Topic sentece : On the one hand, there are several explanations for the fact that starting a job straight after school is a better path.

Supporting idea :

gain more experience and get income early

Supporting details:

+ Explaination : Having early exposure to job competition helps gain more experience and exposure.

                           quickly have income to cover living expenses

+ result :

-stable income, good living conditions

-early position in work

-Developing professional skills and knowledge can be helpful to build a career.                                                              

- Nowadays, employees respect high education diplomas and look for your curriculum vitae.                                             - For example , to be accepted as a doctor or a nurse in any hospital or clinic, it is mandatory to complete a university education.

Body 2:

-On the other hand, not only have college or university education received a prosperous occupation, but also there are a lot of successful such as get a job straight after graduation.                                       

-Therefore, it seems to be more profitable start looking for a job as soon as teens finish school.                                  - Furthermore, skills such as learning how to work under pressure or developing important practical skills in some field might reflect in more chances to succeed in some careers than achieving a degree.

idea 1: higher education leads to more career opportunities

sp idea:

• required for certain jobs (doctor, lawyer)

• university graduates often earn higher salaries

ex: a person with a medical degree can become a doctor

idea 2: students can learn others skills like how to work in a team, solve problem or speak well

sp idea: graduates are usually better prepared for working environments where collaboration and clear communication are necessary

body 2:

main idea: starting work early brings experience and income

sp idea:

• become financially independent sooner

• not require a degree, such as in trades or sales, this path is more suitable

On the one hand, it is understandable why some people propose that it is better to find a job after high school instead of going to university

• Supporting idea 1: Fail university exam or not qualified

 Explanation: Don’t want to wait or retake the test.
 Result: Working keeps them active, helps them learn, and plan better.

• Supporting idea 2: Need to support family

 Explanation: Come from poor families and must earn money.
 Result: They reduce the family’s burden, act responsibly, and help younger siblings study.

Body 2

Finishing high school and then going to university is very important. Studying university before working brings many benefits such as: deep specialized knowledge, soft skills, an open network of relationships,communication problem-solving through group projects and presentations and better career opportunities

Body1: Explain why some people advocate getting a job after school

Topic sentence:On the other hand,some people argue that entering the workforce right after school has its advantages

sup idea 1: Gaining practical experience

Reason: Many industries, such as technology, sales, and marketing, value hands-on experience over academic credentials.

Explanation: Employers may believe that experience helps individuals solve problems more effectively and adapt quickly to the demands of the job.

sup idea 2: Financial independencereason:Starting work right after school helps individuals save money and avoid accumulating student debt.