Writing a Paragraph - 4º Medio (29/9) by Italo Cornejo

3. Brainstorm (Student)

italocornejo1 — 2020-09-23 01:02:45 UTC

Student Name:

Topic:

Controversy:

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2. Brainstorm - Example

italocornejo1 — 2020-09-23 01:02:45 UTC

1. Brainstorm - Mind Map

italocornejo1 — 2020-09-23 01:02:45 UTC

5. Writing Stage - (Student)

italocornejo1 — 2020-09-23 01:07:31 UTC

Topic sentence:

Supporting detail 1:

Supporting detail 2:

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Closing sentence:

2020-09-28 12:30:04 UTC

Student Name: Eugenio

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Catalina Tobar

2020-09-28 12:34:34 UTC

Topic:
How the pandemic affects economic productivity?

Controversy:
It is important because with the current situation there has been a drop in productivity, in July Latin America and the Caribbean showed a drop in economic productivity, the most affected sectors are wholesale and retail trade; social and personal community activities; Hotels and restaurants; real estate, business, and rental activities, and manufacturing.

Stance: I think it would be interesting that in this period, given that unemployment increased in the quarantine, public policies are developed that allow the reconversion of workers. In this way, it helps the economic productivity of the countries.

Sources
https://www.cepal.org/es/comunicados/impactos-la-pandemia-sectores-productivos-mas-afectados-abarcaran-un-tercio-empleo-un

Millaray Paillafil

2020-10-05 12:07:42 UTC

Topic:
Do emotions and feelings affect our productivity?

Controversy:
Although there is a lot of scientific evidence some people still think that we can give our one hundred percent by having negative emotions and thoughts.

Stance:
I think it's an interesting topic to address because as a personal experience during the pandemic I realized how my feelings and negative emotions affected my school productivity.

Sources:
https://facilethings.com/blog/en/mood-and-productivity-have-a-strong-relationship

2020-10-05 12:10:42 UTC

Cecilia Araya
Topic: The postive and negative of being productive
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2020-10-05 12:11:34 UTC

José Zarate
Topic: how to study in a better way and not get bored
Controversy:

Catalina Tobar

2020-10-05 12:30:27 UTC

FINAL PROJECT
Topic sentence: Productivity in the Chilean economy has been affected due to the pandemic we are experiencing.
Support detail 1: first, there were lower trade flows, that is, the exchange of goods and services from the country with the world, there was also a drop in unemployment reaching 8.2%, registering the highest figure in ten years.
Support detail 2: Second, there was a deterioration in financial conditions, that is, access to external financing for governments and large companies will become more expensive.
Supporting detail 3: Third, there was a deterioration in the expectations of companies and individuals, which hurt investment decisions and consumption.
Final sentence: Finally, the economy is once again the focus of attention for Chileans, since, despite the coronavirus, they will have to continue looking for a way to improve their quality of life, in an increasingly dangerous scenario, full of uncertainty and in which one is not sure what the economic development of the country will be like.

Cecilia Araya - FINAL PROJECT

2020-10-05 12:34:25 UTC

Paragraph Structure
Topic sentence: In mi opinion ,productivity can cause negative effects on students.
Supporting detail 1: Stress, which causes serious illnesses, leading to suicide.For example
Supporting detail 2 : The level of demand for Korean students, who because of that only 9% enter the state university.
Supporting detail 3 : Half of the student population,when taking this exam is affected ,because they do not have enough money to pay for a private university, wich is more demanding with their studies
Closing sentence: Finally,overproductivity is bad for mental health, but many students risk their lives ,so that their parents do not pay for their university ,and lift their families out of poverty

italocornejo1 — 2020-10-05 12:35:45 UTC

italocornejo1 — 2020-10-05 12:36:02 UTC

Sofia Orellana - final project

2020-10-19 12:10:55 UTC

Topic sentence: "In my opinion the organization of schedules is better than working 24 hours a day, 7 days a week"
Supporting detail 1: In the first place, because by having blocks of schedules we relieve the stress that working 24/7 can cause.
Supporting detail 2: Second, by organizing the schedule helps us to be productive in a certain period, so we can have free time to rest and not work 24/7 like machines.
Supporting detail 3: Third, because working 24/7 without time blocks can cause diseases such as damaging arteries and increase the risk of stroke by 33%, in addition to suffering a heart attack by 46%
Closing sentence: Finally, we can say that working in blocks of hours is better than working 24/7 since we can have better health and free time to share with those close to us.

Millaray Paillafil - FINAL PROJECT

2020-10-19 12:16:09 UTC

Topic sentence: From my point of view, feelings and emotions do affect our productivity.
Supporting detail 1: Researchers identified a positive and significant relationship between depresion, anxiety and behavioral or desicional procrastination.
Supporting detail 2: The good mood, the feeling good, makes us more excited and more focused on whatever we do. Conversely, being in a bad mood, stressed out, or depressed prevents optimal levels of productivity from being reached.
Supporting detail 3:
Closing sentence:

Amy Fuentes Martínez- FINAL PROJECT

2020-10-20 15:05:27 UTC

Topic sentence: In my opinion, overproductivity has negatively affected some people, although many times it becomes a necessity.

Support detail 1: First,

overproductivity produces negative effects on people's health. For example, higher risk of diseases such as fatigue and higher levels of stress. Support detail 2: Second, overproductivity

can decrease the time that people can spend with your family. For example, people are further away from their families, which may cause a lack of affection or sadness.

Support detail 3: Third,
overproductivity negatively affects continents such as Africa and Asia. For example in Africa

there is a lot of poverty, that's why people have to work a lot, there is even child overexploitation, in order to survive.

Also in Asia there are some people die due to overwork, because

get stressed due to so much pressure. For example, a woman form Asia called Matsuri Takahashi, work 105 overtime hours a month, committed suicide because she can't stand the pressure, and I also talk about her work stress on her social media.

Closing sentence: Finally, overproductivity is negative for health, but unfortunately many people live out of a need to have money to survive.

tamara López Paucar

PanchitoUwU — 2020-10-22 22:30:33 UTC

FINAL PROJECT
Topic sentence: The correct balance between life and work
Supporting detail 1: People (as students or employees / workers) think that the more hours of study or work you do in a row, the better to achieve your goals. This is true up to a certain limit, as exceeding the time can even decrease performance, presenting itself as fatigue and a lack of enthusiasm for their duties or obligations, etc.
Supporting detail 2:These types of people are not capable of developing in another area of life, they leave aside other important aspects that as a person must develop and without realizing it they cannot advance, since they do not give all their effort in those jobs, without dedicating their concentration to duty, thus wasting more and more time.
Supporting detail 3: And talking about the consequences to health that the excessive time for job/ study can induce, are worrying if it is a serious situation in which that person was pushed to the limit, having consequences like; depressive feelings, excessive stress, syndrome of Burnout, memory lost, problems for sleep, gastic problems, among others. For this, it is always main, take care of your health, since without it you will not be able to obtain your goals, you will get the opposite, because all in excess is dangerous
Closing sentence: There are many variants by which these situations can be triggered, but for all this it is always relevant to realize how we lead our life before obtaining any consequence that prevents you from moving advance as it should be. And that is why I think that the topic should be talking with more recurrence, because we can all go through that, even more so in states like the ones we live in.

2020-10-25 18:18:31 UTC

José Zarate - final proyect
Topic sentence: Bad study causes the students do not perform good on his grade, that's why they exist tips that help for this to improve.
Support detail 1: when this happens it is because the student no this altogheter commited yo what you are studying, that's why it's important organize in times study and rest so as not to get bored and to have the highest possible concentration.
Support detail 2: the technology it affects the study as student pass more peding of social networks and thinks like that, and they don't care what is more important what is studying and many of these not take advantage the technology for the study that in these times it is very helpful, so it is important to have schedules for study and distractions and thus have a good performance.
Support detail 3: desmotivation is sometimes present and makes the students when studying be boring among other things what happens that studying is not a priority before any qualification and after that you get bad results in qualifications and for a bad form of study. You have to go looking different forms of studies like games, music so that studying is not boring but rather the opposite and be able to get the most out of the study.
Final sentence: to end we can say that to study in a good way there are many ways but there are people who take advantage of that and they get bad results.