Rosalie's Google Sites Peer Feedback 2019 - 2020 by Rosalie Yaney https://padlet.com/26ryaney/u721cuxlnonq Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2019-12-05 15:53:09 UTC 2025-11-14 02:34:44 UTC hello@padlet.com https://padlet.net/icons/png/1f61c.png Story Feedback https://padlet.com/26ryaney/u721cuxlnonq/wish/422239910 I liked this because this is a common problem that is hard to deal with and sometimes even I get stuck into this phone problem too. I liked how some bad things happened because Amy was so obsessed with her phone and it seemed very realistic. My wish is to add in more main characters. 


]]> 2019-12-10 16:02:47 UTC https://padlet.com/26ryaney/u721cuxlnonq/wish/422239910 Your piece “Tech Takeover” is all about how your character is addicted to her phone, and then something bad happens, and she wants to become a normal kid thats not on her phone all the time. So then she starts to get off her phone, and then gives up on her phone, and goes to get a flip phone so she can only call and text when she needs to. I think that you should add something before the very beginning part. I think this because it is the very beginning part and people want to be drawn to your story before all of the other details. Here's an example. “As i got out of my memory foam bed, I started dreading the school day immediately. As I put my shirt on, my blonde locks bounced up like me and my friends on a trampoline. I zoomed out the door because I thought I was going to die of starvation. 26dfarley https://padlet.com/26ryaney/u721cuxlnonq/wish/422240553 Delaney

]]> 2019-12-10 16:03:42 UTC https://padlet.com/26ryaney/u721cuxlnonq/wish/422240553 Story Feedback - Reilly 26ramberg https://padlet.com/26ryaney/u721cuxlnonq/wish/422515816 I really like your description! I feel like I was in the moment! I really like your story! I absolutely love how you ended your story! I thought your story was creative and a common problem. My favorite part was the ending when they said what they wanted to be then smiled at each other, I thought that was a creative way to end it and a brilliant way. I just hope you keep writing wonderful stories just like this one! ]]> 2019-12-11 01:20:34 UTC https://padlet.com/26ryaney/u721cuxlnonq/wish/422515816 Your story is very nice Rosie! I like creative you are it really shows! The end is very well put together! Your name tech takeover is a really cool name I like it. My wish is to keep up the good work I love your chose of words as well. 26bkgordon https://padlet.com/26ryaney/u721cuxlnonq/wish/1074311363 2021-01-11 14:54:25 UTC https://padlet.com/26ryaney/u721cuxlnonq/wish/1074311363