https://padlet.com/27dlassman/u3j7gv6mpkc3p6ac Here, you can give me specific and valuable feedback on all of my writing pieces throughout the year! As you comment, please remember to be kind with your words. However, as you offer "Two Stars and a Wish," constructive criticism is certainly welcome! en-us 2021-01-05 16:48:41 UTC 2021-06-21 14:49:19 UTC hello@padlet.com https://media3.giphy.com/media/KslmxefvawJTddT3Qh/giphy.gif 27dlassman https://padlet.com/27dlassman/u3j7gv6mpkc3p6ac/wish/1064038705 thank you so much for reading my writing

]]> 2021-01-07 16:54:13 UTC https://padlet.com/27dlassman/u3j7gv6mpkc3p6ac/wish/1064038705 27mmartucci https://padlet.com/27dlassman/u3j7gv6mpkc3p6ac/wish/1074860357 Hi Dillion I like how you had so much descriptive writing. I also like how you do all these things like sacrifice your things for your new puppy Olive. Your ending was very good but I think maybe you could shorten it down a bit.]]> 2021-01-11 16:30:25 UTC https://padlet.com/27dlassman/u3j7gv6mpkc3p6ac/wish/1074860357 https://padlet.com/27dlassman/u3j7gv6mpkc3p6ac/wish/1074917470 Hi Dillon I really like how much detail you had and I really like all of you figurative language and inner thoughts you added and I can see how much you love olive.]]> 2021-01-11 16:39:51 UTC https://padlet.com/27dlassman/u3j7gv6mpkc3p6ac/wish/1074917470 27mmartucci https://padlet.com/27dlassman/u3j7gv6mpkc3p6ac/wish/1509796925 Hi Dillon! I liked how you started your introduction paragraph with that scene and you described it very well, but I can also relate to that because some morning on my way to school there has been a ton of traffic. I also liked how you elaborated on your paragraphs and by saying what and why you agree with that or what and why I don’t agree with. But one wish that for some scenes is that you could have kept going to make not only myself but other readers feel even more in the moment otherwise great job!

]]> 2021-05-10 15:55:44 UTC https://padlet.com/27dlassman/u3j7gv6mpkc3p6ac/wish/1509796925 27nhomer https://padlet.com/27dlassman/u3j7gv6mpkc3p6ac/wish/1509800125 Hi Dillon I really like how you described the traffic for the bus driver I also like how you mentioned all of the problems with everyone going to school at the at the same time and I really felt how chaotic it was for the bus driver 




]]> 2021-05-10 15:56:24 UTC https://padlet.com/27dlassman/u3j7gv6mpkc3p6ac/wish/1509800125 27mcoppockhuegel https://padlet.com/27dlassman/u3j7gv6mpkc3p6ac/wish/1510589639 Dillion, your piece was amazing! I really liked how you described the view of the bus drivers instead of the kids or teachers. I also liked how your end question got me thinking. " Are people willing to get an extra 30 to 45 mins of sleep at the sacrifice of many other people?". It was so good. I don't think I can think of something to change about it. Although in one spot there was no space after the punctuation. "usell time.And". That's it. It was amazing.

]]> 2021-05-10 18:31:41 UTC https://padlet.com/27dlassman/u3j7gv6mpkc3p6ac/wish/1510589639 27alandew https://padlet.com/27dlassman/u3j7gv6mpkc3p6ac/wish/1614378207 Hello Dillon! Your Creative Writing Piece was very good! I liked that in the log you had like a partner helping you out in your heist. Another part I liked was “the truth”. I Ike’s how you said the food would come together. It was very creative. My wish is that you used a bit more punctuation and grammar so that I knew who was talking more. But besides that great job!]]> 2021-06-18 14:07:04 UTC https://padlet.com/27dlassman/u3j7gv6mpkc3p6ac/wish/1614378207 27mmartucci https://padlet.com/27dlassman/u3j7gv6mpkc3p6ac/wish/1617802403 Hi Dillion! One star I have about your piece is I like how the log takes place and how the story starts and I also really like the setting for your log. Another star I have is I really like the real reason on what would happen if you don’t finish your food. One wish I have is that you fix a lot of errors because I noticed some stuff that was supposed to be capitalized wasn’t and it seemed like there was some random periods when the sentence could have kept going. Otherwise good job but next time make sure to revise your piece.]]> 2021-06-21 14:49:19 UTC https://padlet.com/27dlassman/u3j7gv6mpkc3p6ac/wish/1617802403