074919302 19kmuri https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074920593 2022-03-03 03:05:15 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074920593 19kmuri https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074921316 2022-03-03 03:05:43 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074921316 19echye https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074921409 I like your lead but you could improve in how formal you write.]]> 2022-03-03 03:05:46 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074921409 19ylau https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074922444
Yii Chern]]> 2022-03-03 03:06:26 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074922444 19kmuri https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074922714 2022-03-03 03:06:37 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074922714 19achin https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074923318 2022-03-03 03:07:01 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074923318 19kmuri https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074923426 2022-03-03 03:07:05 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074923426 19achin https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074924075 2022-03-03 03:07:28 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074924075 19ylau https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074924519 Pleas

Yii Chern]]> 2022-03-03 03:07:44 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074924519 19eleong https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074925149 2022-03-03 03:08:04 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074925149 19ylau https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074925553 You deleted the post and edited the e

Yii Chern]]> 2022-03-03 03:08:20 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074925553 19eleong https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074925675 2022-03-03 03:08:25 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074925675 19among https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074927901 2022-03-03 03:09:52 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074927901 19ocheim https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074928628 2022-03-03 03:10:22 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074928628 19among https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074928643 2022-03-03 03:10:22 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074928643 19ocheim https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074929144 2022-03-03 03:10:42 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074929144 19kmuri https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074929252 You could try using third person instead of first person]]> 2022-03-03 03:10:47 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074929252 19ocheim https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074930422 Good headline I like that it was informative and helped me tell what the article was about.]]> 2022-03-03 03:11:30 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074930422 https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074931001 2022-03-03 03:11:54 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074931001 19kmuri https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074931128 I like your lead because it has all the 5 Ws]]> 2022-03-03 03:11:59 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074931128 https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074931523 2022-03-03 03:12:15 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074931523 19ylau https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074932081 Yii Chern]]> 2022-03-03 03:12:36 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074932081 verda_ https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074932125 2022-03-03 03:12:38 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074932125 verda_ https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074932569 2022-03-03 03:12:54 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074932569 19psathish https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074933464 2022-03-03 03:13:24 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074933464 19ylau https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074933725
Yii Chern]]> 2022-03-03 03:13:34 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074933725 19ocheim https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074933768 Great conclusion because it summarizes what happens.]]> 2022-03-03 03:13:36 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074933768 19among https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074933962 the writing is very faint]]> 2022-03-03 03:13:44 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074933962 19psathish https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074934019 2022-03-03 03:13:46 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074934019 19psathish https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074934496 2022-03-03 03:14:06 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074934496 https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074937013 2022-03-03 03:15:47 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074937013 19kmuri https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074937949 I like your caption because you described it very well]]> 2022-03-03 03:16:22 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074937949 19ylau https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074937966
Yii Chern]]> 2022-03-03 03:16:22 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074937966 19achin https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074938254 The sentence starter is attractive, but maybe you could add a better conclusion then stopping there?]]> 2022-03-03 03:16:33 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074938254 19ocheim https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074938258 Amazing report Chi Fung I liked your vocabulary.
I wouldn’t use a fake phone number if I were you because it could be another persons phone number.]]> 2022-03-03 03:16:33 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074938258 verda_ https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074938628 ikr]]> 2022-03-03 03:16:49 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074938628 19echye https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074939917 Your lead is very catchy and descriptive but maybe you can make it a little bit more formal and try to make the title a little catchier.]]> 2022-03-03 03:17:40 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074939917 19ocheim https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074940891 Owen]]> 2022-03-03 03:18:20 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074940891 19nanand https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074940973 2022-03-03 03:18:23 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074940973 https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074941092 2022-03-03 03:18:28 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074941092 19hbae https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074941196 2022-03-03 03:18:32 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074941196 19achin https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074941250 Ok, thanks😊]]> 2022-03-03 03:18:34 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074941250 19psathish https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074941279 I agree with kaye]]> 2022-03-03 03:18:35 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074941279 19kmuri https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074941539 Try not to randomly use capital letters before the full stop]]> 2022-03-03 03:18:45 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074941539 19hbae https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074941847 2022-03-03 03:18:58 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074941847 verda_ https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074942240 let me correct the grammar….
disrespected and* defaced teachers for the headline]]> 2022-03-03 03:19:12 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074942240 19ocheim https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074942468 Try to use a different headline as others have already used that one. There are many other headlines you could have used.]]> 2022-03-03 03:19:21 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074942468 19ylau https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074943605
Yii Chern]]> 2022-03-03 03:20:04 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074943605 19ocheim https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074943677 I like your headline because it isn’t the same as others.]]> 2022-03-03 03:20:08 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074943677 19psathish https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074943748 Good approach, try not to put capital randomly. Well tried. :)]]> 2022-03-03 03:20:11 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074943748 19nanand https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074944575 2022-03-03 03:20:42 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074944575 19ltai https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074945246 landon]]> 2022-03-03 03:21:08 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074945246 verda_ https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074945954 on the first picture, try not to make your words go out of the box. maybe move them to another line.
also why are there spaces in the first two lines??
also the headline is the same as multiple other headlines go check.]]> 2022-03-03 03:21:34 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074945954 19asoo https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074946696 2022-03-03 03:21:57 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074946696 https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074947049 Amazing lead and a amazing quote good job]]> 2022-03-03 03:22:09 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074947049 19asoo https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074947117 2022-03-03 03:22:12 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074947117 19psathish https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074947308 Bro, the headline is too long.]]> 2022-03-03 03:22:19 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074947308 19nanand https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074948858 I like your lead because it consists 5Ws.]]> 2022-03-03 03:23:21 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074948858 19asoo https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074948977 I feel like your lead is revealing to much information ]]> 2022-03-03 03:23:26 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074948977 verda_ https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074949410 next time, maybe come up with a more unique headline as countless and multiple people have this same exact headline.]]> 2022-03-03 03:23:43 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074949410 19nanand https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074950665 The headline is catchy and it’s a well describing one.]]> 2022-03-03 03:24:33 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074950665 19asoo https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074950674 I like the way you written your headline in a bold way]]> 2022-03-03 03:24:33 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074950674 19asoo https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074951938 I think your lead reveals too much info]]> 2022-03-03 03:25:21 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074951938 19zng https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074952342 Nice headline creative]]> 2022-03-03 03:25:36 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074952342 19ltai https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074952873 landon]]> 2022-03-03 03:25:55 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074952873 19among https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074953595 try to make the words not go out the box. also, the spelling of visitors in your lead is wrong.]]> 2022-03-03 03:26:22 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074953595 19psathish https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074954437 I can’t see your words. Too light]]> 2022-03-03 03:26:54 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074954437 verda_ https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074956031 On the* open day. also, i like how you  have written down how many teachers there were on the Open Day.]]> 2022-03-03 03:27:59 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074956031 19ylau https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074956223
Yii Chern]]> 2022-03-03 03:28:07 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074956223 19achin https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074956820 You have added a very catchy headline that pulls the reader in.]]> 2022-03-03 03:28:27 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074956820 19ltai https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074957176 Landon ]]> 2022-03-03 03:28:42 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074957176 19ocheim https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074962154 I like how you used the words ‘popped out’ in your lead.]]> 2022-03-03 03:30:22 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074962154 19asoo https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074962923 I think you should take your picture in a place with better lighting ]]> 2022-03-03 03:30:37 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074962923 verda_ https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074964204 On the first page after the date, the “The” has a capital letter which is not supposed to be there.]]> 2022-03-03 03:31:02 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074964204 19kmuri https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074965041 In your lead, you could write vandalised instead of vandalism because it’s past tense]]> 2022-03-03 03:31:19 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074965041 19ltai https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074965670 landon]]> 2022-03-03 03:31:32 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074965670 19eleong https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074967227 The first paragraph got me interested I think so good job.]]> 2022-03-03 03:32:03 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074967227 19ocheim https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074967780 The correct spelling for the headline is ‘vandalism’.]]> 2022-03-03 03:32:14 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074967780 19achin https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074967885 You have a very informative lead while letting out suspense for the reader to find out by reading more, maybe you could add a more formal conclusion.]]> 2022-03-03 03:32:15 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074967885 19asoo https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074968637 Why did your writing suddenly go very faint?]]> 2022-03-03 03:32:28 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074968637 verda_ https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074983853 The second page says 
At least 50 families came to visit H.I.S on its Open Day. Mr Shane said in the interview that he would check the security cameras but the camera nearest to the destroyed year 5 starboard was blocked by the countless lockers which made them unable to see what happened and who did it. The bored teenagers was a suspect aswell because they were in or near the year five corridor and so they could be the one to do it but, there were also some parents in or near the year 5 corridor who were comparing the school to other schools and they said things like “That other school has more trophies” and other similar comments.

hope this helped]]> 2022-03-03 03:42:44 UTC https://padlet.com/phriyashini_sugumara/u8uwdqyppgni1b5i/wish/2074983853